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  1. May 2026
    1. Hansard database,

      Use the title that you have given to the database whereever possibe - ie the Hansard DB. And turn some of the sentences about from passive to active voice - eg the Hansard DB did xxx, we did xxx

    2. a draft form published within hours of a parliamentary sitting (Parliamentary Education Office, n.d.). Members of Parliament may suggest factual corrections to proofs (such as names or historical details), but may not alter the meaning or content of proceedings. After corrections, the final official Hansard replaces the proof version, typically around two weeks later (Parliamentary Education Office, n.d.).

      Could this go up higher into the section describing what, how and who Hansard is produced?

    3. debate

      A sentence or two in here restating why - despite all this - a proper Hansard DB is important, and the insights that it is likely to deliver about democracy etc that current databases miss.

    4. Reported in 2023 to be around 45 staff members (Coleman 2023), the Hansard reporters and editors collectively determine what appears in the record.

      Move to above?

    5. editing process is the removal of repetition

      By whom? Perhaps gather some of the info you have below on the role of the Hansard team - how many, how they work etc - up here. Also watch the passive voice. You use it extensively from here on in, and get the subject back in to sentences wherever you can - eg the Hansard edits do xxx, the Hansard DB does xxx, We do xxx.

    6. Some MPs even resist greater recording and scrutiny, arguing elected representatives to exercise judgement, not to perform for cameras (Smith 2018).

      A little unclear. Are you saying that 'Some MPs resist the performance element of parliament, urging other elected representatives to exercie judgement, and not just perform for cameras - although this stance in itself could be deemed performative.'

    7. media coverage and public consumption

      Yes, but also to reassert their leadership internally and externally, for example, and to frame importnat debates for their own party membership and opposition members.

    8. perception

      Perhaps a little all encompassing, as parliamentary business is also about legislating, framing legislation for future legal judgements, recording law making etc.

      Plus, here and throughout this full section, you need to keep reminding the reader why your work in developing the Hansard DB is important and will provide insights for democracy. it gets a little lost here, for exmaple, potentially leaving the reader to think it is unimportnat.

    9. The rest of this paper is structured as follows. The Background Section provides necessary context on the Australian parliamentary system and explores how Hansard is constructed as a textual artefact. The Method Section details the pipeline for transforming raw Hansard XML into a relational database, including the automated validation procedures and key design decisions. The Results demonstrates the database’s utility through corpus statistics and query examples. Finally, the discussion explores the possible uses of this resource, and the limitations of its interpretation.

      check caps and subject-verb agreement for consistency in this para - eg Background Section - discussion, results demonstrate...