‘We believe in the right to Life; the right to Liberty; and the right to pursue our own happiness. We also believe that if the government fails to protect the rights of its people that the people have the right to change the government. So, Kaepernick’s protest is a peaceful approach to changing the structure in our society and government.
The central ideas behind this essay seem sound, however, you need to do a better job supporting your claims with citations. Make sure your citations are from credible sources and/or sources that are relevant to your intended audience. Additionally remember to maintain a formal register all the way through the essay and this includes no use of the first person. It's unclear what your thesis is so I would suggest you specify. There were also a lot of grammatical errors and incorrect or non-existent citations so I would suggest you proof-read to catch those before submission