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  1. Feb 2016
    1. just figured that they were looking for another car like Blaze’s

      What is the point of this story? What are we supposed to learn about you and your friends from it? I am not quite sure...

    2. are

      our

    3. s you can see sports have always been a big part of my life.

      Take a look at the topic sentence for this paragraph. Does it match the final sentence here?

    4. play

      Should this be past tense? You PLAYED it in middle school?

    5. grade, softball

      Comma Splice (CS)

    6. siblings

      the events belong to your siblings, so it should be possessive.

    7. brothers

      capitalize?

    8. kids their

      FS

    9. verything that I say or well said

      Not sure what this means...

    10. Pistache.

      How about adding hyperlinks to the hotel and the restaurant?

    11. Florida he

      FS (Fused sentence)

    12. that would makes me

      Read out loud. Can you hear the error?

    13. there

      there = a place their = something they possess

    14. Read this out loud slowly and you should hear the errors. Let me know if you don't.

    1. CC by:

      Usually we write CC BY

    2. Psychology? Maybe… How about Social Work? No, that’s not it. Elementary Education!

      Love this! Cute opening!

    1. Spelling error

    2. Fragment (semi-colon error).

    3. es, you’re right, it’s going to be hard.

      cs

    4. Comma splice.

    5. Comma splices...

    6. Everyone has options, it doesn’t matter who you are, there is always another way.

      More comma splices?

    7. In highschool he could have gotten a part time job, he could have sold his old clothes in order to get new ones, he had options.

      Comma splices, yes?

    8.  “A Man Interviewed From Prison Has A Message About Good Vs Bad That Everyone Should Read”

      If this is online, you should hyperlink it.

    9. persuation

      Spelling error

    1. See if you can "add a caption" to the picture instead of doing this. Also, see if you can click on the picture and change the settings so the text wraps around the image. It will look WAY better. See me for help with this!

    1. For my family personally

      I think this is great, and I would consider developing by adding a paragraph about what you personally think about all of this. This is a nice summary of where the numbers are pointing, but it feels like it's missing some anecdotal stories from actual people talking about why cable isn't meeting their needs. Maybe start with a little story, or expand this part about your own family to make it more engaging?

    2. Put titles of stuff in italics (or underline them).

    3. Label this "Assignment" so everyone knows that's what it is. You are also missing course and assignment objectives on here.

    4. Title your post so that it relates to what you actually focus on in your piece.

  2. Jan 2016
    1. In the case of Google Apps, you can download your files. But then you’ll need to find a new place to store them.

      Are you forgetting about google docs??

    2. And if a student owns their own domain, as she moves from grade to grade and from school to school, all that information — their learning portfolio — can travel with them.

      Agreed the author makes a valid point.

    3. In developing this “personal cyberinfrastructure” through the Domain of One’s Own initiative, UMW gives students agency and control; they are the subjects of their learning, not the objects of education technology software.

      I agree with what they are saying with it doesn't seem to nice to do such a thing to educational learners trying to learn...

    4. The author makes a good point here, I just think that it should remain an edu. because it's an education site.

    5. WordPress

      I think there are better options than wordpress such as Weebly, which is free.

    6. WordPress

      I think there are better options than wordpress such as Weebly, which is free.

    7. student’s choosing.

      I think this way it would have to be an edu to make sure it is educational, because you aren't paying for it, you're univerity is and it should be education like a way to further the university's research like a data base type deal

    8. believe that students need a proprietary online space in order to be intellectually productive.

      If only our school would figure out something better than moodel sadface

    9. Students have little agency when it comes to education technology — much like they have little agency in education itself.

      Agreed, because I think students don't get treated like adults they way they should be to slingshot them into the real world, but I think this issue goes far past just education technology.

    10. 170 bills proposed so far this year that would regulate it. These legislative efforts stress the need to protect students when they’re online, safeguarding their data from advertisers as well as from unscrupulous people and companies.

      This seems to me to be a serious topic the reason being is the web today is never what people thought it would be a long time ago, Nowadays there are layers people don't even know about that can't be seen by the public eye and companies pick and prod at any ad revenue they can get. I think theres needs to be away that if you have a tag on your internet usage saying you're from a university or college your info can't be used for ads or sold you companies this would fix this problem and help university students make a data for students to get together and further each other's research with out the worry of a "lumming figure" standing behind them trying to sell them things.