How about including a photo of your grandmother?

You should cite this statistic.

Another sentence fragment.

him should be he

How about including an image of cuneiform?

This is a sentence fragment. And how does one read "rest"?

I really like your splash page!

You need to add a Works Cited page and an "About the Authors" blurb.

Do you really want "blah blah blah" in the title?

Good job using hyperlinks here.

Don't you mean "where?"

Nice use of images on this page.

Period goes inside the quotation mark.

Capital L.

Put periods inside quotation marks.

What happened to the fun fact? It was there when I looked at it yesterday.

Good idea to include the map.

Great use of statistics here. Are you sure coffee houses were primarily for the lower class? I always thought they catered to the middle class.

Love your dog, Sophia! Ilyas--where's your photo?

I hear you Zahin! I think I'm going to look for a new platform. got any suggestions?

Great narrative, but you need to use other modalities on this page--video, images, sound, etc...

You need a path to Chapter 4 here.

Listen should be listening They should be she Periods go inside quotation marks.

Nice ending!

The tables are great. But you need to cite where they came from. Whose research is this?

Add a path that gives the reader the option to move to the beginning of the next chapter.

Be sure to annotate the video clip so that only the key parts of it play.

Be consistent about the format of your titles. This one is all lower case, but others capitalize the first letter of each word.

This highlighted sentence should come after the Federick K. Cox info. Actually--make sure you talk to me about formatting this entire section for better readability.

Again, the pathing is not right here. Shouldn't the path be Continue to _ [the next section]? Probably "Community Groups and Partners"?

Something is wrong with your pathing. You have two different links to the 2008 recipient. I suspect the "continue" link needs to go to the next section of the chapter.

Caption the video clips of Edelman.

Remove nomination request.

Caption the video clip.

Caption the image.

Add a caption to this image.

Hyperlink this to the image above. Also, make the caption for the Top 10 image more complete.

Why not hyperlink this to the video at the bottom of the page.

Incomplete caption. Give more info about what the clip is about.

Caption the video clip.

You need to align this "I think..." better.

Video clip needs a caption.

Introduce the video clip at the end of the paragraph and hyperlink it. Also, you need to give the clip a caption.

You need to refer to the interview with Maggie Kaminski in the text (and actually hyperlink it). Introduce who she is and what she does.

As I said in my editing of your text, this sentence really belongs in the next section, "What are the humanities?" Instead, in this introduction give the reader your road map for the chapter. Something like: Here we present stories about the impact of humanities here on campus that BNC facilitates.

You need to make the image smaller so it is readable without having to do any scrolling.

Add caption to the video clip.

Same deal. Remove individual attribution.

Remove this. We are not attributing individual sections to specific authors. This is a group effort. Everyone gets credit in the About the Authors section at the end.

You need to annotate the logo. Give is a caption and cite your source.

The pathing has to offer an option to go forward, not just backward. In this case, you need to offer a path to continue to Chapter 2.

The photos need captions on this page.

Which one is Mary?In the caption identify her in parentheses--e.g., (left), (center), etc.

The pathing at the end of this page should include an option to continue on to the next section/chapter--not just the choice of going back to the introduction page.

Each time you start to discuss a new program, give it a header.

Start a new paragraph and maybe even give it a header when you start to talk about a different program.

In the picture caption, say where the Alternative Break was--what was the location?

You need to add a path at the end of this page.

End this introductory paragraph with a road. Something like: This chapter presents the stories of CCEL's many stakeholders.

Love the splash picture!

I think it would be better to crop it.

A lot of work to do on this page.

"left the university with his wife Laura" sounds very negative. You mean that in addition to earning a degree from Case, he found a wife as well?

Typo here--two fondly recalls in the Block story.

Alumni don't contribute to the Development Team--they contribute to the College of Arts and Sciences. See the difference? The development team is just the agent that solicits those donations.

Perhaps you should name the parent institutions--Western Reserve College, Cleveland College, Adelbert College and Flora Stone Mather College.

You need a path at the end of this page.

Will you have a photo of Kendall?

The text on this page begins with an incomplete sentence.

You need to put a caption on the video clip. Also indicate the speaker for each student quote.

Same comment--introduce the people you are interviewing and state WHY you're interviewing them.

You have to introduce Lipscomb. Say who she is. You also need to say what alternative break trips are and what Goodman Vote Everywhere is.

You need to fix this interview so that it appears on the main part of the page with a larger space for the interview.

Your text needs a road map for the chapter. Say something like: The stories of CCEL's stakeholders that we present in this chapter illustrate the many ways the the organization makes a difference in people's lives.

You need to fix your pathing so that the reader can move forward in addition to returning to the Introduction.

Are you going to have a story here? An interview with someone who went on an alternative break trip? Also, the caption to this picture should say something about where it is.

What happened to the image you used to have on the title page.

Fix video. You need to add pathing.

This intro's content is perfect. It offers a road map for the rest of the chapter.

Nice splash page!

Is the individual coaching for women faculty only? If so, then say "to help her."

This is a good introduction to what's going on on this page and to the interviews.

You need to provide descriptions of all images and media files that you insert.

Got any stories about SAVE?

Who is "They"? Is the organization staffed by volunteers or employees of FSM Center?

How about a splash image for this page?

Add a path on this page that takes the reader to Chapter 2.

Good interview--it succeeds in telling the story of how CCEL has made a difference in a person's life. BUT--you need to introduce the person you interviewed. Who is she? Why are you interviewing HER? This goes for all the other interviews as well.

How about a splash image on this page?

Highlighted area is a repetition of the previous paragraph.

You have mis-labled this page as Chapter 3.

There is a problem with labeling titles in this chapter. Look at your title and then look at the caption above it: It says: Chapter 3: Comics (2/2). Then everything seems to be okay until you get to the Poetry and Gender Identify page.

Think about this. You never say they survive. The accurate way to make your point is: Viola and her twin brother, Sebastian, have both survived a shipwreck unbeknownst to each other. See the difference?

Not only is this a typo (you mean emphasize, not emphasis), but you should not be using first person singular in a group project. "We" is okay, but "I" is not.

You need to name the artists of each of these paintings. You could put it in a caption under each image.

NAME OF ARTIST depicts Ophelia wearing a white gown and surrounded by flowers, both of which show a softness and innocence of her character. What is most striking of this image is the parted lips and distant gaze. Her facial features mirror how women of the time were largely expected to be pure, fragile, submissive, and unquestioning.

You should cite the location of this passage in the play here--act, scene, and line numbers.

Typo--know should be KNOWN

Typo. Ophelia's fall INTO madness.

musicians' --show the possessive case with an apostrophe.

You need some text here to contextuallize the song lyrics. Who are the Lumineers? When did this song come out? That kind of information. Is there any information available about the group's inspiration for the song?

You use the wrong word here. Illusion refers to something that appears to be real but is not. The word you want is "allusion" which mean a reference to something.

You need to cite your source for this statistic.

You can't base something off of a base. You base it ON or UPON the base.

Typo again. Are you missing a "be"?

This is a group authored book; don't use "I."

Nice image for the header of this section.

It's Julie Christie, not Chrisite.

You should indicate the date of the first publication of Tales from Shakespeare. You could also make the point that the book has never been out of print since that time--which tells us something about the enduring value of the work.

You could have fixed the problem by putting the "Significance of Hamlet" paragraph first.

You begin the chapter abruptly with no introduction to signpost what you indent to cover--analogous to a thesis statement.

Good content on this page but you need to link the text to the video clip and the quote. The plot summary is rough. Send it to me in a word doc and I'll help you edit it.

Nice integration of text and images on this page.

I think the point you need to make is that the title of Huxley's book is intentionally ironic. It is a dystopian novel.

Yes, but what does the line "we are such stuff as dreams are made on" signify? It is hard to answer that question without looking at the rest of the quote--"and our little lives are rounded by a sleep." Prospero is commenting on how our brief lives are made up of hopes and dreams, but life is short, and in the grand scheme of the universe, we are insignificant.

Cite the scholars who claim this.

The map is an effective way to illustration the colonional/imperialistic mindset of Britain in the 1800s.

I don't think this statement is very accurate. Wouldn't it be more precise to say that in the twenty-first century, we tend to view gender expectations more fluidly?

Nice content here, although a lot of passive voice! I suggest you use the word "patriarchal" instead of "man-over-woman."

Good signposting here.

This is incorrect; they will not marry until they return to Milan.

Very nice content on this page. You contextualize the entire book project and do a succinct job of explaining how you use the term popular culture.

What does (idk) mean?

Again, where is the portrait from?

Nice prose on this page. Be sure to italicize all the play titles. You should mention the date of the play. It looks like the portrait of Henry V is Richard Burton who played Henry V. You should try to verify this and add that info to the caption.

Everyone needs to put their thumbnail bio on this page--in alphabetic order.

Someone needs to path this page and put it into the Table of Contents

What does Alternate Version mean? Alternate version to what?

Do you have a source for this review of the "Dancing Henry Five"? Is it possible to include a short video clip of the dance?

What is the stance that the Hollow Crown adaptation takes on war? You should include this to be consistent.