I like the order of events this one is the first one I highlighted because there is the great beginning of the future.

The quote you pulled out from the reading that I highlighted I think perfectly pertained to your writing. In photographs we have the power whether it something beautiful we create or a picture of an object. Also the "simple one photo cannot attest to someones personality or heart" is very true. Put in great simple words. What I took from your paper was everyone has layers. Some more or less, but truly coming out of your shell and peeling piece by piece will you find yourself. Also i see you have taken outside real life experiences of famous works and included them in your paper which was also a good connection reflecting your work. I think many others can relate to this in the continuous growth and finding yourself piece by piece.

Your writing is very clear to understand. To me what you have written sounds like the life of every human on this planet. What I pulled most from reading was every person sets this image in their head of what being successful and being put well together looks like. But in the end what about all the other emotions we carry, Don't we have the write to show this as well? And through out your writing you put good reflections to the examples you stated. And until the end you more so added the strength and experience you have gone through to get there.. That kind of optimistic push is what made it strong, and when reading it I believe many others like myself were in absolute agreeance. I didn't catch many grammar mistakes, or punctuality mistakes. But all in all I enjoyed reading your piece and think you put well thought and examples into your piece.