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  1. Apr 2022
    1. supporting.

      Conclude this paragraph with the following sentence: Consult Chapter 6 for detailed information about finding credible sources of information.

    2. In some cases for speeches of policy, no huge problem needs solving. Or, there is a problem, but the audience already knows about it and is convinced that the problem exists and is important. In those cases, a format called “comparative advantages” is used, which focuses on how one possible solution is better than other possible ones.

      Replace with "For speeches of policy where no huge problem needs solving or where the audience already knows that the problem exists and requires solving, structure your arguments using the Comparative Advantages format, which focuses on how one possible solution is better than others.

    3. The challenge or appeal is why this step is called Action. Speakers tell the audience what they should do individually as a result of hearing the speech. The note of finality serves as a strong closing statement.  It leaves the audience reflecting on the presentation.

      Replace with "The Challenge/Appeal tells the audience what they should do individually to bring about the solution described in the speech, while the Note of Finality is a strong closing statement that leaves the audience reflection on the presentation."

    4. The summary statement should be a restatement of the preview statement, but in past tense.  Instead of being vague about the solution, it is emphasized in the summary statement.

      The Brake Light should segway into the Summary Statement, where the speaker restates the Preview Statement in the past tense as well as emphasizes the solution."

    5. The brake light is the indication that a speaker is nearing the end.  It is usually demonstrated by phrases like, “In conclusion,…” or “In summary,…”

      The Brake Light indicates that the speaker's presentation is nearing an end through the use of phrases such as "in conclusion" or "in summary."

    6. The sub steps of the “Action” step are: brakelight, summary, challenge/appeal, and note of finality.

      The Action step consists of the "Brake Light, Summary, Challenge/Appeal, and Note of Finality."

    7. Whereas the satisfaction step explains the solution overall, the action step gives concrete, individual ways to begin making the solution happen. 

      Delete this sentence.

    8. The solution statement is when the solution or advocated behavior is introduced.

      Replace with The Solution Statement introduces the solution, while the Explanation details the solution and how it will fix the problem."

    9. The action step serves as the conclusion. In the action step, the goal is to give specific steps for the audience to take as soon as possible to move toward solving the problem.

      Replace with "The Action Step, the presentation's conclusion, provides the audience with specific steps to take to implement the solution as soon as possible."

    10. Meeting objections gives speakers an opportunity to respond to the potential reservations the audience may ben thinking while listening.  It gives the speaker an opportunity to acknowledge what critics might be thinking and refute those concerns.

      Finally, the speaker Meets Objectives by anticipating and refuting potential concerns about the solution."

    11. The theoretical demonstration shows or explains how the solution meets the criteria from the Need step or has the necessary features.  Practical experience presents an opportunity to show where the solution has proven successful.

      Replace with "The Theoretical Demonstration shows how the solution meets the Criteria from the Need step, while the speaker shows where the solution has proven successful with Practical Experience."

    12. Sub steps required for “Satisfaction” are: solution statement, explanation, theoretical demonstration, practical experience, and meeting objections.

      Replace with "Satisfaction includes the Solution Statement, Explanation, Theoretical Demonstration, Practical Experience, and Meeting of Objections."

    13. A need calls for satisfaction in the same way a problem requires a solution. Not only does the speaker present the solution and describe it, but they must also defend that it works and will address the causes of the problem as well as the symptoms.

      Satisfaction presents the solution to the problem described in Need, as well as explain how the solution works by addressing the causes and symptoms of the problem."

    14. Establishing criteria is a persuasive tactic. Speakers outline a few vital features that must be in a solution in order for it to be effective. The speaker does not give away the solution yet, but outlines criteria that a good solution should meet.

      Replace with "Speakers complete the Need step by establishing Clear Criteria that outline a the vital features for a solution to be effective without giving away the solution yet."

    15. Pointing is a clear, direct statement that draws a clear connection between the audience and the topic. As obvious as it may be, speakers need to explicitly tell the audience why they should care about this problem.

      Replace with "Pointing is a direct statement drawing a clear connection between the audience and the problem. Pointing explicitly tells the audience why they should care about the problem."

    16. The illustration is a real-life instance of the problem’s existence. Ramifications are the side effects and harms of the problem. Ramifications may be a variety of supporting materials that underscore the significance of the problem and its effects.

      Replace with "The Problem Statement is supported by an Illustration, a real-life instance of the problem's existence, and Ramifications, the side effects and harms of the problem. Ramifications might be supported with a variety of materials that underscore the gravity of the problem and its effects.

    17. The problem statement should be a direct statement that focuses on a specific concern or problem that exists.

      Replace with "The Problem Statement is a direct statement focusing on the specific problem or concern."

    18. Specific sub-steps for “Need” are: problem statement, illustration, ramifications (side effects), pointing, and establishing clear criteria (features that should be in an acceptable solution).

      Replace with "Specific elements of Need are the Problem Statement, Illustration of the Problem, Ramifications (side effects) of the Problem, Pointing, and Clear Criteria for an acceptable solution.

    19. Here, the problem is defined and established with evidence.  It is important to make the audience see the severity of the problem, and how it affects them, their family, or their community.

      Replace with "Here the problem is defined and established with evidence that will show the audience the severity of the problem as well as how it affects them, their families, and/or their communities."

    20. It is not recommended for speakers to give away the solution in most cases in the preview statement.

      Replace with "Do not, however, give away the solution in the Preview Statement."

    21. The preview statement is the roadmap for the presentation. The preview will indicate the problem, that it has negative impacts, and the speaker has a solution. 

      Replace with "The Preview Statement is the roadmap for the entire presentation: it briefly introduces the problem and its negative impacts while hinting at the speaker's solution."

    22. If they do not have specific credentials, speakers may establish credibility by dressing nice, making good eye contact,

      Replace with Replace with "All speakers, regardless of credentials, should Establish Credibility non-verbally by dressing professionally, making consistent eye contact with the audience,"

    23. To complete this outline, along with introduction and conclusion, there would need to be quotations, statistics, and facts with sources provided to support both the pro-arguments in Main Points I-III and the refutation to the misconceptions about animal experimentation in Subpoints A-C under Point IV.

      Change to "The completed outline would include quotations, statistics, and facts from reliable sources that support arguments for the proposition as well as refute any misconceptions."

    24. f the speaker has specific credentials or experience with the topic, they should tell the audience about it in the introduction. 

      Change to "Speakers can Establish Credibility verbally by sharing with the audience any credentials or experience with the topic they might have."

    25. Establishing credibility can be done verbally or nonverbally.

      The speaker can Establish Credibility both verbally and through body language and wardrobe."

    26. The orientation serves to establish the topic and tone of the presentation. 

      Replace with "Orientation establishes presentation's topic and tone, which it does through elements that introduce the speaker, present any relevant background information, and establish the speech's thesis."

    27. More specifically, sub-steps under “Attention” are the attention-getter,  the orientation (which includes background information, self-introduction, and thesis), the establishment of credibility, and the preview statement.

      Change to "The Attention step consists of four elements in the following order: the Attention-Getter, Orientation, Establishment of Credibility, and the Preview Statement."

    28. This step looks to the future either positively or negatively. The speaker creates a hypothetical scenario that places each audience member in their own future. If positive, the benefits from enacting or choosing the solution are shown. If negative, the disadvantages of not doing anything to solve the problem are shown. There may be times when it is acceptable to skip this step, especially if time is limited. If a speaker wishes to use both positive and negative scenarios, it is known as the method of contrast. The purpose of visualization is to motivate the audience by revealing future benefits or through fear appeals by showing future harms. The conditions in this situation should be probable and must be a personalized scenario for the audience members. This step requires imagery and vivid language.

      Revise this paragraph to the following: Visualization motivates the audience to support the proposed solution by revealing future benefits of implementing it (positive) and/or the harms of failing to implement it (negative). This step requires that the speaker use vivid imagery and language to describe a hypothetical positive or negative future The conditions in this scenario, however, should be probable, and provide the audience with a personalized vision of how their lives will be affected by enacting (or failing to enact) the solution. Speakers can use either positive or negative scenarios, or both. However, where time is limited, speakers may opt to eliminate the "Visualization" step

    29. 1. Many people today have concerns about animal experimentation. A. Some believe that all experimentation is equal. 1. There is experimentation for legitimate medical research. 2. There is experimentation for cosmetics or shampoos. B. Others argue that the animals are mistreated. 1. There are protocols for the treatment of animals in experimentation. 2. Legitimate medical experimentation follows the protocols. C. Some believe the persuasion of certain advocacy groups like PETA. 1. Many of the groups that protest animal experimentation have extreme views. 2. Some give untrue representations.

      Also, how do any of these points support "Animal experimentation is needed because computer models for research have limitations"?

    30. I. The first argument in favor of animal experimentation is the record of successful discoveries from animal research. 1. A second reason to support animal experimentation is that research on humans is limited for ethical and legal reasons. III. Animal experimentation is needed because computer models for research have limitations. 1. Many people today have concerns about animal experimentation. A. Some believe that all experimentation is equal. 1. There is experimentation for legitimate medical research. 2. There is experimentation for cosmetics or shampoos. B. Others argue that the animals are mistreated. 1. There are protocols for the treatment of animals in experimentation. 2. Legitimate medical experimentation follows the protocols. C. Some believe the persuasion of certain advocacy groups like PETA. 1. Many of the groups that protest animal experimentation have extreme views. 2. Some give untrue representations.

      This outline is confusing. Above the speech is outlined using numerals, but here major points begin with Roman numerals. Also, point 1. under I. should actually be II (or 2) if we make this entire outline consistent with how it was begun in the first example.)

    1. There are some standard questions that you can ask yourself to help you get started in your media criticism and analysis.

      Revise this passive voice sentence to the following: "Ask yourself these standard questions to engage with media critically."

    1. If

      Begin this sentence with the following sentence: "Synchronicity describes whether your digital oratory will be delivered live or recorded for people to use later."

    1. plan how you will effectively present your support orally within your speech. To help you think about using support, we recommend a

      replace the highlighted material with "incorporate it using this"

    2. Oral Presentation

      Put this heading on the same level as "Is Your Support Adequate." Also, change the heading from "Oral Presentation" to "Incorporating Support into Your Oral Presentation."

    3. the claims and evidence below the implied warrant:

      Replace highlighted passage with "the following to determine whether or not the writer has provide enough evidence to support the warrant below each."

    4. claim and evidence couplings ask the audience to draw conclusions (warrants) based on insufficient or unrelated evidence.

      replace highlighted material with "claims lack enough evidence for the audience to reach the implied warrant."

    1. most of us have grown up with the story of how Sir Isaac Newton was hit on the head by an apple and developed the theory of gravity.

      Change the highlighted passage to the following: "most of us have grown up with the story of how Sir Isaac Newton developed the theory of gravity after he was sitting under a tree and hit on the head by a falling apple."

    2. Although examples

      Please add the heading "What to Consider When Using Examples" above this paragraph. It should be the same degree heading as the specific types of examples.

    1. If you use an idea, a quotation, paraphrase, or summary that does not belong to you, credit the source. We can’t reiterate it enough: if it is not your idea, you need to tell your audience where the information came from. Giving credit is especially important when your speech includes a statistic, an original theory, or a fact that is not common knowledge.

      Eliminate this point. It only restates point #1.

    1. Springer

      Please add the following paragraph after this list: "However, these books can be useful for non-academics as well because they contain original research and are thoroughly reviewed by other experts in the field prior to publication. To find information of interest in a scholarly book, try reading its table of contents to determine if a specific chapter focuses on your topic, or looking through the index in back for keywords related to your topic."

    2. Encyclopedia of 20th Century Architecture, The Encyclopedia of the Zombie: The Walking Dead in Popular Culture and Myth, Listen to Punk Rock!: Exploring a Musical Genre

      Italicize titles.

    3. he New York Times, the Washington Post, The Los Angeles Times, The Chicago Tribune, The Houston Chronicle, and USAToday, and major international English-language newspapers include The Guardian [London], The Independent [London], and The Irish Times

      Italicize the titles of these publications.

    4. Determining Your Needs

      Since this begins one of the four tasks of conducting research, the heading should be at the same level as the "Allotting Time" heading.

    1. “Research is a method writers, speakers, knowledge makers use to gain knowledge about a topic,

      Let's remove the quotation marks entirely and change the highlighted portion of the sentence to "Research is a method that writers and speakers use to gain knowledge about a topic." Keep the Moxley parenthetical citation to indicate that we are paraphrasing rather than directly quoting from Moxley.

    2. Learn how to solve problems at work, school, and home by developing your competencies as a researcher. Learn how to develop new knowledge and test knowledge claims using informal, qualitative, quantitative, textual, and mixed research methods

      Let's delete the end of this Moxley quote too and join the rest to the paragraph below. Students in public speaking don't need an overly complex definition of research.

    1. Consider what comes into your mind if you are to deliver a public presentation. Are your thoughts consumed with many uncertainties? What if I make a mistake? What if they don’t like what I’m talking about? What if? Try your own version of CR. Put yourself in the role of audience member and ask yourself whether your fears as a speaker are consistent with your expectations as an audience member. Remember that, just like you, the audience wants the speaker to succeed. Of course CR is always easier said than done. It is a process that takes time, patience, and practice. The most important thing to remember is that you are trying CR as a means of breaking a habit, and habits are formed over periods of time, never instantaneously. Breaking a habit can only be accomplished gradually and with deliberate effort. Changing your attitude is only one element in overcoming PSA. The other involves improving your skills as a speaker including diligently preparing for your presentation.

      This material should be at the end of Section 2.2

    1. State-anxiety often stems from fear associated with scrutiny and negative evaluation.

      Change this sentence to this one: While people with trait-anxiety are predisposed to fear how others might perceive them, state anxiety is the result of a previous adverse situation. The current sentence doesn't adquately differentiate between trait- and state-anxiety.