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  1. May 2016
    1. They were recognized simply as “The Boston’s” or “The Boston Baseball club”.

      Please cite research at the end of each sentence, or, if a whole paragraph's worth of research comes from the same source, cite at the end of the paragraph.

    2. Ted Williams writes, “Baseball is the only field of endeavor where a man can succeed three times out of ten and be considered a good performer” (Baseball Almanac).

      This quote feels a little unrelated to the main tone and message of this paragraph...

    3. my dad saying, “stay close to me Selina.”

      So sweet....

  2. thisisformyenglishclasssite.wordpress.com thisisformyenglishclasssite.wordpress.com
    1. The bias placed on these people puts them into a catch-22 situation that is nearly impossible for them to get out of.

      Feels like we have lost the child thread. Homelessness affects kids in particular ways, no? Schooling, etc? And programs that give meals in schools might help? Would like to hear about particular challenges for kids who are homeless...

    2. 4% of those in poverty were unable to work due to being too young or too old, due to a disability of some kind, or because they simply could not find a job”

      Helpful statistic...

    3. While the child who chooses to externalize their emotions may be considered the problem child both children need help and intervention before they harm themselves or others.

      Good point.

    4. Lacking nutrients in the diet overall weakens the immune system opening children up to thing such as weight loss, gastrointestinal infections, poor brain development memory deficiency and reduced problem solving skills.

      Citation?

    5. inabilities to produce relationships with others and emotional well being and self care.

      Citation(s)?

    6. yet over 702 million people live in extreme poverty each year.

      Wow.

    7. $1.90 a day

      or less?

    8. One in five children live in poverty

      Stunning statistic...awful.

    1. fantastic documentary was made about this issue named Cowspiracy.

      One of my first summer movies will be Cowspiracy!

    2. Elon Musk has also been innovating our ways of transportation

      I drive a Chevy Volt...poor man's Tesla... :)

    3. Elon Musk says that he believes solar energy will beat every form of energy within 30 years

      So curious if this will come to pass!

    4. This belief is something I have always held close, and it is a goal of mine to apply to my future career.

      Weaving the research in with your personal passion and with these beautiful images really pulls me into the piece.

    5. we have always known that our selfish decisions would affect future generations to come

      yes-- so interesting...

    6. bazar

      Not the right word...

    1. students who had taken a year off had consistently higher GPAs than those who didn’t”

      Wow-- that is impressive info.

    2. The twitter page

      Not sure what this means...

    3. Jules decided to take the gap year for their own benefits.

      I always thought of a gap year as being about the privileged people spending money, but I see a new side now-- that for folks who struggle with the cost of college, the gap year can be a wise investment!

    4. Recently students are becoming more interested in taking a gap year recently

      Not sure why you didn't fix the errors based on Joelle's grammarcheck comments....

    5. The year off was meant to help students travel before they went to college and by the time they graduate it will be difficult for them to travel because they will need to find a job. Most students do not have time to go and travel after college.

      This paragraph seems to have started with one idea and moved quickly to a different idea...

    6. The gap year can be a helpful way of saving a lot of money and then going to school when you figure out what it is you want to do for the rest of your life.

      Good point!

    7. from the British

      I didn't realize this came from the Brits...

    1. but had six of his murders covered up by the FBI,

      Wow.

    2. James Bulger was a lot of things, one of which is a murderer.

      This paragraph seems to be drifting around a bit...

    3. Someone like James Bulger, whom had rap sheet longer than the Lord of the Rings credits by the age of sixteen, was not going to find a job that he could live off of.

      Good point.

    4. Places like the Southie Projects in southern Boston make for the perfect storm. Many of the residents in the 1970’s were impoverished and uneducated European, African, or Asian immigrants. There was never much of a turf war in the Southe Projects. It was always predominantly Irish immigrants and decendants.

      This seems a little confusing/contradictory.

    5. James “Whitey” Bulger’s Mug Shot from an arrest in his early years.

      Cool photo.

    6. Billy Bulger, the brother of Whitey was the President of the Massachusetts Senate.

      I never knew this!

    7. Whitey Bulger’s criminal activity was about to become much more serious.

      Nice transition!

    8. Starting in the 1940’s and ending recently, Boston has been the hub for Irish organized Crime. One man took his small Southie based gang to complete control. James “Whitey” Bulger was born September 3, 1929. Little did anyone know this man would change Boston

      I am wishing this was a bit more robust as an introduction...

    1. The same way peers influence adolescents to make bad decisions, they can influence them to make good ones too

      The way you weave the science in with your personal story is terrific, and makes for a very engaging essay!

    2. but the powerful force compelling him to “do the right thing” is his respect for his mother.

      Very interesting!

    3. The adolescent years are  also key because this is when cliques are most likely to be formed

      I don't think all the sentences in this paragraph go with the topic sentence here...

    4. This causes them to be more likely to drive without a seat belt, drive recklessly, give into peer pressure, and chose friends that won't benefit their future.

      Fascinating!

    5. I can see a warm fourteen year old boy in his blue apron and white dress shirt anxious to escape the dark world he entered

      Beautiful writing....

    1. Here in the United States, we are competitive. No offense to any other country, but the United States has always been a hands on, get it done country.

      This seems to suggest there is a homogenous United States, where we are all mostly one way or another. But I am not sure that seems accurate, given the vast differences in how we live from one to the other...

    2. The morality of capitalism is completion, and can be found in other places other than politics. For example, sports.

      Interesting! I never thought about this before...

    3. Now, if you haven’t picked up a history textbook recently, I will be more than happy to summarize how Stalin’s USSR turned out.

      Your tone is amusing and makes me want to read on. I like that you are serious but also a little irreverent.

    4. Do what you do best, and if you give nothing less than one hundred percent, you will succeed.

      Are there instances where people try their best and work their hardest and truly contribute but still can't make ends meet?

    5. t is more than ridiculous for governments to chose what we want, it should be considered government theft.

      Despite the comma splice, this is a really interesting argument.

    6. As the government exchanges our earned money for perks, our work becomes devalued.

      Interesting idea-- I had not thought of it this way before.

    7. First, under socialism, taxes are increased significantly. Now don’t get me wrong, we need taxes to be a country, but when they increase too high it leads to disaster. Bernie’s proposal, is that the rich in America, pay anywhere from thirty-seven to fifty percent of their income.

      When you cite specific stuff that is not common knowledge, you need to hyperlink to or cite your sources.

    8. The moral principle behind socialism, is that the government is responsible for providing both necessities and benefits to its citizens.

      Seems like a solid, clear basic definition.

    9. presidential,

      ? maybe the president? rather than the presidential?

    10. However, you might notice a significant cut in your paycheck, which might influence you to read this article and see for yourself why electing a capitalist president is best.

      You know I disagree, but I love this sentence-- provocative and a perfect way to engage your reader!

    1. A third study was done

      Your research is thorough and persuasive. This is probably the most detailed essay on this topic I have read by an undergrad. Impressive.

    2. The common characteristics that all of these tragedies share are the games that each child engaged with.

      Wow.

    3. It makes the winner feel like they have accomplished a goal and leaves them with feeling very satisfied about themselves.

      A helpful paragraph! I learned a lot!

    4. The reason people got so upset over this game is because every time someone got hit they would hear an ‘ahhhk’ sound and a gravestone would pop up.

      ha ha! That seems so tame today!

    5. Pac Man,

      These are a trip down memory lane for me. :)

    6. The first video game was invented in 1958 at the Brookhaven National Laboratory located in Upton, New York (Kudler, 2000-2016). This video game was invented by physicist Willy Higinbotham (Kudler, 2000-2016). He created a table tennis game which involved two players who would turn a knob to adjust the ball’s angle and push a button to hit the ball towards the other player

      So interesting!

    7. susceptive

      Again, not sure you want that word.

    8. manipulative people, mostly children and teens,

      I am not sure you mean "manipulative" here.

    1. It was the first time in my life I felt what it felt like to be in love with someone, and how strong and nice that feeling is. It took me forever to be able to openly talk about my sexuality without getting embarrassed.

      This is beautiful!

    2. It was very hard for me that someone so important to me in my life couldn’t accept me for who I was.

      A heartbreaking story, and sharing this really pulls me into the essay, and makes me want to understand the topic as much as possible.

    3. not inconclusive

      I think you mean NOT CONCLUSIVE.

    4. hen people were unable to replicate the study they realized it was more of a coincidence than a cause.

      Very interesting to hear about this!

    5. I plan to explore both of these theories as well as incorporating my own experiences on homosexuality that way I can offer insight to people.

      Blending the personal story with the research is a great way to engage your readers.

    1. If the family wasn’t already in poverty because domestic violence they many times end up in it.

      Not sure I understand the how and why of this.

    2. They many times overpower women and put them down because they believe that is how the roles are suppose to be. Many women are looking for a way out of this sort of abuse, but many can’t escape because they don’t have the resources to do so.

      Again, a complex issue that you explain sensitively and carefully.

    3. Constant exposure to domestic violence may lead child to believe that any sort of affection or intimacy should be linked to violence. When put into these environments at such young ages children grow up knowing the opposite of right and wrong.

      This is really well explained, and also so tough to think about.

    4. I won’t go into details, but I will go as far to say that I know exactly how it feels to be surrounded by domestic violence.

      powerful opening to your paper.

    5. Another type of domestic violence that tends to occur a lot is economic. This involves making or attempting to make the victim financially dependent on them.

      Interesting, and not something everyone is familiar with.

    1. I’m sick of people discouraging other people’s futures. I live in a world where people think creativity and expression is unimportant or unsuccessful.

      Amen!

    2. Phil Lonergan

      I hear that guy is AWESOME.

    3. would have been able to pursue her dreams sooner rather than later

      Interesting point!

    4. Not only do people go to college to learn, but they are also given access to materials and professors who have lived through the career and know the experience and tactics it takes to make it a living. This is needed for a lot of careers.

      Good, but can you link this to the art issue here in this paragraph? How is this teaching convo related to the idea of getting a degree in art?

    5. College is also a place to find yourself, find what you want to be, and to make a plan for the future. If only making a plan for a future didn’t cost more than buying a house.

      Seems like it drafts to a new point here?

    6. Drowning in debt

      Will you share stats here? Seems like they would add credibility...

    7. college may be your best bet.

      Helpful info here.

    8. Most fine artists pursue post secondary education to earn degrees that can improve their skills and job prospects

      Don't let a quote stand on its own!

    9. inflict their creativity on others

      Ouch?

  3. zacharymatthewsblog.wordpress.com zacharymatthewsblog.wordpress.com
    1. Work Cited

      Should just be a list of citations in MLA (or APA) style.

    2. This article is on CTE. CTE is a new found disease found in the brain of one that has had a traumatic brain injury, or repetitive contact over the course of years. The study in the article was ran by members of the Department of Veterans Affairs and Boston University. The test was on NFL players after they have died and even studies on the brain of all the current NFL players. Also they say 79% of all players have this disease.

      Not sure why this is in your Works Cited. Seems more like notes?

    3. I know this because it happened to me.

      This topic sentence really made me interested! Not sure why you don't share your story here, but I think it would add credibility and interest to the piece.

    4. These new helmets

      Picture? Link?

    5. Said by the Mayo Clinic Staff

      Remember to hyperlink or use parenthetical citations for all quotes/research.

    6. She asked to have her brain donated to science after her death to be examined for CTE.

      I didn't know this!

    7. killing themselves due to the effects of CTE.

      So sad. I never knew it was this detrimental to mental health.

    8. Research indicates that there are 4 stages of the illness.  In Stage 1, isolated spots of tau build up mostly around the frontal lobe of the brain.  An individual would normally notice no symptoms at this stage.  In Stage 2, symptoms such as rage, impulsivity and depression begin to appear as defective tau protein affects more nerve cells in the brain’s frontal lobes. By Stage 3, an individual is experiencing confusion and memory loss as the tau deposits expand from the frontal lobe to the temporal lobe of the brain.  By the time an individual reaches Stage 4, they are suffering from advanced dementia.  It is at this stage that the brain becomes deformed and brittle, and cognitive function is severely limited. Once at the final stage of the CTE process, tau deposits have overwhelmed the individual’s brain, killing many nerve cells and shrinking the brain to half its normal size.  At this point, the victim no longer has any memory and will not remember even their closest family members.

      I found lots of this in direct quotes all over the internet. Not sure why you don't cite your sources, since most of this is not your own language.

    9. The NFL did not publicly acknowledge the link between concussions sustained in football and CTE until December 2009, seven years after Omalu’s discovery. Omalu has also discovered CTE in the brains of military veterans, publishing the first documented case in a November 2011 article.

      Most of this is lifted right out of Wikipedia, word for word, though you don't quote it. (See, for example, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bennet_Omalu.)

    10. a.” Sean Conboy.

      What citation style are you using?

    1. affects

      Yup. You definitely have an issue with this one all through the paper. :)

    2. After my brother had received so many concussions

      The way you weave in your brother's story keeps me so engaged in the essay.

    3. When the tests came back it was shown that the group with multiple concussions indicated poorer performances compared with other groups.

      Does this paragraph drift a bit from the topic sentence?

    4. twice as likely to commit suicide as military personnel and more than three times as likely as members of the general population

      Whoa.

    5. I remember it like it was yesterday. My heart dropped and tears began to fill my eyes. The thought of not being able to enjoy something I loved killed me.”

      Powerful.

    6. If this band becomes successful this could be a major breakthrough.

      I really find this new technology so fascinating! Glad you worked it into the essay!

    7. only protect the skull from cracking

      Interesting!

    8. 64-76.8

      Of all concussions? Or of all players who play? Not sure what this stat shows us...

    9. If it means taking a hit in football or diving for the ball in rugby just to win a game, we would do it and because of this,  “The management of mild traumatic brain injury in athletics is currently one of the most compelling challenges in sports medicine” (Relationship 1).

      Good point.

    1. but when should you draw the line from benefiting and harming?

      I am wondering if maybe this essay would work better as a whole bunch of benefits of technology and then a whole bunch of challenges or drawbacks? It's a little hard to follow the overall organization, though each section is organized within itself.

    2. When you really think about it that does not leave a lot of time for other activities such as family time, homework, and outside activities.

      Seems like we are drifting a bit away from the topic sentence?

    3. The amount of time children ages 8 to 18 devote to entertainment media (including computer and video games) each day has increased from 6.19 hours in 1999 to 7.38 hours in 2009

      WOW!!!

  4. ecfontaine.wordpress.com ecfontaine.wordpress.com
    1. He states that people with ADHD have a higher rate of substance abuse due to the disorder, not the medications. He also says that Ritalin reduces this risk of substance abuse to the same risk as the normal population, which contradicts other sources.

      Very interesting.

    2. I feel like it is counterproductive to have to take a non-stimulant to balance out the side effects cause by the stimulants

      Whew. Really.

    3. We just have to find the way that they learn best and accommodate our lessons to help everyone succeed.

      Love this.

    4. They should not be deprived of going out for recess

      This really burns me. Taking away recess seems like the worst possible thing you could do for certain "disruptive" kids.

    5. $0.6 billion to $6.7 billion in just 10 years (Mayes).

      Again...WHOA!!!

    6. From 1970 to 2006, the number of kids diagnosed with ADHD increased from around 2,000 to nearly 8-10 million.

      WHOA!!!

    7. how do doctors determine what is overly hyperactive versus what is “normal kid behavior”?

      Yes, I always wonder about this.

    8. The last type of ADHD is ADHD-Combined Type.

      Very helpful. I never knew these three different kinds...

    1. This is so hypocritical because McDonald’s does not care about the well being of children. All they care about is making money and growing as a business. They don’t care that they are constantly feeding children crap that makes them obese and ultimately sick. Yet they pretend that they care about other children that are sick to make America believe that McDonald’s has our best interest in mind.

      I don't disagree with you, but I am wondering if we need more evidence for this. Can we find a stronger way to demonstrate that the charity work is ultimately part of an industry that does more harm than good? Does the charity actually enable the harm?

    2. and your dollar can really stretch for the amount of food you get with it.

      That seems so important...

    3. “beef extract”

      Er, ew.

    4. The typical American now consumes approximately three hamburgers and four orders of french fries every week

      Seriously, these stats are blowing my mind.

    5. two thousand new ones each year

      WHAT?! OH MY!!!

    6. twenty-eight thousand restaurants worldwide

      WHOA.

    1. Together we can erase the negative stigmas that are attached to mental illness and be one step closer to accepting everyone for who they are.

      Your passion is truly inspiring. This is an incredibly moving paper.

    2. Although there are other reasons this may be true;

      There are a few fragments throughout, so try to check on those!

    3. 3rd leading cause of death for people aged 10–24.

      That's so shocking and heartbreaking.

    4. Specific phobias refers to many different phobias that can range from phobias of the outdoors to phobias of cars. Specific phobias can be of anything which makes it one of the highest anxieties affecting 19 million, or 8.7% (ADAA). The many variations of anxiety can make it hard to understand because no two people struggle in the exact same way or can be treated in the exact same ways.

      Again, all of this is very informative!

    5. Social anxiety is a more specific anxiety where those who suffer become anxious in social settings

      Helpful info!

    6. physically

      Seems like this should go up top with symptoms? And then you would move into links with other illnesses like depression? All good info, but seems like it could be a bit more structured to be clearer...

    7. us

      If you want to use the "us," you may need to explain that...

    8. three or more symptoms

      Not sure if you will talk about these somewhere, but I am wishing they were listed closer to here, when you bring them up...

    9. Have you ever looked around a room and noticed someone that wasn’t acting like themselves? Sometimes you will notice when someone doesn’t feel well; other times they are silently battling harder than you may know.

      I like this opener for this section. Really got my attention.

    1. can transfer

      maybe can't?

    2. Considering teachers were not guaranteed a job

      That seems like it could have pros and cons. Could also really stress teachers who are concerned about providing for their families, or cause them not to take risks with progressive pedagogy if they think they could lose their jobs easily (the academic freedom argument).

    3. Cons of Charters

      This feels a bit more like a list rather than a developed essay. Would love to hear each of these things full explained.

    4. Sturgis did not teach towards any standardized tests. 

      Also another really big area that I would love to hear more about.

    5. When a school is not bound by union rules

      This seems like a big area worth talking about in more detail, perhaps in its own paragraph. What do teachers' unions say about charters?

    6. Hillary Clinton spoke out

      If you have links to their comments, it would help add credibility to the paragraph...

    7. Comparing Test Scores

      This is hard to follow. It sounds like you are saying charter schools don't improve test scores and then that they do? Is it just that there is conflicting evidence? Maybe a stronger topic sentence and conclusion to the paragraph would help clarify this a bit, since it is very interesting and I would love to undnerstand...

    8. A charter school is a school that receives government funding but operates independently from the public school system. A public school is one that receives government funding and is run by the state.

      Helpful and clear definition!

    9. Photo by Alan Levine

      Alan is a friend of mine! This made me smile! He takes great photos...

    1. One final trick

      I find all of these helpful! Thanks!

    2. you are better off and will feel more rested if you just wake up 30 minutes earlier.

      Fascinating!

    3. Children often watch these things right before bed, decreasing the natural melatonin and not allowing for a rested brain. 

      Not sure if this is related to obesity? Not quite sure what the main takeaway of this paragraph is...

  5. Apr 2016
  6. Mar 2016
  7. livehappy113.wordpress.com livehappy113.wordpress.com
    1. it’s

      it is

    2. life isn’t always fair

      When something is not fair, is it best to accept it or to work to change it? Is it unfair that some people cannot afford to go to college?

    3. facor

      ?

    4. choices, if

      CS

    5. “This Is What Happens To Students When They Go to College for Free”

      add hyperlink

    6. eat three meals a day

      Would food be free, too? Is all food free at public high school?

    7. it’s

      = it is

    8. consiquences

      sp

    9. school, you are not babied, you

      comma splices

    10. furture

      ?

    11. possessive

  8. Feb 2016
    1. Not only does livestock play a major role in global warming

      fragment (semi-colon error)

    2. Climate change is a fact according to 97 percent

      Cite evidence (hyperlink)

    3. If you believe in something like climate change;

      fragment (semi-colon error)

    4. nimal agriculture is the leading cause for climate change

      Link to evidence for this statement

    1. due to the fact that a large amount of people go to college now

      This does not make sense to me. Do you mean that it will be too expensive? What does Sanders say about how he will pay, and what do you think of the plan?

    2. fixed, some

      cs

    3. runned.

      Hyperlink to all candidates...

    4. Due to the fact that students are leaving the public schools in hopes of getting a better education elsewhere

      fragment

    5. colleges, he

      cs

    6. Bernie for example wants free tuition

      hyperlink

    1. arenthood, it

      cs

    2. I was totally convinced that abortion can help the almost 400,000 children waiting to be adopted in our country alone.

      Ok, but be careful. If someone is adopted, how will they feel reading this. It is starting to sound like "We should have aborted any kid who end up being put up for adoption." That is maybe going a bit far? What do you think?

    3. tell the newborn baby that they are 400,000th in line

      Wow-- powerfully said.

    4. 397,000 children are in foster care

      cite source (hyperlink)

    5. Only 3% of planned parenthood activities include abortions.

      Link to stats?

    6. Planned parenthood

      link to the org the first time you mention it.

    1. that doesn't mean the baby should vote

      LOVE this, and great point....

    2. Since most of those things go hand and hand with the young adult privileges

      Not sure what this means....

    3. eighteen year olds are very easily influenced

      Cite evidence/hyperlink

    4. This brought me to the final conclusion that voting is too much of an adult thing for any eighteen year old. 

      But Trump is winning amongst older Republicans, too. How does his status as frontrunner lead to you thinking that young people should not vote, when he is popular with older voters? Did you look up the numbers? Would that help maybe? And if you think he is unqualified and you are a little scared, why doesn't that lead you to want to vote?

    1. Here is the article

      Again, don't let hyperlinks hang like this. Just pull them into the article and link when you are talking about them.

    2. emotions are changing

      Cite evidence that teens have emotional changes that make them unreliable or poor good decision-makers.

    3. the brain, do not stop developing until the mid twenties

      Cite evidence for the brain developing until mid-twenties and then stopping. This is not common knowledge.

    4. how can they understand programs

      Do you think average older voters would get the budget question correct? Is this about age or about paying attention?

    5. countries

      Should be possessive rather than plural

    6. Lets

      Should be let's (let us)

    7. Race population

      What is "race population?"

    8. students

      possessive

    9. In the article

      Refer to title and introduce the article a bit. Add the hyperlink here.

    10. If you do not know the basic issues

      Does being 18 mean you don't know the issues? Surely some 18 y.o.'s do understand the issues?

    11. a record amount of students are projected to vote in the election this year.

      Hyperlink to evidence of this.

    12. uneducated

      Not the same as IQ of 0?

    1. straight towards the country economy,

      Unclear. Do you mean taxing the profits? Certainly those who grow and own crops should get money, yes?

    2. and how my views compare to the article

      This part of the sentence seems tacked-on and different from the first part.

  9. abigailpepin.wordpress.com abigailpepin.wordpress.com
    1. http://www.usnews.com/opinion/knowledge-bank/2015/05/27/why-bernie-sanders-free-public-college-plan-is-a-bad-idea http://time.com/4090871/free-college/ https://www.washingtonpost.com/opinions/bernie-sanders-america-needs-free-college-now/2015/10/22/a3d05512-7685-11e5-bc80-9091021aeb69_story.html

      These links just hang here at the end. Instead of that, hyperlink to them throughout the piece. If you do that, you don't need them down at the end just hanging here without any context.

    2. CCBY GotCredit

      See if you can click on the picture and add a caption for this info, instead of floating it down here.

    3. towards, it

      cs

    4. You wouldn’t really need to

      But wouldn't you still need good grades, and to work hard in high school? "Free" doesn't mean that there would be no admissions standards, does it?

    5. wisely you

      fs

    6. conscious they

      fs

    7. cs

    1. When it comes to the rights of women, we cannot go backwards. We have got to go forward,” tweets elected presidential candidate, Bernie Sanders.

      Embed the Tweet as a photo or at least link to it.

    2. “Not a single dollar of federal money pays for elective abortions at Planned Parenthood (or anywhere else).”

      Good! But you sort of already talked about this, so I would move this up... and another indication of how an outline will help you tighten things up so you don't go around in circles...

    3. People will not need abortions BECAUSE of the services Planned Parenthood provides.

      Can you find evidence to back this up?

    4. anonymous female

      Is this someone you inteviewed? Maybe make that clearer...

    5. You didn’t defund abortions, you defunded the breast exams.

      Explain-- you need to explain that PP gets no federal funding for abortion.

    6. PELVIC EXAMS, BREAST EXAMS, STD SCREENING AND TREATMENT, CANCER SCREENINGS

      Link out to what they provide?

    7. government STILL continued to defund all Planned Parenthoods

      Hyperlinks!

    8. After these allegations were proven FALSE

      Hyperlink?

    9. Not only did this reach the internet, it soon spread to newspapers, social media, and even the news.

      Hyperlinks?

    1. they have no chance to see what Trump says.

      Needs clarifying. I think you mean that they are removed from his campaign events....

    2. Isis

      caps