your artistic story
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your artistic story
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feeling guilty about your supplies
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feeling overwhelmed
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something unique
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overflowing
Can you highlight some key words here?
over 5,000 students have joined my classes - here's what a few have said:
Loooove!!!
stitching
Start this section with this verb
Repurpose
I'd start this section with a verb too
what
Wondering... is it possible at all to make the colourful border around the white box slightly bigger?
Findi
Can you potentially reduce the column width here so it doesn't sprawl as far across the screen?
Then
Delete this :)
IN SIX MONTHS:
Six months from now
IN A MONTH YOU:
In a month you will have
AS SOON AS YOU JOIN:
As soon as you join you can
I'm more successful at not judging my work as harshly as I normally would.
I'd put all these in quotation marks
only
Can you make this all capitals?
using
,
Create a tactile, layered journal with collage. This course invites you to embrace upcycling while creating meaningful art that tells your unique story.
Looove the little blurbs!
We’re waiting for you with open arms and paint-splattered aprons!
I'd drop this down into the next line also
beginners are not just welcome, they’re celebrated! 🎉
Can you drop this into the line below and make it bold so it really stands out?
Although creative souls, like you, have more info at our fingertips than ever before (thanks, Internet) true community can be hard to find. The Roben's Nest is your well-deserved break to nurture your creative soul and reconnect with fellow makers in a joyful, judgment-free, and FUN online haven. Whether you’re searching for fresh inspiration, craving deeper creative connection, or needing a gentle push to dive into your craft, you belong here. Here, you’ll find the support, motivation, and creative confidence to explore without pressure, experiment freely, and truly enjoy the process of making art.
I'd center this section
3 Simple Steps to better skin
Can you add some before/after shots or user-generated content?
New staple product in my routine!
I would move the reviews panel further up on the page
Perfectly invisible on all skin tones, leaves no residues or flashback.Smooths and refines the appearance of pores and fine lines for an impeccable finish.Brightens and evens out skin tone, effectively reducing the appearance of dark spots.Absorbs instantly, offering a weightless feel under makeup without any pilling.Provides deep hydration without a greasy feel, maintaining skin’s moisture balance.Fresh and revitalizing application experience, entirely free from any scent.
I would turn these AMAZING benefits into an emotive introduction blurb. They are what's going to sell your product!
This is my first time launching
I'd make this section easier to read and less wordy. Also, can you add the price of NOT joining in here to give them a gentle nudge? I'd also add an inclusion table again at the bottom of the sales page
Accountability got me to get my website done after sitting on the domain for over a year.
Is this bit meant to be a repeat of further up on the page?
Testimonials
Can you scatter individual reviews/testimonials throughout the sales page rather than bunching them up in one section? It means people don't accidentally scroll past.
How the ETA Club Works
Again, try to format it in a way that makes it easier to digest this information. I'd steer towards a brief paragraph for each inclusion outlining it in more detail
Here’s exactly what you’ll get:
I would make this section easier to digest by turning it into columns with matching icons/mockups as well as adding the 'so what' to each inclusin
This email got me started! “Bit*h, how are you turning up to parties, galas, lunches and still making more money that I am?”I received this from a friend who reads all my posts and shares some love on my stories; someone with whom I catch up with every summer when I’m back in England.
Love how you're introducing the origin of this concept. I would add a section about you here. Who you are, why you're perfectly positioned to support them, and touch on accountability being the one thing that got you to where you are today
Real Accountability – I help
I'd turn these bullet points into a paragraph that touches on why this concept works. And I would remove the individual buttons
Discover a Real (aka the ETA Club) Solution:
This is a great third section. It's the solution to their current approach. Introduce the membership here with a big, bold promise while touching on the structure/format.
If you’ve been
This is a great second section of this sales page. It's addressing what they're currently trying to do unsuccessfully.
Does any of this sound like you?
I would start with a section here that speaks to what's possible. .. the ultimate dream rather than the struggles. That way you're starting on a positive note and what's possible.
nt Plan
I would link these buttons up to the inclusins section on this page rather than to the checkout because people haven't had a chance to learn more about the program yet
Coaching with actual accountability is the fastest way I know to get clients incredible results! This is how, in 60 minutes, I get clients from ‘overwhelmed’ to‘I get it — and I got it done!’ If you are ready to go from being confused about how to market and sell to clear daily action tasks with the support to finally see a higher return on effort… then this is for you!Join the Entrepreneurs Take Action Club and achieve the big goal we will set together in 26 weeks…or get your money back.
Start with the big, bild promise here. What are members going to achieve by joining?
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Move this right underneath the main header for instant trust and credibility
straight
Make sure you move this one up right underneath your about blurb
Oh my days...
I'd move this further up on the page just below the choose your own adventure section
with...
Choose your own adventure:
Can you add your course here?
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Let's protect you while...
Even
Especially
Limtied Time Offer ends on October 5th
Add a timer here
Ready to transform your creative chaos? I invite you to join BB RingDex today and start creating your tactile ring journal.
same, I'd delete this
Ready To continue your creative journey?
delete this
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Get instant access for $47 now
Imagine this:
Turn this into a sub-heading
Picture yourself flipping through the pages of your completed RingDex, each one filled with carefully curated materials that tell your unique story. It’s about transforming your supplies and previous artworks into a piece of art that you’ll be proud to show off, celebrating the joy of seeing your creativity come to life in a tangible, beautiful way.
I reckon get rid of this because there's too much copy in one section
Give those beautiful handmade papers and collage fodder a home Turn that collection of vintage ephemera into something more than just a drawer full of memories Bring those forgotten fabric scraps to life in your journal Use those paints and writing tools to add personal touches and depth to your pages Incorporate previous artworks, and give them new life by blending them with fresh ideas
Can you add a matching icon to each idea and turn this into one row with 5 columns?
Here's what my students are saying:
Can you split this section into 2 separate ones. One here and one further up on the page?
Supportive Community
I would add this to the 'what you get' section further up on the page
BB RingDex is different
Can you turn this into a sub-heading?
ay.
I'd change the button copy to Join BB RingDex for $47 now
You love creating, but let's face it
I reckon this makes a FABULOUS sub-heading... I'd open the paragraph with this as the big, bold sub-heading because it draws people in.
This class is just what you need if:
I'd in 'exactly'
You'll walk away with
I'd move this section up above the 'this is for you if' section
Limtied Time Offer ends on October 5th
Only until October 5
LimitedTime Offer $77 $47
I'd move this bit above the timer
Buy now and get access to the class content instantly
But only until this timer strikes zero
available price
price it will ever be
st.
I'd mention the price on the button for those ready to invest... it's a no-brainer pricetag. Get Instant access for $47
Got an overflowing stash?
I'd get rid of this bit
Is your creative space overflowing with papers, embellishments, and art supplies that you’ve collected over the years? Maybe it started with a few choice pieces—some vintage ephemera here, a few handmade papers there, and a handful of fabric scraps tucked into a drawer—but now, your collection has grown into a colorful, chaotic treasure trove of artistic potential. You’re a passionate artist, driven by the thrill of discovering new materials and the joy of crafting something unique. But let’s be honest—I know I’m not alone when I say that all that passion can sometimes turn into a pile of unfinished projects and unused materials. It’s easy to feel overwhelmed by the sheer amount of stuff you’ve gathered, and even easier to feel guilty about it. Sound familiar? If you’ve ever found yourself staring at your art stash, wondering how you’ll ever use everything—how you’ll ever turn it into something cohesive—you’re not alone. Many creatives face this same struggle: the desire to create something meaningful, yet the challenge of actually bringing it all together.
Love this intro all about making the reader feel heard and seen. What if you open it with something like: Finding you here checking out this brand new resource tells me a few things about you: Your creative space is likely overflowing withpapers... You're a passionate artist ... And at some stage, you have stared at your art stash wondering...
But what if you could take all those beautiful supplies and finally give them the home they deserve? A place where each piece plays a part in telling your unique artistic story. That’s exactly where BB RingDex comes in.
I would turn this paragraph into a standalong section that pops! And make the last sentence stand out separately too...
Are you ready to join other creatives like you who are ready to be inspired and encouraged in a fun and supportive community?
I'd change this to a decision-inviting statement. Something like: This is your chance to join creatives just like you ready to be inspired and encouraged to create.
Local connections. Find other members near you, plan meetups, swaps, or live call art sessions. There’s a forum dedicated to helping you make these connections—building a global yet wonderfully personal community.
Underneath this section, I'd include a separate section that showcases some of the tangible transformations/wins/mindset shifts that popped up in your survey. I would add them in 2 rows with 5 columns each where you add an icon to each tangible win so it's easy for people to digest.
This is a space where
I would move this section underneath the Nest Fest bonus
really learning a lot! -Stacey Vicari
Just before the final invite, I'd insert a section that speaks to immediate, short-term and long-term wins. You'd structure it in 3 columns titled As soon as you join..., In a month..., in 6 months... That's where you outline what they can achieve/experience/feel at each stage. It's super powerful and hopefully invites readers to opt for the annual membership because you highlight the long-term transformation.
In Their Own Words...
Can you replace the written testimonials with the screenshot testimonals you scratched from the section further up on the page?
ET.
same button copy feedback
Get IMMEDIATE ACCESS to all of these courses as soon as you join!
I would combine this section with the membership-exclusive courses so it's all in one
ET.
Same again for the button copy
BETH MCWILLIAMS
I love the videos!!! And I'd be tempted to get rid of the written testimonials underneath
SKINNY MINI JOURNAL
Can you add a tiny blurb explanation for each course here? Super short to give it some context.
Here's a peek at some of the exclusive courses inside...
PLUS get exclusive access to 6 courses ONLY available to the Roben's Nest members:
The Roben’s Nest comes with…
What you can expect inside the Roben's Nest each month...
Hear from happy members...
I would reduce it to the 6 most impactful testimonials here so people don't get lost. 3 rows are perfect to view on a desktop screen.
ET
Same comment for the button copy as per above
open arms and paint-splattered aprons!
Can you add a photo of you with a paint-splattered apron here to spice things up and add some fun?
You love creating but feel stuck and need support to reignite your spark. You’re seeking fresh inspiration, accountability, and the confidence to create consistently. You’re eager to explore new mediums and techniques in a welcoming, encouraging environment. You want to learn new skills without the stress of spending a fortune on courses. You’re ready to leave behind online overwhelm and step into a real, nurturing community. You want to enjoy the creative process fully and feel proud of every step in your artistic journey You’re craving connection with fellow creatives who understand and share your passion. Your inner muse is ready to break free from the comfort zone, play without pressure, and truly believe in your art.
I would shrink the list down to the 5 most commen denominators to make it easier to digest. Also, I'd move the you into the heading so you start each bullet point idea with a verb. Can you have a look through your survey responses to see whether there are any priceless expressions that make this section feel really tangible?
Monthly Community Membership
I'd remove this because you're mentoning the monthly membership nature of the offer above
The Roben’s Nest, a monthly membership led by artist Roben-Marie Smith, is your go-to community for free-spirited creatives of all levels—beginners are not just welcome, they’re celebrated!
I would turn this into a standalone statement underneath this section so it can pop and stand out. It's easy to miss within this paragraph.
Take a break to nurture your creative soul and reconnect with fellow makers in a joyful, judgment-free, and FUN online haven.
This is where you introduce the Roben's Nest. Start the sentence with 'The Roben's Nest is your well-deserved break to nurture... this speaks to the mindset that a lot of women think they don't deserve time to themselves from yoru survey
Although creative souls have more info at our fingertips than ever before (thanks, Internet) true community can be hard to find.
And make this the subheading. It hits home!!! Possibly add 'like you' in there.
A Cozy Corner for Creative Confidence, Connection and Community!
I'd remove this line
Doors Close August 31 @ 9:00PM ET.
On the second button, can you add "(get 2 months free)"?
Who this course is designed for:
I would insert a 'what you'll walk away with' section here first.
Something like...
This isn't just any course. It sets you up for creative success!
Spark your ideas Learn the steps Source your materials Silence your inner critique Take it from idea to finished project
Hey, you made it all the way down here, so before you go, why not take a chance on making art for yourself. Enjoy theBring some joy into your life! No risk, no obligation, just a chance to make something with your hands! And it's FREE...
If you're after a fun creative project that you ACTUALLY take from idea to custom art journey, then get FREE instant access now.
And I'd make the button somewhat less doubtful ;-) SIGN ME UP NOW
I would love to join you on your artistic journey. Whether you are discovering art for the first time or you’ve been around the block a time or two.
In this section, can you touch on how many students you have supported to date to build trust? 5000+ students for example.
I would also include a logo bar here if you've been featured in media or publications.
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I'd streamline this bullet point section and reduce it to the top 5 points. And reword the heading to something like...You'll love this FREE mixed media art course if you:
Take a closer look at the flip book you'll be creating!
I love this video and would move it up right underneath the "what you'll walk away with" section. What if you reworded the heading to something like: Sign up to this FREE course now to create your very own version of this beauty:
Can you believe all of these lessons are yours to enjoy for FREE?
I'd start a separate visual section here that sparks the reader's imagination. Something like...
Imagine getting your hands on EVERYTHING it takes to create a custom art journal.
And then you can have the visuals of what's included with a little blurb about each step. What if?
Limited Time FREE Art Course!Regular Price $47
My questions right off the bat here... is this course really only free for a limited time? If it's always free, I'd suggest removing it to keep it genuine and build trust in your brand. I'd consider replacing this intro with a killer statement that converts people instantly. Something like: Create your very own AMAZING flip book from start to finish with this FREE step-by-step video guide
These artist papers are versatile and can be used in countless ways: #simplero-section-3976b4f4-8c90-49b6-888b-6d9cf9065105 .block-e0e823f3-0c04-4819-b345-a9e22960afd3 .box { background-color: #fff; padding: var(--section-spacing); }
Use my bold and vibrant digtital papers to:
I'm excited to offer you a special freebie: six exclusive digitally made artist papers featuring my original art layered with my Florals on Fabric Papers. These stunning papers are bursting with bold colors and rich textures, perfect for adding a distinctive touch to your creations.
Bursting with bold colors and rich textures, these 6 exlusive, digitally-made artist papers give you instant FREE access to my original art layers with my Florals on Fabric Papers.
The perfect colorful way to enhance your own creative adventures!
Then you'll want these Free Digital Papers
Get FREE instant access to 6 exclusive, digitally-made papers featuring my original art so you add a distinctive touch to your own creations
Sign up now to receive your free pack of six digitally made artist papers and infuse your art with bold, textured beauty!
Grab your free pack of 6 digitally-made artist papers, and infuse your art with bold, textured beauty today
Hey, I’m Roben-Marie!
Can you add a logo bar here underneath your bio "as featured in"?
Get ready to elevate your art projects with unique and vibrant textures.
I'd make this stand out as a heading:
Elevate your art projects with unique and vibrant textures
I WANT THE PAPERS
DOWNLOAD FREE NOW
Want to
What if you could...
Roben-Marie
PS. Approaching your creative journey with curiosity is something I do on a regular basis inside The Roben's Nest, the membership for creatives like you craving a cozy space. You can check it out right here.
I gotcha' covered.
delete this because it's incorporated in the above line
You're probably wondering about which paper to print these onto, right
In case you're curious about the best papers to print these onto, I've got you covered:
Embark on freedom and happiness.
We know your sense of adventure knows no limits. The sturdy build and lightweight setup of the Getaway Pod XTD will take you to even the remote destinations on your wishlist.
Excellence without compromise.
Nothing in the Getaway Pod XTD has been left to chance. With solar panels to keep you powered up, an ensuite shower and toilet tent for convenience and a wrap-around awning to rival the best of them, this 4wd camping trailer means business.
Function over form, the details that matter.
Every detail has is designed to maximise the space, experience and creature comforts. From reverse cycle aircon to the luxury kitchen or from the king size bed with dual doors to the generous 870 litre storage space.
A compact lightweight teardrop camper designed to tow on the back of most cars, you’ll never know how you travelled without it. Featuring luxurious amenities including a flat screen TV, king-size bed, gourmet kitchen with all the bells and whistles, an ensuite toilet and shower, plenty of storage, air-conditioner and a wrap-around awning, it’s the ultimate holiday accommodation you’ve been looking for, in moveable form.
Getaway Pod was started by two Aussie cousins who searched for an adventure solution that would perfectly blend their desire for creature comforts and extreme adventures.
The Getaway Pod is the compact lightweight 4wd camping trailer that ticked all their boxes.
ideal for off-road adventures
STURDY DESIGN. CLEVER FEATURES. 100% LUXURY.
Manufactured in australia
WE BELIEVE YOU CAN HAVE IT ALL
compact lightweight teardrop camper
replace with: compact & lightweight teardrop 4wd camping trailer
You’ve just discovered a lighter, simpler, easier way to travel, with the Getaway Pod XTD.
Remove this because it was moved to the above the fold banner.
Safe and lightweight towing (say goodbye to heavy caravans!) Built tough, the Getaway Pod XTD is ideal for off-road adventures.
Replace this with: Ready to explore the lighter, simpler & easier way to travel?
Effortless luxurious holidays, anytime, anywhere.
THE 4WD CAMPING TRAILER FOR EFFORTLESS LUXURIOUS HOLIDAYS. ANYTIME, ANYWHERE.
and I'm thrilled to invite you to join my free course, 'Good and Plenty Painted Papers.'
I'm thrilled to invite you to join me inside my FREE mixed media art course, 'Good and Plenty Painted Papers'.
Get ready to pull up a chair to my art table, where we'll make magic happen. I can't wait to guide you to your very own stash of colorful painted papers that make the perfect backgrounds for your art journals, collages, and so much more.
Then let's do this, it's FREE!
GET FREE INSTANT ACCESS NOW
•You feel a bit stuck and are looking for fresh inspiration.
I can't seem to see the photo you've included here, but I assume it alludes to something like: This FREE course is perfect for you if...
I'm a mixed media artist and dedicated art instructor, and I teach both seasoned and beginner artists to embrace the creative process without fixating on perfection, all while enjoying the journey.
I would remove the mini about section from here and leave it to the about section towards the bottom of the page. What I would include here is a photo of you possibly painting or in your studio.
As Seen in...
I would move this banner right underneath the above the fold section, especially if you plan to drive cold traffic from Pinterest to this landing page
AND THESE AWESOME BONUSES ARE ALSO INCLUDED:
I would move this up underneath the inclusions section
Good and Plenty Painted Papers is one a dozen+ courses found only inside The Roben's Nest, my online creative community.Sign up and you get a peek inside and there's no obligation, I just want you to experience what it's like inside, learning from me.
Get exclusive FREE access to one of the 12+ signature courses inside The Roben's Nest, my online creative community, right now.
START CREATING TODAY
Join Good and Plenty Painted Papers and Get…
Good and Plenty Painted Papers comes with...
Step-by-Step Guide to Beautiful Painted Collage Papers
Explore the FREE Step-by-Step Guide to Beautiful Painted Collage Papers and create your very own backgrounds for your art journals, collages, envelopes, and so much more
ACCESS FREE NOW
Good and Plenty Painted Papers
I'd remove this and lead with your bio
Play Without Rules and Trust the Process
What if you played without rules and trusted the process?
HERE are the directions for logging into Simplero to access the classroom if you’re having trouble.
I would include one student creation and one student testimonial in the PS to convince them to check it out right now.
Something like PS. If you're tempted to put off this creative journey until later, then let this incredible creation convince you otherwise. Now's always the best time to be creative!
people in your life
Underneath this sectin, I would add an icon bar that speaks to your unique points of difference: hand-painted, hand-stitched, 100% bespoke, recycled, carbon-offsetting, etc (and you can totally repurpose this icon bar on your product pages) It's an easy way for people to understand what you stand for and what to expect
With your carefully chosen words typed by Dorothy my vintage typewriter
Underneath your about section, I'd inclue a 'featured and trusted by' logo bar. It seems that you have worked with a number of recoginsable organisations and media outlets. I would let people know about the amazing brands you've worked with.
About Blue Stiggy
I would move this up towards the top of your page. Right underneath your bestsellers
Give a Truly Thoughtful + Personal Gift
I would lead in with a short blurb about your truly unique concept. Something that draws people in and intrigues them to learn more.
Truly Thoughtful + Personal + Eco Conscious Stationery
This line shows as the Title of your website. So I assume you have optimised your home page for the SEO keyword 'eco conscious stationery'. If that's the case, I would flip it around so you lead in with your keyword and follow it up with 'Truly Thoughtful + Personal'
Join at the founding member price of $17 /month005Day(s):00Hour(s):50Minute(s):
Move this further down underneath the Membership introduction
Weekly journaling PromptsCommunity of like-minded People
I would be a bit more specific here around the inclusions. List them out in both columns as bullet points as a handy recap.
A membership for people who want more flow, connection, and intuition in their lives
The month-to-month membership for people like you who want to introduce more flow, connection and intuition into your life through journaling.
Also add this underneath: Only 12 spots available at the founding member price of $17/month
JOIN NOW
It is a choose-your-own-adventure.
Choose your own adventure as soon as you join
The weekly journaling prompts initiate the first step of your journey, but your heart will decide where it wants to take you from there.
What you can expect from your experience inside Heart2Pen:
Why should you join as a founding member?
Love this section and how clearly you call out the benefits of joining now
What I would do is move it up above the comparison table so it's an easier yes
14 days Money Back guarantee
I would include the comparision table for monthly and yearly again right here for those people who read right to the end
Eager to see a change in just 30 days? Make this membership yours.9 Ways to Make Yourself at homewith Heart2Pen
I would remove this concept from the sales page and turn it into part of your pre-launch content as an education peace. Or you could even include it in your onboarding sequence to set people up for success as soon as they join.
What you get when you join today
I would move this section up right underneath where you first introduce the membership with tagline.
But do you want to know why these efforts didn’t work?
While you're trying to come up for fresh air and reconnect with parts of yourself on a regular basis, you simply don't seem to get there.
But it's not for a lack of trying!
What is missing is...
You’re too much in your head. all the time.
But your reality unfortunately looks very different.
You're too much in your head...
And You Want toEnjoy doing things for the sake of it without having to performBe in the momentExperience more flowThings to feel natural and simple, like a picnic on a sunny day with your loved ones next to a quiet riverReconnect with parts of yourself that are buried under all the to-dos and have-tos ultimately
Turn this into an emotive 'dream future'opening paragraph.
Imagine a day when you knew how to be in the moment.
Where you...
follow this up with a list of tangible benefits and wins people are going to see from joining your membership. That dream state they're working towards.
heart2PenA membership for people who want to journey to their hearts through their pen
Rather than start with your membership name and tagline, I would begin with taking the reader on a journey first.
I would start with a super emotive opening question here:
What if you gave yourself permission to take a break from thinking and doing, and spend some quality time for and with yourself instead?
Get your priorities in order for the month ahead Become a consistent action-taker Navigate getting stuff done with ease Be productive AND prioritize yourself
I would turn this into a super strong opening paragraph all about the dream future they want to achieve so badly. Imagine a day when...
Also, do you have tangible results from clients that you could share here so the ideas become stickier and more relatable?
No contract. No minimum number of months. Cancel any time.
This is where you would stack up the monthly option against the 6-month option with a bullet point list of inclusions. The button underneath each can link to the same checkout page
Here’s to managing your time like a pro! Now you can... Spend more time with the important people you care about. Pursue what matters most. Be clear, focused, and in-control of how you spend your day. Feel calmer and more peaceful about your day-to-day life. Live in alignment with your priorities. Have time to breathe and do something for yourself.
I love the ideas here. What if you turned it into a mini timeline that helps people see the immediate, short-term and long-term transformation. Somethink like. As soon as you join... After a month inside... After 6 months inside
And then create a clear picture of what's possible in that timeframe?
Be more productive AND prioritize yourself!
What if I told you that you can be more productive AND prioritize yourself?
No contract. No minimum number of months. Cancel any time.
I would link all the buttons up to a comparision table at the bottom of hte page where you list all the inclusions as a bullet point list. And only the button at the bottom of the page links to the checkout page
In the More Than Productivity Membership, you'll learn The Productivity Success Method!
Introducing:
More Than Productivity
The month-to-month membership that gives you a productivity expert in your pocket so you can get laser-focused and take action on your most important business projects
(while ALSO freeing up time for yourself and the things that are most important to you!)
JOIN NOW
Sort through the noise and watch a life that makes sense become clear when you follow The Productivity Success Method by signing up today!
Move this one below the heading:
Let's help you sort through the noise so you can create a life that makes perfect sense to you.
Get the guided support you need through the 4 stages:
Ready to be guided by my signature Productivity Success Method?
It’s
I get it!
It's frustrating...
I'm calling it: You deserve to feel clear...
🙄
Because...
Does everything feel important but nothing is getting done?
But right now you're getting noting done because everything feels equally important.
The More Than Productivity Membership is the accessible solution that gives you a productivity expert in your pocket to help you get focused and take action while ALSO taking good care of yourself and spending time on what's most important to you!
I'd leave this introduction for later so you can build the intrigue and take them on a journey first
Take Charge of Your Time and To-Dos While Doing What Matters
What if you could finally take charge of your time and To-Dos and focus on what really matters to you?
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Consider moving the for women section up so it's the first that pops up if you want to make this your main focus
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Workshops. Short courses. Community.
who want glowing skin, vitality, gut and hormone health
want to give your own food literacy a gentle nudge
are looking for someone to help you make the right nutritional shifts in your life
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Jacqueline Sinfield Jacqueline has worked in health care for over twenty years. In England, she trained and worked as a registered nurse and obtained a bachelor’s degree in psychology before moving to Canada and setting up her practice as a coach for adults with ADHD. Her Untapped Brilliance blog has been named a “Top ADHD Blog of 2015, 2016, 2017, 2018” by Healthline, “Best of the Web Blog” by Psych Central and “Top 20 ADHD Blog Winner” by ADDerworld. In addition she was a writer for the health website VeryWell.com for two years as their ADHD Expert. Her book Untapped Brilliance has helped thousands of adults with ADHD. Education Jacqueline is a qualified nurse, bachelor’s degree in psychology (Hon.) and a certificate in counselling. She is a Coach U (USA) graduate. She has also studied and read widely with international ADHD experts and continues to be attentive to emerging research.
I fell that the about section further up on the page is enough. I'd remove this
Not in a grin and bear it sort of way, but in an enjoyable and rewarding way. In this video you will learn the strategy!
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What do a timer, notebook, and index cards have in common? They are the three tools that help you to concentrate!
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Immediate Access After making the payment, check your inbox. There will be an email with your login information so you can start the first module right away!
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When you do this, you feel proud of what you accomplished and the memories you created. Year planning doesn’t have to be done in December. You can do it any time, including right now! The printable worksheets are designed make the planning process easy and fun.
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Feel centred, grounded and proactive rather than scattered and reactive. Create time in your day to do your important daily actions, so you feel confident they will get done. Eliminate worries that you are forgetting things… because you aren’t! Start each day with a clear direction and focus, so you always know what needs to be done and when. Reduce your stress levels. And much more!
Can you reduce this to the top 3 ideas and the much more bullet point?
It helps to break through that glass window pane of resistance you can have when you know what task you want to do and how to do it, but you can't seem to start. When you use this technique, you naturally feel enthusiastic and 'into' the task rather than dragging your feet and half-heartedly doing it.
I'd remove this to make it more concise
Coaching Notes After our call, I email you your coaching notes. These help you remember the key points we talked about. Plus, it means you don’t have to write anything down during the ‘It’s a Wrap’ coaching session… unless you want to.
And combine this one with the private coaching session blurb
A Private Coaching Session 1 75 minute private coaching session with Jacqueline During our ‘It’s a Wrap’ coaching session we go through the steps together and personalize them to you and your unique life.
I'd call this out as an option separately once you've explored all standard features
Comments You can leave comments under the training videos to get feedback from Jacqueline as you go through the steps. Tech Support The training videos are hosted on an intuitive and easy to use platform. However, if you have any tech questions, please email us at support@untappedbrilliance and we will take care of you right away.
I'd remove these 2 because they're not really features
Self Study Option
Can you add a bar like this for the upgrade option as well? Something like 1:1 Option?
Step 1 Pick
Can you condense this section about the steps somehow to make it easier to read and make the sales page shorter overall? Possibly 2 columns or even 3?
Know which ideas to focus on first, and which can happen later. Learn how to make realistic plans to avoid feeling overwhelmed or disappointed. Understand how to break big things down into ‘do-able’ actions. Learn how to feel motivated, even when you would rather spend the day on the sofa. Become consistent, so that you don’t get side tracked or forget your plans. Have a repeatable system, so you can trust yourself to follow through and finish things again and again. Plus! A positive side effect is you feel proud, accomplished and confident in your abilities.
Can you reduce the number of points in this list and reduce them to the top 5? And call out the PLUS idea separately at the bottom so it stands out.
The ‘It’s a Wrap’ 6 step process to go from idea to finished!
Is this meant to read: This 6-step process will see you go from idea to finished!
That is why I created ‘It’s a Wrap.’
Can you start a new visual section here and introduce it with this line as a heading.
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Lead in with something like: Hi, I'm Jacquline
Do you...
But currently your reality looks a little more like this... and then pick the top 5 tangible/common/relatable issues
Imagine being able to start and FINISH all your important tasks and projects! (Without ever buying another productivity book.)
I would add more context underneath this awesome opener. A short paragraph around the actual dream future. What that would look like and what it would feel like.
And then... leading into a new section that speaks about their 'right now' they're trying to escape from.
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I would set the scene around who Dan is first... something like: Meet your fellow ADHDer Dan.
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I would slightly reword the tagline in the header image so it starts with the outcomes. Something like: Motivate yourself so you can successfully prioritize and follow through with your plan with this ADHD-friendly 6-step system.
Success timelines are based on average client timelines. We do not guarantee you a job in a certain timeframe.
I'd slightly reword this. Something like: While 90% of past clients have secured interviews within 2 weeks, and landed their dream offer in less than 4 months, this program does not come with a guarantee that you'll secure a job within that timeframe.
Learn from an industry insider
I would move this entire about section further up on the page just underneath the first pricing tables.
Lifetime access to the Course
I would beef up these ideas more and move them down into the pricing table.
The course. The feedback. The support.
The perfect blend of feedback, support and guidance
to a calendar full of interviews.LEARN THE PROVEN METHOD THAT WILL ALLOW YOU TO MANEUVER THROUGH YOUR SEARCH WITH EASE
Love this section... what if you turned it into a mini timeline? As soon as you join... in 2 weeks... in 1 month ... in 2 months ... in 3-4 months
PAY IN FULL
I would break down here what exactly is included in the program. How many group calls? Which courses? Which templates? What does the 1:1 support look like? What is the format of each inclusion? Is there a private podcast? Make it super clear for people to see what they get.
The program includes
Can you somehow break down the program into or modules so people can picture how they're going to progress through your framework?
We’ve helped tech industry leaders make big moves.
I would move this section towards the top of the page because it includes brands your clients would be aspiring to land a role at, right?
The job search strategy program with 1:1 support leveraging my proven Inevitable Edge Method to drive your search with clarity and confidence.
The 16-week job search strategy program that will give you the clarity and confidence to not only land the RIGHT interviews but secure that DREAM role.
90% of clients secured their dream offer in less than 4 months.
Each of these phases on their own can seriously accelerate your resultsBut leverage all 3 and you'll take your big career goals fromeventual Inevitable.
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