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  1. Nov 2018
    1. The pursuit for something more drove them onward.

      Good intro about the West being an idea but maybe put something about mining in there to give your thesis because I could not tell what it was about in the first paragraph.

    1. The 33average amount of gold found was $10.00 to $40.00 a day, some found a nugget worth $500 but they were few.

      I do like the facts like this one used throughout the paper.

    2. John Sutter left Sweden with a dream, a dream of building a city of Swedish immigrants.

      Try putting your thesis somewhere in the beginning, it was a little confusing as to what exactly your paper was trying to say. Desiree Lewis

    1. e  a  man.  Looking  back  over  the  years  and  the  time  in  which  Jesse  Jameswas  born  can  give  an  insight  to  his  outlaw  l

      Maybe this sentence would fit better right after your thesis instead of where it is at. Desiree Lewis

    2. Its  hard  to  say  what  causes  a  man  to  do  what  he  does,  in  the  case  ofJesse  James  many  have  guessed  and  wondered  why  he  was  an  

      I liked the thesis it was first and straight to the point.

    1. When it comes tothe battles that they faced during this time it was the battle between themselves and mother nature.

      I like how you brought up the point of a Western having some type of battle in your introduction and explaining the typical thought of battle between gunslingers, but then used the battle between themselves and mother nature as the battle in the book.

    1. In an article titled “Starvation Under the Orange Trees,” Steinbeck better explained, “Faced with the question of starving or moving, the dispossessed families came west.

      This was a good point to bring up from the article we were given to back up your argument. Desiree Lewis

    2. The continuity of the frontier, the convergence of various people, the conquest of land owners, and the complexity of the unfamiliar situation the Joads where thrusted into, all place Steinbeck’s book in what should be considered a “Western

      I like how you pulled the main themes out of Limerick's book and applied it to your paper as the basis of your argument. Desiree Lewis

    1. They set off for California, the land of plenty, jobs, and little white houses. They know there are jobs because Ole Tom, Tom’s dadhasa flyer that says there are. This is like the people who left the crowded east for land in the west, they loaded covered wagons.7Patricia Nelson Limerick tells us about the life of the pioneer, they left the crowded east to head west toward the promised land

      I like the way you compared the Joads packing up and leaving to the discussion Limerick had in her book about pioneer life. Desiree Lewis

    2. John Wayne has just been released from prison and his horse has died. He is walking along a dusty roadhe does not know where home is, but any place is as good as another

      I think this was a good comparison between Tom Joad and John Wayne. Desiree Lewis

  2. Oct 2018
    1. Race is superior over gender and class, people see your race before anything else. Once they see your race then they act accordingly based on your gender and class.

      I think this point is really well written because it really shows the importance of race and how it comes before everything else when decisions are being made about who you are. Nice job. Desiree Lewis

    1. When two Ethnic groups come together there is always a thing called culture clash. They worship differently, live a different life style, speak a different language. This causes the two groups to shy away from each other.

      This might serve a better purpose toward the beginning of the paper since you kind of seem to be comparing different cultures and evidence throughout your paper, to introduce what you are addressing overall. Desiree Lewis

    2. The relations between the Indians and the white man were total static, and fear on both sides. The Mexican and white relationship was one of total misunderstanding, this was due to a lack of communicationand a total culture clash. The two races spoke different languages and had different lifestyles and nether wanted to change their way of living.

      I was not too sure where your thesis was but I think it may have been in this area, maybe a little clearer thesis in the beginning to kind of give an overview of what you are discussing. Desiree Lewis

    1. Out west race came to define one’s character.

      I know the paper is not done yet but I think this sentence you wrote will lead to a great next paragraph because both books proved this point very directly. Desiree Lewis

    2. When in and out groups are created throughout societies winners and losers are created. This is what happened in the American West

      I think these two sentences are very simple straightforward way to sum up your point of race in relation to the American West. Desiree Lewis

  3. Sep 2018
    1. There was work for everybody on a ranch, the owner took care of the money, the cowboys took care of the cattle, the branding and the herding. There had to be cooks and hands that mended fences, the cattle industry was lucrative for a lot of people

      I think the use of this quote was done really well. It seems to show the opportunity that was available to people wanting to move to the West. Desiree Lewis

    2. The west was a world where people of all ethnicities could live in peace, a land where people could live in harmony and help each other endure the hard work and overcome the endless obstacles that existed

      I was not too sure if this was your thesis or not. After reading your paper I felt like it gave a great overall summary of the two books we had to read, but I was not too sure where the question we had to answer was really answered. Desiree Lewis

    1. The white Americans played the victim to savagery of the Indians and in turn required government to put an end to these unruly people

      I thought you did a very good job of explaining in detail above and this last sentence really summed up everything you explained above to help your argument. Desiree Lewis

    2. Opportunities seemed to be everywhere and there for the taking

      As I was reading this section of your paper I felt like it needed more evidence to back up the claim, only because I pointed out the opposing side of this in my paper and there was a lot of evidence in Heather Cox Richardson's book suggesting the opportunity was an idea created by big business to get people to come out but the reality was different. Desiree Lewis