right off the baat, I decided i wanted to change my essay from "the korean american experience" to " the asian american experience" in order to reach (as well as advocate for) a larger group of readers. I was aware that perhaps my audience wouldnt be very familiar with Korean Americans... but perhaps they might know a fellow Chinese American, or a Japanese American. Ultimately, this choice in diction allowed me to expand on these ideas and include multiple ethnic groups within this essay to reach as many non-Asian Americans as I could.

as cliche as it may seem, I chose to end my essay about advocacy with a call to action. I struggled a little bit with how exactly to end this essay, but I ultimately decided that a call to action which drew back to the forms of healing and groqwth displayed by our Korean Ameircan artists and their work would be an appropriate way to leave readers wondering how they too can help display the healing of these East Asian communities.

here, I made the specific choice of using the term "contextualize" over words like "understand" or "appreciate" in order to add another layer of importance and urgency to my essay. many non-Asian Americans who engage with East Asian culture already appreciate or understand the cultural impact of their presence, so by adding context about the ways that we may be ignoring times in iur nation's history when Asian culture was shunned allows me to provide a level of new information which may be interesting to my audience.

i wanted to take a full sentence or two within the first few paragraphs of this piece to contextualize myself as the writer, and acknowledge the fact that I'm not Asian American, but simply a member of a fellow colored American group who is looking to educate both myself and other communities about the hardships that the Asian community faces and the different ways we can stand by and support these generational struggles.

i strategically made this connection to contemporary society and current events in order to grasp the attention of the largely non-Asian audience to which this piece of writing is addressed. i thought that drawing from the immense sympathy and love that we're sending out to these ailing Asian communities across the country might be a good way to draw the attention of a non-Asian audience who may need to educate themselves fruther on the experience that this community faces.

this last sentence works as a call for action for christians in particular

within the conclusion, this sentence provides insight into the commercial value of kanye within the music industry which allows readers to leave with some sort of understanding of Kanye's value within the industry and the effect that it has within both christian and non-christian communities.

this sentence, although it blends in with the rest of this very self reflective paragraph, gives a tonal shift which provides the speaker with insight into the way that the they personally feel about the topic, which is both refreshing and valuable within this largely objective piece of writing.

this key moment in the text which justifies the legitimacy of hip hop within places of praise and worship strategically uses semi colons to slow down the pace of the text when compared to the rest of the essay in order to emphasize the importance of the statement at hand. the semi colons divide up this string of independent clauses which forces the reader to slow down and really digest the topic at hand.

plays with the relationship between Christian groups and the hip hop genre for a more objective audience who has at least basic knowledge of both groups.

for the most part, I feel that this essay imagines its audience to be largely people who have an interest in music and a knowledge of Christianity, but aren't necessarily a part of either group...the essay isn't exactly "gospel music for kanye fans" or "kanye music for gospel fans", but rather, as the title suggests, a piece of writing which addresses more objective groups who are wondering how one of the most ecclectic men in hip hop is making it in the gospel music industry amongst Christians.

the term "hard times" definitely does a lot to connect russian society to the "hard times" that we're currently experiencing today

even though it's still in the works, this conclusion does an excellent job at connecting the more bleak topic of russian satire to the role that comedy and humor play within our lives. this universal connection leaves readers with a connection that ties together contemporary society with people living in russian over a century ago.

right off the bat, the structure of this sentence draws attention to this very important idea which is relevant to both Russian history and the satirical pieces which were in circulation at the time. surrounded by shorter, more blunt statements, the length of this sentence emphasizes the importance of this idea within the grand scheme of this essay.

one again, this essay works in a self aware way to maintain the interest of readers who may not be very immersed in this topic of russian satire. by interpreting the text for the reader using phrases such as "penetrates through...", "blue hues", and "maintain heat", the writing engages with the reader and evokes real emotions which make this century year old drawing all the more interesting.

lighthearted and comedic tonal shifts within this text shows that the essay is indeed self aware of the fact that Russian history and satire over a century old might not be the most interesting topic... but the writing does an excellent job at keeping a slightly educated audience interested in a topic that might not be too fresh in their minds.

just based on this first paragraph, it's clear that this essay imagines its readers to be people who understand or know a little bit about Russia or Russian politics in the early 20th century, but not a ton. this intro paragraph does an excellent job at introducing this topic in a very light way which doesn't require too much thought from the reader in order to contextualize the information.

with a lot of the essay being focused on the discrimination between good and bad attempts at camp, the word "effortlessly" adds some more concrete-ness to the abstract concepts of this essay. for readers with less of an understanding of fashion, this strive for an effortless look provides a little more depth and connection with the topic at hand.

This topic sentence ties together the abstract concept of fashion, while also using the new known concept to help readers understand that these ideas of camp and fashion are hard to comprehend as abstract ideas within our social aesthetics.

This theme of discrimination between good camp and bad camp and the ramifications of bad camp lie at the center of this essay.

The writing makes it clear that if the Gucci designer which put together this atrociously bad outfit were to read this article, they would most likely be confused.

While reading over this essay, I felt that the interpretation of this piece of fashion was a bit of a turning point in the essay. While the introduction of the article is a bit more slow paced and explanatory, the interpretation of this image takes the analysis to a level which requires the audience to understand the aesthetic differences between good and bad camp.

operates under the expectation that the audience has an eye for what fashion risks work and which ones just don’t quite make it.

In a day and age where fashion really has no creative reservations, I felt that this piece of writing expects its readers to be able to navigate the different aspects of fashion and understand what “works” and what doesn’t.

Reading this piece, I got the sense that it imagines its reader as someone who is interested enough in fashion to have gone deep enough into this specific niche of the design industry. I feel like it’s designed for a reader who understands more general terms such as the “MET Gala” while also being able to discriminate between different types of fashion.

this sentence includes readers from all backgrounds, and encourgaes them to join forces in taking action this gives a less educated audience a chance to work immerse themselves in this issue while also connecting with it on a very personal level

american cultural references connect both asian and non asian readers through a common understanding of fashion here in the united states

the arbitrary nature of what "doesn't count" regarding race calls out certain members of the audience and allows them to view the way that this phrase has hurt the asian community

this sentence slows down the pace of the article; rather than having an immediate call for action which we saw earlier, this providing more intersectionality between racial groups for white Americans to understand the way that these groups interact behind the scenes

connects this woman's story to actual current events

this paragraph switches the tone of this section of the essay from a more passive account of the Asian American experience to a more aggressive call to action

this shorter sentence stands out against the longer sentences which this author normally uses, spotlighting this phrase as a powerful statement and a call for action

first person makes this text more relateable, as if you were discussing this issue with the author of section of the article himself

juxtaposes the innocence of youth with the detrimental impact of this racial slur to emphasize how deep rooted asian hate is within our country

uses this statement to connect back to the childhood anecdote told a few lines earlier

this particular work choice incites feelings of love within a country that's most often pitted against immigrant populations

talking heads personalize the article

makes an otherwise unrelatable immigrant story more emotionally accessible to American/ white audiences

immiediately contrasts this unique experience with that of Koh in the previous section of the article

this section of the article begins with more general knowledge and narrows down to more specific emotions of forgiveness and abondonment which are universal

after providing some depth and background info, the writer brings the writing back around to something that the audience would universally understand: the feeling of abandonment

simple juxtaposition of the two experiences; doesn't dive too deep into racial boundaries or anything like that

they say/i say ; this clarifies to a mass audience most likely composed of Americans that even though these books received critical acclaim for examining the korean experience, these exact experiences and their portrayals are different

compares the asian population to other ethnic groups which may be reading this essay to learn more about asians in america

serves as a sort of thesis statement for this section of the essay

includes more statistics to provide the audience with the an understanding of the depth of this issue

begins this paragraoph with a topic sentence that draws from what the audience has already learned in the last paragraph in an attempt to introduce them to a new list of phrases and steroetypes

titles categorize each different aspect of the article and makes it easier for a non-familiar audience to navigate this train of ideas

very straightforward with it's goal; lets readers know what they're getting into using this topic sentence

initially establishes that this asian american community makes up a large portion of the US; establishes importance of this community