This article relates back to my panel because he was into art.
could you say this about any article or book "about" art? Seems this very broad connection isn't very useful. What specific idea or perspective does this piece offer (or not) that might (or might not) help you think about the panel differently?
This relates back to my panel in this way, because not only would America be different had this epidemic never came about but so would Andrew’s life.
The generality of information here doesn't seem to add to your understanding of art and its relationship to the epidemic. Was there anythign in the article you didn't know before?
changed peoples’ view on the epid
I think what is most interesting about the article is the notion that peoples' views change... From what to what? Do you think it's still relevant, this notion of change? In waht ways?
Next weekend Tacoma Art Museum explores that change in its groundbreaking national show “Art AIDS America.”
This work is from 2015, right? So the sentence here doesn't make sense.
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Assuncao, Muri. “How AIDS Changed Art Forever”. https://www.vice.com/en_us/article/3kkvdk/how-aids-changed-art-forever. 21 Aug. 2017.
This information comes first
Andrew Lowry is a male who passed away from HIV. He currently has a panel at The NAMES Project in Atlanta, Georgia.
This seems to come out of nowhere. Who is Lowry? Why is this information under your title?
“How I could start to incorporate these different modes in order to reach different interests, but still getting that one message acro
Good! examples?
In relevance to the Golden Record article, we see many different ways that one message can continue to change throughout time
This really just compares the texts.
Markel, Howard.
These citations need to go above the evaluations.
believe he wants people to get finished reading this and not judge those who are infected b
Good. And it is fine to use "I"... but be consistent with it
minority,and that may have been the very reason he passe
Interesting subculture to identify and research
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what kind of researchers?
no quantit
GREAT NOTE HERE!
asserts
"assert".... you have 2 authors so no "s"
teenagers. She uses Magic Johnson, which relates to G
Okay... finding "relationships" is good. Now begin to think about how these sources affect the way you think about your subject...
ndolyn Barnhart, a doctoral student claims that, “HIV/AIDS-related stigma exerts a direct
Really nice incorporation of quotation
e fact that John was from Chicago gives light to
What might understanding the numbers do for your understanding of the culture embodied in the quilt?
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great. why these tags?
you
This "you" seems a little odd. WHat happens if you take it out?
This quilt is made up of several colors, prominently navy blue, red, yellow and white. I will give more details as far as where exactly you see these colors on this quilt. I will start off by giving a complete overview of what this panel looks like, then I will give details surrounding the picture in the middle of the quilt. Following that I will describe the borders of this quilt.
This kind of signposting works, though you might give reasons why you're doing it in this order, if the reason/order is important.
This panel is 3 feet by 6 feet, which is the average size for each panel on these quilts. This quilt is composed of 8 panels which are all 3 x 6 feet.
Do both of these need to be said?