ABSTRACT
1) The abstract has no explicit Purpose statement and it is only finally revealed at the end of the first paragraph and beginning of the second. This makes the purpose of the paper unclear to readers who are not familiar with this topic and why the research was pursued. 2) This abstract also does not explicitly state the significance of the research to the larger scientific community. It is only in the concluding paragraph, not the abstract, that we find out why this area of study is important and applicable.