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provide this content in the order it is listed in the heading, or switch the concepts in the heading

You have referred to "writing" a couple times, I suggest documentation, writing sounds more like handwriting versus documentation could be handwritten or on the computer.

explain why/how this impacts measurement

As I continue to read, I see that you referred to the infants chin not being tucked against their chest. This is why you want the child to look at the ceiling. I suggest moving up the sentence about the chin right after this sentence or add a comma and connect the two sentences.

Explain that the weight of the diaper would be deducted from the baby's weight

grammar, awkward

the image does not align with the directions about recording portions, type of prep, brand, etc. I suggest replacing this image.

...are interviewed by either trained individuals or by completing an automated...

I suggest rewarding, not very scholarly

I suggest clarifying nutritional supplements. Are these protein drinks or OTC supplements?

I'm not sure what type of toxicity you would be referring to here.

I think "data" fits better here

the fetus

why plural?

either add cheese or provide a broad category of "dairy products"

and cutting boards

some additional

clients

this includes radiation, which does not cause low White blood count. Would you consider switching this out with chemotherapy?

In the previous section, diabetes, you referred to the dietitian without "registered", I suggest consistency

brown rice and sweet potatoes

these are lower in the glycemic index, I checked, helps students understand type of rice/potatoe

have you provided this link somewhere?

the image is not that great... it's a bit blurry, it's cartoon-like, is there a better image out there?

also, might explain microbiota symbiosis, I don't know what that is, students won't either.

here's one suggestion

this image is 100% better than mediterranean. there's got to be better images out there, or make your own and give it a CC license.

I have never heard of this term, suggest providing at least one example in parentheses

reducing meat intake

is this red meat? I would specify, there's pork, chicken, lamb...

...cream-based, such as ranch...

unsaturated and monounsaturated fats

...of hypertension and cardiovascular disease...

urinate

delete or reword. don't need adults written twice in the sentence

not wild caught? why specify where the fish is "caught" and how it was raised?

Is it possible to state the number of cups of coffee, tea, or soda? These are the most common sources of caffeine intake. Otherwise, the student would have to take time to look it up, which very well might not happen.

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is the blank box to the right intentional?

I suggest spelling out, looks odd

spell out first

daily requirements of vitamins and minerals

as this is the focus of this para and table below.

difficult

fetus

odd, reword?

is this the CDC? My Plate? might be helpful to clarify

as a family or with other family members

for most children,

I suggest deleting, sentence works better without it

and

these sound similar, if they are different, I would clarify.

makes me read this twice to understand why both are listed as they sound the same

are

I would also add globally. I suggest adding this because of the increasingly diverse population, nurses are going to see childhood obesity for immigrants as well.

I would delete, it's obvious the sentence is about childhood, per the heading, and reference to children in the sentence.

for which age group? toddlers snack often, is this discouraged?

I suggest clarifying, though I know this is cited, this info might not be provided, though it should...

Responsibility fits the parent role, but it does not fit for the child or infant.

It's more about choice or preference, something like that, not responsibility

this sounds quite odd

provided by the town/city

I lived in a very small town, not a city, that provided fluorinated water

remove dash

I would reword, there are non metropolitan areas that provide fluorinated water.

suggest referring to water supplied from the town or city, something like that.

do you want to also add: added sugar

over-feeding, which in combination with physical inactivity, leads...

development, thereby increasing

or something like that

steadily declines as the child ages?

how important is this?

what age group is this? The previous section includes infants, I suggest providing the age group for infants as well.

you wrote earlier it's okay to eat cheese, though it's suggested to avoid it here

delete

this sounds like the individual is actually feeding the baby...

specializes in teaching/education/etc.....

I suggest rewording

tailored? expert?

...that can last...

this sounds like they are interchangeable, which they are not.

suggest specifying how much, in general, can be in juice form.

odd adding this, so those who are 18-20 have different requirements?

again, I realize this is cited, but it is odd that this age group is essentially not discussed, or teenagers who also drink.

these are not healthy for the heart and brain, olive and avocado oil are suggested.

this content is cited, so I understand it can't be adjusted, but... vegetable oil is NOT good for the body

if not discuss later, I suggest providing guidance on fruit juice, sugar sweetened drinks, diet, soda, etc.

none?

39 degrees, per your point about 40 degrees earlier

identify number of days.

I understand this as two days, but from my experience, many people interpret this differently, such as three.

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malnutrition, overnutrition

do you want to remind students? this is a social determinant of health?

do you want to add there is a supplement people take to break down the lactose if they eat a dairy product?

.... though a dietician referral ....

including no seafood

some diets you refer to vitamins and fats, others you don't. I suggest consistency.

as a jewish person, it's not how the beef is prepared (this sounds like you are referring to how it's cooked), but how the cow is slaughtered.

whether you adjust this or not, preparation is not really accurate, and could pose misconceptions where the student might ask about how patients want their meat cooked.

not a big deal at all, but could this be centered underneath the image?

liver? what other organs?

delete?

is this needed? both are produced...

what type of healing?

wound healing?

Suggest using medical terminology concepts here.

wouldn't this also be:

Fluid and electrolyte balance

?

you wrote above how macro minerals are measured, do you want to write how trace minerals are measured?

For consistency

from my experience caring for many patients on coumadine:

Vitamin K does interfere with Coumadin, patients are instructed to avoid these foods or maintain same moderate amounts of these foods on a regular basis. I would reword

and

what is this asterisk for? it's confusing

at times you refer to organ meats, do you mean liver and other organs? If not, and it's just liver, I suggest replacing organ meats with liver in previous sections

consistency

I would add this at the end, so all food items are provided together.

will students know what refractory means?

I would delete, just vision

remove semi-colon, use commas as you do earlier in this section and in sections below.

Consistency

I suggest referring to this at the end and preceding it with reminder this is a social determinant of health

... and social determinants of health, such as poverty.

suggest:

Minimal, if any, trans fat...

jargon... do you want to reword?

do you want to add most fruit?

Pineapple and dried fruit are higher in the glycemic index

I suggest adding whole fruit, such as an apple, showing students that the juice form is simple, whole fruit is complex.

which is why I feel overnutrition fits here better than excess, though I understand that the source might not refer to it that way

often referred to as overnutrition

scale

or exercise/health apps (this is quite common now)

it is highly unlikely Sara would have agreed to a 4-week goal of 150 minutes of exercise per week.

isn't this the same as the first bullet point?

you might write:

Provide health teaching... and reinforce the DASH....

she is

??

if you are referring to a bullet point, I would definitely reword.

section?

I understand how this would apply, but there can still be stress with adequate coping.

Stress is a normal part of living, and through this assessment it was deemed Sara did not have adequate coping mechanisms.

just felt like writing this....

this is quite subjective of the nurse, this cannot be determined by looking at someone.

I would reword or remove, fatigue level would be assessed using a scale, the nurse cannot "see" fatigue, or discern what might be general characteristics of the individual, compared to what has changed since symptoms appeared.

completely unrealistic

I believe earlier you provided a time frame of 6 months.

it takes months, if not years, to meet this goal, and relapse is common (not that that applies here, but just saying...)

since this is about a female client, it would be "she is"

is this needed? I would delete

is this supposed to be here?

does the format (PDF) of this document need to be in the description? I would delete

isn't pain assessment the 5th VS?

do nurses actually obtain these measurements? are they taught how?

this is odd, though it has become worded this way of late... though I still suggest rewording to obtain more details.

ask about mood, emotions, sadness, etc.

what about standardized screenings, such as PHQ2/7/9? standard question at clinic visits, and would think in acute care assessments on admission.

I think and fits better here

needs addressing

Now that I have read this sentence, I suggest changing reflective to active.

I have not heard of this concept, is it similar to effective?

the following

obstacles or barriers fits better, more scholarly.

roadblock is more jargon-like

I suggest deleting

this sounds awkward.

This might be taken from your source word for word, I find it confusing

How common is it to buy cigarettes in a grocery store?

I think a better example would be to avoid buying processed foods, that's what you can easily find in a grocery store.

I suggest adding:

with meeting goals (or something similar)

so much better than "like"!

might add an example in parentheses at the end of the sentence:

(such as adhering to an exercise regimen)

As above

stages

referred to this concept in the next paragraph

Check this page for consistency regarding this concept

Consistency

What does this mean?

misuse?

what does this mean?

consistency

(comma) such as....

like is not scholarly

how much is too much?

again, consistency throughout when referring to the same concept through a chapter

You might clarify, this is the individual smoking.

is it also secondhand or thirdhand smoke?

add a comma:

Medical conditions (comma here) such...

below as well

Consistency:

Family history/genetic predisposition (parental diagnosis of osteoporosis)

Clarify

frame?

Sometimes you refer to gender, sometimes sex

This might be due to the source you are citing from, but just pointing it out

yes, though it's about weight-bearing exercise exercises.

Taking a daily stroll through the park will not reduce one's risk for osteoporosis

I suggest a rewarding and explain explaining the type of physical activity that is needed.

Though I understand, the source might not mention weight-bearing exercises so you might not be able to write that

consistency with stating age

age 40 and over

I suggest reviewing this entire page for how age is listed and provide consistency throughout.

add:

due to premature birth

and thirdhand

to what?

clarify

access to health food fits better here

such as

Suggest this instead:

Some medications, such as antidepressants

Previously, you wrote family history/genetic predisposition, I suggest consistency throughout

Especially that this condition is listed again as a risk factor, you want to be sure students understand what it is

Might put in parentheses processed food

the cycle of poverty... would be helpful if this could be added but I understand if you can't

subjective

Earlier you wrote 45 years and older

I suggest, providing some type of age range as this can be interpreted in a variety of ways

does this need to be explained? Isn't it mainly working Night Shift that increases the risk due to changing sleep schedules?

Might suggest adding something about that, unless the source you are citing from does not mention night shift

suggest sticking with the same concepts throughout, I suggest using sedentary lifestyle

provide a brief definition, or hyperlink, as this is a complex concept that you want them to understand, make connections to the risk factors

I agree, though the reason these ethnicities are at higher risk is due to a number of social determinants of health that have not been addressed.

it's important for students to know that it's not just because a person is Latino they have a higher risk, it's because of the SDOHs that impact this and other populations that increase their risk, so assessing for poverty, transportation, access to care, etc. all add to risk

you might refer them back to the SDOH section.

explain, as you did below for diabetes

or as baby weighing over nine pounds

I would remove the intervention, it's in the beginning of the sentence.

for example, for the CABG, you didn't write walking on the treadmill, just list the conditions

I would delete

.....

correct, though annual or bi-annual skin checks by a dermatologist should be recommended. esp. for those with history of benign skin cancers, moles that change size frequently.

I hope you add this...

you mention the dermatologist later, but screening for this could be added in beg. of this para.

why abbreviate this if you are spelling it out?

either don't abbreviate at all or abbreviate and use the abbreviation for the rest of the chapter

suggest reviewing for these inconsistencies

this was abbreviated earlier in the chapter

such as CT scan.

awkward, this is assuming it's an afternoon test.

suggest stating prep in hours prior to test

often NPO after midnight, sometimes regardless of time of procedure. I would add this as an option to clear liquid

avoiding red liquids like red jello

explain, otherwise this sentence is not helpful

are containers this narrow actually being used? imagine the effort needed to squoosh the stool into this container?

you might explain this approach is being phased out due to the increased use of in-home DNA testing as described below.

might explain the DNA test is not used if there is a history of polyps. this is what I've learned, suggest checking

though for those who do not have health insurance, this test is likely used. DNA test costs insurance companies upwards of $600

isn't it because there is no longer a cervix?

do you want to provide an image?would be helpful for male students

most often?

mostly is awkward

what about boys, don't they check to see if the testes have descended? I don't know what this is called, suggest adding it.

literature says a 'cool' room, comfortable is subjective

good idea

change to superscript

sometimes you write out CDC, as you do here, though frequently you write just CDC. suggest consistency

Awkward, suggest rewording

is there a need to remind students that if found it must be reported?

I could be mistaken, though my understanding is this is one disorder that has a spectrum of disease intensities, does it need to be plural?

It would be plural if there was more than one type of FASD.

delete

semicolon use not needed, suggest commas

sounds like it's referring to financial, is this needed?

I suggest:

In addition to 150 minutes of moderate-intensity exercise and muscle-strengthening each week, should also include activities that support balance.

muscle strengthening was suggested previously, so it should be listed alongside moderate intensity exercise. Activities. That support balance is the addition for older adults.

suggest providing examples as you did for school-aged youth.

Previously, you referred to considerations through the lifespan in the previous chapter and previous textbooks. I suggest consistency.

I would reword to something like this:

Maintain safety, such as using helmets and wrist guards

though are wrist guards a common practice used the the average person? Isn't that for extreme weight lifting?

maybe just refer to helmets?

suggest deleting

of what?

confusing

reduce

I think these two sentences would work better this way:

Positive relationships within the family and community support health and well-being. These relationships can lessen the impact of some of the other determinants.