black non-Hispanic inmates were incarcerated at 4,347 out of 100,000 vs. 678 out of 100,000 white prisoners are incarcerated.
Why put this text in bold, I wonder?
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20,000 in 2017
All of these details, the numbers, need citation.
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They don’t save the government any money
According to whom?
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where abuse by the police is common thus all organizations working indirectly or directly are better for their supporters.
So is the "issue" how to solve the problem or the problem itself?
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They are non-profits with various interests from ligitation to constitutional and civil rights and community engagement.
What does this mean?
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More than 2,300,000 (2013) individuals are currently incarcerated in local, state, federal, Indian Country, immigration, prisons in territories, juvenile corrections, and other holding centers.
This is a detail that needs citation. Perhaps link to the original source? But introduce it and cite it, too.
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The United States of America consists of the world’s 5% of the total population, yet it strikes home at 25% of the world’s prison population.
Can you re-write this so there are fewer words, say 3-5 fewer? I'm noticing that your meaning gets skewed by imprecision frequently, though the sound of your writing resonates nicely. Perhaps cutting down on word number will force clarity in meaning
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