Although this can have an indirect impact on their own wealth with a “Goldfinger attack” or combining an attack of suitable magnitude with suitable derivatives on Ether
I still don't understand this footnote at all
Although this can have an indirect impact on their own wealth with a “Goldfinger attack” or combining an attack of suitable magnitude with suitable derivatives on Ether
I still don't understand this footnote at all
need
require?
however a brief functional explanation is useful to explain how it overcomes the limitations of simple threshold signing.
full stop after article. Then: We will, however, provide a brief functional explanation to show how it can overcome the limitations of simple threshold signing.
decreasing security, or losing the just-obtained ability to protect against signing undesirable messages?
losing either of the two benefits outlined above?
Has this change really achieved anything, or just moved the attacker’s target so that they have to attack the signer rather than the validator client?
What stops the attacker simply shifting focus and attacking the remote signer instead of the validator client?
the issue of being unable to sign undesirable messages is still present
the user is still unable to obtain the decrypted key in order to be able to sign desirable messages. Improved security and accessibility for the user can thus be obtained with an additional remote signer layer.
Moving the decryption passphrase to be remote from the validator client significantly enhances the protections provided by encrypting the validator key
If the decryption passphrase is stored remotely, encrypting the validator key provides significantly enhanced protection.
But if the validator process can access the key, so can the attacker. This is usually achieved by storing the decryption key on the validator client, which results in many of the attacks remaining.
But if the validator process can access the key, so too can the attacker, particularly if the decryption key is stored on the validator client which can then be attacked. [I'm nbot sure what you mean by 'which results in the many of the attacks remaining']
It is entirely possible to store this number without any protection, however this would open the key up to a number of simple attacks, for example
If this key is stored without any protection, it can easily be obtained, and the attacker's goal met, by (for example): delete 'can meet the attacker's goal' in every bullet point
according to the goals the attacker only needs to sign a single arbitrary message to be able to meet their goal
for the attacker to achieve its goal, it only needs to sign a single arbitrary message, whereas...
It is important to be clear on the purpose of protecting the validator key, because this allows each feature to be weighed against how much it adds to the purpose. This is carried out through the definition of goals.
First we must define the goals of both the attacker and the user. When we know the reasons for the protection of the validator key, we can consider how much each feature contributes to that purpose.
t is generally considered that the security requirements for validator keys are similar to that for withdrawal keys.
these diagrams don't seem to follow on easily from your text... you might need at least a colon... and thinking about it, I'm not sure they add anything...
validator keys hold no funds themselves
is hold the correct verb? are there other keys that 'hold' funds or simply allow access to them?
Note
note that
a network attack was attempted and stopped
that a network attack has been attempted and stopped.
The more validators that are slashed around the same time, the higher the penalty for all slashed validators.
refer to your previous article on slashing?
Stake effectiveness range
Again you need some numbers against the colours, just not the 'good' 'bad' etc
What is it, and why does it matter?
Either my brain isn't working or this whole section does not answer either of these questions!
low stake effectiveness lowers their expected percentage returns from ther validators.
why?
a
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Staking effectiveness matters because the more Ether used to secure the network the better.
why?
Ethereum 2 uses a measure called effective balance to judge the weight of attestations, and the majority of validators will have a level of inefficiency where their balance is higher than their effective balance.
I clicked on 'effective balance' to try and understand a bit more about it but the link didn't work. From this para by itself, I have no idea why Ethereum 2 does this.
;
I would use a full stop and separate sentence.
Note
Note that
stimated returns after costs
Is it clear that the colours are significant here?
25/validator/monthandanEtherpriceof25/validator/monthandanEtherpriceof25/validator/month and an Ether price of 200
what?!
As such it is prudent to consider the estimated validator return to be a fraction of the maximum validator return
But isn't this discussed further below? And isn't relevant to the graph that follows?
The specific method used to calculate this value is up to the user and the data they have available to them
does it make any practical difference?
This
It
that
that the?
using
?
Figure 2: Participation rate range
think you need at least some info around the dial... so some percentage markers...
Network liveness range
hmm. the arrow looks a little lost now...
either across the network
? delete either?
,
I would put a full stop and then 'This is due to the inability...
what can be considered “good” or “bad” for each one.
i don't like the 'good' and 'bad' bit but struggling to think of something different... how about 'what can be considered a positive or negative outcome for the user in terms of the information given by each one'? or 'what positive or negative information can be gleaned by the user with each one'...
running
either by running
that provide
that can provide?
2
can you get this on the first line? looks strange on its own
Stake effectiveness range
why does a high or low stake effectiveness matter to an individual user?
balance
the actual balance?
perfectly
comma after perfectly
staying roughly in the same place
remaining roughly stable as...
initially
when Ethereum 2 is launched or when each node is created? or something else?
effe
why do the 'f's look so spaced out?!
For example, if a validator has a balance of 31.7Ξ its effective balance will be 31Ξ, resulting in it being only 1−31.7−3131=97.7%1−31.7−3131=97.7%1-\frac{31.7-31}{31} = 97.7\% effective.
If this is the same as the calculation given below, you should maybe not include it as an example until after you've explained how to calculate it.
Network liveness
Isn't this bit in the wrong section?
Staking effectiveness matters because the more Ether used to secure the network the better
Confused. If this is the case, why not use the higher value as the effective balance?
above graph
so the graph is accurate? Because the graphic suggests it is a rough approximation...
This could be vulnerable to temporary peaks and troughs in network participation rate, however, so an average participation rate over a time period may provide a more accurate representation. However, as this is a forward-looking metric it will only every be possible to provide an estimate.
However, even this calculation would be vulnerable to temporary peaks and troughs in the network participation rate; a more accurate representation could be provided by using an average participation rate over time. Even here, however, it will only ever be possible to provide an estimate as this is a forward-looking metric.
This
What? The aforementioned calculation?
participation rate
the participation rate
this value
what value?
The breakdown of which levels
Whether or not a level of reward ...
Levels of reward
Given the caveat re costs, does this render this graph pretty unhelpful?
Maximum rewards dependent on number of validators (approximate)
So a validator wants to be on a node with fewer other validators? Does this graph factor in the participation rate or network liveness issues? It's a little vague...
perfectly
comma after perfectly?
carries
carried?
Estimated
The estimated?
open to interpretation
by whom?
Participation rate range
I understand the use of the descriptors here, but they still come over as a little crude...
67%
comma after 67%?
f pa
If the
if participation
if the
receives
so an individual validator can be penalised simply as a result of the actions of others? Doesn't seem particularly motivating...
that are
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Participation rate
The participation rate?
current epoch can be calculated from the three chain values genesis time, seconds per epoch and slots per second, along with the current timestamp
do you need to explain this further? how do you calculate it with these values?
Network liveness range
I would delete the good and bad annotations - the colour strip should show that by itself. And the fault at 0% looks out of place (plus, couldn't faults occur in situations where liveness is lower than 50% but not 0?
Selecting
Is this article about a user selecting which metrics to use or is it really a consideration of the same?
the
a
reverted
does this mean reversed?
,
can't decide if you need the comma!
This article provides information about some of these
Here we will be looking at some of these key metrics:
but have not been explained in adequate detail
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Being aware of the conditions required for, and time taken in, transitions between states is vital for ensuring the successful operation of an Ethereum 2 staking infrastructure.
A bit abrupt! You might want another sentence to conclude.
information above
above information
Annotated validator lifecycle
again you need a space between the two situations that can lead to exiting, otherwise they look linked
typo in the bracket under exited
until a transfer operation is introduced
isn't this a massive disincentive to people considering running a validator?
to transfer Ether
Ether can be transferred
his provides the longest time in which a cheat can be caught,
??
can be
have been
18 days
the 18 days
Second
Secondly
rather than just working its way to the end of the exit queue
So it doesn't sit in a queue at all? What if there are multiple cheaters all caught at roughly the same time? Will they all exit immediately after 36 days at the same time?
than spent
than that spent
higher
longer
should
will
caught cheating
I know that you're not looking at cheating in any depth here, but i have no idea what cheating could encompass in any way...
Similar
Similarly
wanted
wants
even though it may be selected for a near-future role.
??
An exiting validator has signalled its intention to stop validating, however whilst in this state it carries on much as before, attesting and proposing as it did when active.
Whilst an exiting validator has signalled its intention to stop validating, whether voluntarily or otherwise, it does not immediately stop validating. Instead, whilst in the exiting state, it carries on much as before, attesting and proposing as it did when active.
the first situation listed above, where a validator is removed from active validating.
validator funds dropping below 16E and the validator being added to the exiting queue.
Figure 5:
the text makes it look like both situations are linked
the
in the same way
cannot
the transaction can't be sent for the first 9 days, or merely acted upon?
has
allows?
active state
does it matter if they don't?
proceed to be
become
prepared
prepares
state
why no capital letter for the last word?
approximately 4 hours
I don't understand the footnote
as that is where the funds for the validator originate
so Ethereum 1 is a vital part of Ethereum 2 and will not become defunct?
its transitions
the transitions between them.
state
delete
and proposing
commas around 'and proposing' here and in the next two bullet points
attesting
you haven't defined attesting in this article...
Deposited a
need a hyphen in between the bold and non-bold?
it is useful to have
here is?
For the sake of readability
For ease of access?
However, becoming a validator, and stopping being a validator, is part of an overall lifecycle that includes various transitions that are generally not well understood.
However, between the decisions to control a validator and then to cease its control exist various transitions that are generally not well understood.
to
towards
in early stages
in the early stages
does this mean the early stages of Ethereum 2 going live, or that, in every case, rewards can't be withdrawn for a certain period?
of this option
delete
is the
is that the
withdraw
withdraw them.
is the
is that the
must
should
look at
replace with would consider
of this option
delete
It is not so easy to be sure that those 10,000 Ether are definitely controlled by the staking service, that the staking service is unable to withdraw the Ether for themselves, that the staking services’ security is adequate to protect the withdrawal keys from hackers. etc. These difficulties may result in the tokens’ market price being significantly below par.
am confused - are you saying that the token may have a separate value to the ether that is being held, due to trust issues based on those things? because that is different to your statement in the first line of the para that the token's value is based on the value of the actual Ether held, isn't it?
services’
why plural? aren't we looking at one notional staking service (ie you refer to the staking service in the first paragraph)
all of the other benefits tokenization brings.
you need to either drop this general statement or write it better!
of this
delete
sell
delete
so that these are represented as well
delete
would accrue
replace with accrues, to fit with the tense of 'gains'
you need to also trust their
comma after funds and then it may not have the technical abillity...
is one option
delete
,
remove comma and add that has been signed...
practical
my previous question still stands!
very similar to running the validator and key manager
what? no, it isn't! and how does that link to your statement about future hardware managers?
the
include an 'or'?
with
to?
of this
delete
do so
enable this deposit?
talk
talks?
not all!
a bit loose. maybe (but by no means all)
.
delete
indeed part
indeed is part
It is possible for a staker to create their own deposit agreement, or for a service to provide the deposit agreement.
A staker may create their own deposit agreement or a service can provide it for them.
redundancy
?
The risk is that the value of the token depends on the reputation of the service. Because the withdrawal of funds from validators is not managed by a smart contract the asset underlying the token (i.e. staked Ether) is not tied to the token. It would be possible for an untrustworthy service to withdraw all of the staked Ether for themselves, rendering the token worthless. There are also possible tax implications of this action: it is possible that tax authorities look at the exchange of Ether for tokens as selling Ether and buying a token, in which case it becomes a taxable event. Although there is no final word on this, and treatment is likely to be different from one jurisdiction to another, the possibility exists and must be considered.
can't comment on the rest of it without sorting the whole section.
The benefit of this is that the staker has a fungible asset for their staked Ether: they can sell some or all of it at any time. They can also buy tokens, or fractions of tokens, whenever they wish rather than have to wait until they have 32 Ether to start a new validator.
Yeah, you need to set this out properly because at current it's too convoluted and I can't follow it. When can they buy tokens? Why would they? How does it fit with staking their funds? And you've mentioned the 32 ether thing with no context for readers who've not read previous articles.
and provide a smart contract that returns tokens for staked Ether. The token represents staked Ether at a certain rate, and as rewards accrue to the service’s validators the value of a token increases in terms of Ether. When a staker wishes to withdraw funds they can do so by selling the token on the open market.
I get the general gist (to a point) but this needs to be much clearer.
previous model today,
?
broadcast it
??
agreement that contains the details of the who will be validating and to where the funds can be returned.
agreement, which contains the identity of the validator and the place to which funds can be returned.
One other definition is useful: a “staker” is an entity that provides the funds with which validation occurs.
This only helps if you know what validation is...
Any staking service will have a number of features, including control of the deposit, control of the validator, access to staked funds, and payment for the service (cumulatively known as the “model”) . Each of these features can be done in different ways, resulting in many possible staking services. There is no single “best” model for a staking service. Each model has its own characteristics, and will suit different types of investor. Indeed, if too much staked Ether uses a single model it will create a frailty in Ethereum, where a single failure could result in a large percentage of validators going offline at the same time.
This whole paragraph is quite confused. Can someone ask a staking service to carry out just one feature, even if they operate others? It's so vague I'm not completely sure what you're trying to say, so can't attempt to rewrite it.
Instead,
delete - you've just talked about looking for a third party to do it for you. Or change to Indeed
hat has been
I would add a comma after client and delete that has been
validator rewards
need something like 'achieved validator rewards' or 'validator rewards received'.
, however
I would change the comma to a semi-colon and continue: however, this requires monitoring systems that themselves require management and maintenance
loss of validation rewards
refer to previous article?
Ultimately
I would put a comma after ultimately, but comma usage is up to you!
network
are you referring to the Ethereum network?
(hereafter “node”)
delete - you've already said that above
for
of?
vendor
comma after vendor?
the
a node?
judgement
plural?
the Ethereum 2 beacon chain
so the beacon chain consists of multiple nodes all run by validators?
These models provide a dilemma, because having more connections to other nodes provides a more up-to-date view of the network, gives less reliance on any single node to share information, and ultimately results in higher rewards. However, these come at the cost of paying the hosting company. Ultimately the consideration of increased cost with increased reward will need to be examined to pick a suitable balance.
I don't understand this point.
the first cost that comes to mind
replace with 'a necessary evil'?
they can only do so once a suitable server has been selected
and this still needs to be done by the user? Again, without a handle on the general process, this is confusing.
But that could just be because I am a Kaz of little Brain.
that may need to be made that can influence your decision, from the physical size of the server to the amount of power it requires (more on this below).
this whole sentence is very vague and confusing.
as
delete
the standards for such should be finalized
this year should see standards finalised and enough early entrants arrive...
many different implementations that are incompatible with each other
many different incompatible implementations.
it when
delete
for them
to allow them to operate?
will be incentivized to keep it going separate to the merged chain
will be motivated to keep it going regardless of the evolution of Ethereum 2.
likely
why do you need italics?
chain
with what consequence or result? why do people need to consider it as an issue?
to
with?
if not it should be seen in
should definitely occur before the end of 2021.
merge
merger
his is likely to be on-going work but early definitions will need to come in the second or third quarter of 2020 to allow implementation and testing.
Work remains ongoing but early definitions will need to arrive in the second or third quarters of 2020 to allow for implementation and testing.
execution environment
delete
in many transactions
between them.
in conjunction with phase 2 being released
subclause, so requires a pair of commas
There are expected to be
These fall into two categories: general-purpose execution environments and function-specific.
,
delete comma and replace 'which' with 'that'
have been on-going at the same time as phase 0 design and implementation however are significantly less mature and still undergoing significant changes.
The design of phases 1 and 2, despite running at the same time as phase 0 design and implementation, is far less advanced and still undergoing significant changes.
igure 1: Phase 0 release gates
this diagram is not yet here
but as the changes in the design reduce to bug fixes and necessary optimizations the time between a new version of the specification being made and code running to that specification will reduce to a matter of days
this is a bit convoluted and I'm still not entirely sure what you're getting at
trust
the future of trust?
there is a
replace with 'with the possibility of phases 1 and 2 arriving at a similar....'
the production Ethereum 2 network.
what is the production network?
for
for the delivery?
as
delete?
2020 is as close to a make-or-break year for Ethereum as it has ever seen
Is it fair to be stronger? 2020 is a make or break year for Ethereum.
Some of the items that are required to mature over the next year are discussed below.
superfluous?
here have been a number of suggestions how to merge Ethereum 1 and Ethere
Currently, the most promising suggestion on how to merge Ethereum 1 with Ethereum 2 is to bring Ethereum 1 under Ethereum 2 without the need to recreate an Ethereum 1 execution environment. Whilst there is no guarantee that this will turn out to be the final design, the general push to accelerate...
Design of some of these more common special-purpose, as well as the general-purpose, execution environments will require significant work, not least to attempt to define what each features each execution environment should and should not have.
Significant work is still required on the design of the general-purpose execution environment and, particularly, on the design of some of the more common function-specific environments, not least to attempt to define the specific features of each execution environment.
transaction there are many common themes
transaction, there are also many common themes/there is also much commonality.
that provide large amounts of similarity
superfluous
Phase 2’s design is actually very simple
The design of phase 2 is...