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  1. Apr 2020
    1. While at the facility, I came across a client with schizophrenia who expressed he had feelings for me. This particular client had returned to the unit a few times in the matter of a couple weeks. During his last admission, the patient told an interviewer that he had gotten an OT student pregnant and he was going to marry her. As I was reading the patient's chart and came across this section, I was startled at the delusions this man was experiencing and very anxious about how to handle this situation. Our professors in the past have given us many options on how to handle a situation like this, however, all situations are different and the types of clients who express these feelings will be different. In this case, the patient has a mental health diagnosis with serious delusions and I needed to make sure I was very clear with our therapist-client relationship boundaries. During his stay, the patient asked to sit down with me and continued on to tell me how he felt about me. I immediately responded by explaining that I was part of his medical team and that any sort of relationship between the two of us outside of the hospital would be inappropriate as my job was to ensure he was receiving the best health care possible while he was at the facility. After this conversation, the first thing I did was notify my supervisor. She expressed that she was glad that I came to her with this and if the patient continued to escalate she would help me figure out the next step."

      See my previous comment about using your previous work and formatting it.

    2. My feelings towards this fieldwork experience felt very different from my last. At the start of my last rotation, I felt very nervous and unprepared for what was to come in those 12 weeks. However, at the start of this rotation, I felt eager and excited to learn all that there was to offer at this site. I had improved my confidence in my skill set from my first rotation and just couldn't wait to see where it led while at this pediatric hospital/unit. With this excitement, I wanted to set very high, yet achievable, goals for myself to ensure my preparedness to transition to entry-level practitioner at the end of the rotation. I met my short term goals while I was on the burn unit of the hospital where I fabricated 2 different types of splints independently, completed independent research over several articles for an evidence-based practice project, and was able to complete treatment plans with assistance from my supervisor. For the remainder of my rotation, I was located on the CVICU, where the clients were in more critical condition. For my long-term goals, I wanted to focus on completing each day as if I was an independent practitioner. This goal would come to be very difficult to reach as I was only able to spend two weeks on the unit, due to the way students rotate between units as well as the scare of the coronavirus. This unit also requires very specialized clinical practices, such as feeding with very critical infants. While I did not feel independent on the CVICU, I did feel independent while on other units of the hospital. For example, while on the inpatient rehab unit of the hospital, I was able to independently complete thorough chart review, plan treatment sessions, write appropriate goals, write evaluation and reassessment documentation, interact with families and staff on the unit, as well as determine if treatment sessions were appropriate based on lab values or prior procedures completed. I felt very confident in my skills on this unit that I could participate as an independent occupational therapy practitioner." 

      Consider summarizing this, since you already were graded on this discussion board post. Instead of reposting it here, it is better if you make it optional for the reviewer (or anyone reading this portfolio going forward) by putting this entire quote into a box, as you might a figure or an illustration. That's the purpose of the block quote in APA. At the very least please reformat according to APA.

    3. while in the field that majority of settings uti

      Please reword. Did you mean...

      During my clinical experiences I recognized that most of the sites used a team-based approach ?

    4. my need to find common ground in conflict, finding potential and opportunity in all situations, and my drive to solve problems for everyday situations in the field not only promoted me to become a better student practitioner, but also a better team player.

      Please correct the grammar in this sentence and revise the sentence structure for clarity.

    5. If there was a case, that I had been working with the client more often than physical therapy, I would be able to provide insight on activities the client enjoys while also including any ideas or activities they needed to work on during the session

      Is this hypothetical, or did this happen? If the latter, please provide an example and rewrite for clarity. Thanks!

    1. continuing educational learning to promote evidence-based and up-to-date learning.

      Please revise and avoid using repetition. Did you intend to write continuing educational learning?

    2. ecognizing that the process as well as appropriate evaluations and interventions will adapt to the needs of the patient is important for successful treatment and care of the client

      I am not sure what your intention is with this statement. It is unclear to me.

    3. I truly enjoyed this experience and felt as if the articles provided a higher level of value to my learning as well as promoted evidence-based practice.

      Can you reword this for clarity? Perhaps--

      I truly enjoyed this experience. The articles chosen for discussion enriched my learning beyond the classroom and reinforced evidence-based practice.

    1. ​In practice, we are often able to utilize our own personal experiences along with our therapeutic use of self and clinical reasoning to make decisions and demonstrate integrity

      I am not sure what this means.

    2. This was very upsetting for me and difficult to imagine not finishing out my rotation for many reasons.

      Can you rewrite this sentence, or break it down into two?

      This was very upsetting for me. I found it difficult to imagine not finishing out my rotation.

      Or something like that.

    3. ork.

      I like that you include this discussion board post, but I was unable to make comments on it because it was copied from another source. For a very long citation, please indent the entire paragraph so that it appears as a block quote (see APA guidelines). It makes it easier for the reader to understand that this was from a different source.

    4. trive to provide independence

      Is this always true? Is independence the key, or participation, with whatever supports are necessary?

      I realize this is a quote and that you cannot change it. However, perhaps you can provide additional reflection below?

    5. During my time at UTHSC, I fulfilled commitments to the community through the following activities: coordinating Kindergarten Readiness workshops for schools/parents and arranged developmental screenings with an underserved population

      Please break down this sentence, it is too long to understand. Also, if you previously counted those service hours in terms one or two, you can't use the same activities for the APDE.

    6. Physicians on the unit believed he should be discharged home immediatelt, however, this was not going to work due to his unfortunate circumstances, so the OTs on site had to advocate for them to understand we couldn't discharge him to the streets of the city

      Please break down this very long sentence into shorter ones for clarity. You also have a spelling error.

  2. Mar 2020
    1. Applying theory throughout the occupational process can often be a difficult thing to do as you enter real world settings and practitioners have often forgot this component.

      Can you word this in a positive way, so that a practitioner reading this doesn't potentially take offense?

    2. this requires a lot of lower body strength and endurance, but writing his name is only something he can do

      Can you write this in past tense? Also, rephrase "only something he can do"--not sure what you are trying to say here.

    3. he group members were able to process and create ideas ways to establish appropriate patterns and habits that they each would like to incorporate into their routines.

      I don't fully understand this sentence; can you rewrite for clarity?

    4. OT

      Imagine that this will be read by a recruiter who is not an occupational therapist or unfamiliar with medical jargon, abbreviations, or acronyms. You and I know what OT stands for, but don't assume everyone else does.

    5. opics were sensitive topics to clients that I saw, however, these topics

      Can you vary use of the word "topics"? It appears 3 times in the same sentence in fairly rapid succession.

    6. only member

      Do you think this might be presumptive, or offensive to someone from another discipline who might read this? Imagine your recruiter or manager is a speech therapist. How would they feel reading this?

    1. I am a third year occupational therapy student at The University of Tennessee Health Science Center in Memphis, TN.

      Hi Morgan! Will this statement still be applicable once you graduate? Can you think of some other way to describe yourself without having to rewrite this part in a few months?

  3. morganpetersenot.weebly.com morganpetersenot.weebly.com
    1. Welcome

      Hi Jessica,

      Thank you for your hard work on this portfolio. You did a great job providing thoughful evidence to support your explanations for each criterion.

      In general, you will find a lot of comments from me regarding formatting, sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation. One of the biggest challenges for me was your use of long sentences. Reading comprehension is negatively impacted by long sentences and words. I made many recommendations in the different sections regarding shortening sentences. You can do this by simply breaking them down into shorter segments.

      I appreciate your patience on receiving feedback. Going forward, it shouldn't take as long, because I will only look at my annotations and your actions in response to them.

      Please don't hesitate to email me, or respond here, about anything that may be unclear. If you disagree with my comments, please feel free to let me know. This is meant to help you achieve your best, most professional portfolio so that you can show it to potential recruiters/employers. While on the topic of potential recruiters or employers, please remember that this portfolio may be read by someone who is not an occupational therapy practitioner. Therefore, some of my comments related to elimination of professional jargon.

      Lastly, I hope that putting together this APDE helped you realize how far you have come. I hope you are proud of your accomplishments so far. I have truly enjoyed reading about your OT adventures! xoxox

    1. also experienced how families can sometimes try to cross the boundary of the therapeutic relationship to where it becomes more personal and friendly than what is considered professional.

      Please rewrite for clarity

    2. It is extremely important to be active in these organizations to support the initiatives and causes established, remaining informed with the profession, along with taking advantage of the resources associated with these organizations. 

      Please rewrite for clarity.

    3. Through this role, I was responsible for overseeing the day to day operations of the clinic along with working alongside the other officers and members to serve the local Memphis community through outreach events, marketing, and treating and observing on clinic day

      Please simplify and shorten.

    4. This way, the other treating therapists were able to feel much more confident going to treat them for the first time, and they were able to be efficient with their time.

      Please rewrite to clarify who them, their, they, are.

    5. here were multiple times that another therapist would see that I was seeing a client that was new to them

      I am having difficulty understanding this sentence, can you please rewrite?

    6. The client and caregivers had experimented with several strategies related to handwriting because the client struggled with not getting distracted with all the lines on notebook paper.

      Please shorten and rephrase.

    7. We had a zip-line that starts on a stage and ends at a crash pit below the zip line

      Can you rewrite this for clarity?

      Perhaps, We had a zip line which started high on a stage and ended over a crash pit on the ground?

    8. myself and my fieldwork educator

      my fieldwork educator and I remained professional (I was taught to always give other's first place in the order and reference myself last, as a show of respect). Additionally, if you took the fieldwork educator out of the sentence, you wouldn't say "myself remained professional".

    9. Had I not utilized humor, the client may have refused the shower session because he felt too uncomfortable and then I would not have obtained the vital ADL performance scores that were required to be documented weekly to track progress throughout stays in inpatient rehabilitation. 

      Please shorten

    10. I also grew in my confidence to teach clients how to use adaptive equipment including dressing sticks, sock aids, shoe horns, and reachers along with problem solving situations when clients demonstrated difficulty with using the adaptive equipment.

      Please shorten sentence.

    11. I felt much more confident during family training when I was responsible for  effectively educating caregivers on proper transfer techniques including applying a gait belt, setting up the environment and client for success and safety, using proper body mechanics and encouraging communication between the caregiver and client during the transfer.

      Please shorten this sentence.

    12. I felt at the start of the rotation that I was not confident administering and scoring various pediatric assessments, and felt that this was a weakness of mine

      avoid repeated use of the same word. Please rephrase and shorten.

    13. ometimes the clients are not receiving ABA therapy, so you become the primary therapist having to address behaviors.

      I am very confused by this statement. It reads as though the only way to address negative behaviors in pediatric clients is through ABA.

    14. share the sessions with him

      What do you mean by this? Do you mean you would share the treatment (i.e. co-treat)? The way the sentence is written can mean something completely different.

    1. In addition, I learned about the importance of location of a client's advanced care directive as it should be easily obtainable by a caregiver should the client be unable to obtain it themselves due to medical status or decreased cognition. 

      Please shorten sentence and rephrase for clarity.

    2. We then decided more individuals should know about our research, and the results we found, so we were accepted to present our research at the Tennessee Occupational Therapy Association conference to occupational therapy practitioners, students, and faculty members.

      Please rephrase. Perhaps,

      We decided to disseminate our findings by presenting the information at our professional state conference.

      Or something along those lines. Please use caution when referring to "research".

    3. research team

      To avoid the appearance of misrepresentation as being part of a research team, perhaps phrase it as a student evidence-based practice group or a student research group. I just want you to be careful when using the word "research".

    4. I would also implement IADL activities including medication management as clients often demonstrated poor insight into the impact of their stroke on the motor and cognitive skills required to  locate their medications from a bin, read the label, open the bottle, remember the correct dosage, open the medication organizer lids and sort the medications correctly based on their dosage. 

      Please shorten the sentence, or break it down.

    5. hemi techniques

      Assume someone other than an occupational therapy practitioner was reading this (say, a human resources manager)--can you use a different term? Perhaps something like one-handed techniques?

    6. In addition, I grew in my skills to use clinical judgment and reasoning when determining appropriate goals for the client following the evaluation. 

      Can you please rephrase for clarity? I am not sure what this means.

    7. vision testing results

      What you wrote about in the sentence pertains to oculomotor functions, although I am unsure about visual extinction-I have never heard of it before so I am not sure what it is. Did you learn about visual acuity and visual fields? These are the sensory aspect of vision. I will be glad to teach you about it!