I love this video and would totally move it up towards the top of the page right underneath the 'during the bb art jouranls masterclass' section

This comment relates to the picture above: I'd change it to something like... but right now...

Get first dibs on a transformative 12-week art experience and FINALLY embrace your unique style as a creator.

Join the waitlist today and prepare to grow your confidence through creativity!

And you finally...

eliminated obstacles started making

I'd finish off with a final push. Help them reflect about their options. Yes, you can attempt to do this on your own, or you can do it with my expert guidance and support. What is it going to be?

I would include a section that shows how people progress through the program week by week with a tangible win after each week so they can picture how they'll progress through the content but also through their transformation

Can you change these up so it's crystal clear what people get? Is it pre-recorded videos? Do they get personal access to you? If so, how often?

Personally, I'm not a huge fan of putting hyperthetical pricetags against inclusions and rather lead with the amazing value this offer represents on its own

Not sure about the use of budget-friendly here.

I would move this further down on the page and explain the possible transformation with your program a bit more first.

Introducing: Command the Room, the career coaching program that...

And while you ABSOLUTELY have the ...

But right now, you're...

Love this section... and I would totally lead in with it. Imagine a day when...

Lead with a big, bold promise here that gives peope hope right from the start

CTA: Get instant access now

I would bold the most important sections here and possibly reduce them to the 5-8 most important.

Can you add 1 short sentence here?

What we'll cover in this course:

I'm tempted to add an emotive intro blurb here, even it it's short. Somethign along the lines of. What if you could create a zipper pouch without... a sewing machine, being a sewing pro, etc.

All it takes is your creativity, a few affordable materials and the lessons inside this self-paced course.

I would also remove this and incorporate it into the button CTA: Get instant access for only $45

I would remove this because it feels like a double up and instead simply add 'self-paced' into the header image.

ACCESS FREE NOW

Can you possibly add a button underneath each blurb so it's clear where people have to click?

As you add more episodes to your repertoire, you can absolutely add them here. :)

So good. That's the stuff people love to find on an about page. :)

Love!!!! Such a great visual touch and a good option to make this trust section different to the one on your home page.

Love the above the fold section. I would bold this sentence to make it pop though!

Delete and lead in with "My studio-aka my happy, gloriously messy place-, is where I experiment with..."

Lets help you...

Ideally, I'd still love to see this as 3 columns with image. :)

But there's more to my story than meets the eye.

I would save this detail for your about page. This section is meant to be teasing a little bit and intrigue people to click through to your about page. :)

Meet the artist!

PS. Remember that you have ongoing access to BB Fringe Flip Book, so make sure you bookmark it for when the time is right.

Some of my articles

Some of my other videos

Is it worth mentioning the discount here? If it's juicy enough, I'd totally be specific here.

After more creative adventures?

And with ongoing access to the course, you can revisit it whenever creativity strikes.

Thankfully you do have ongoing access to this class, so can tune in when the time's right.

Love this! Such good motivation.

It's been a little while since you grabbed BB Fringe Flip Book (hyperlink this to the course platform login page), so I thought I'd...

If you enjoy this class, I'd love you to spread the love and share it with your friends.

I would remove this section because it sends people away from your website. You want to conver them to sign up to your list and/or buy from you while here, so sending them to Instagram, etc is making this harder.

Is there any way to turn this into a visual and have these icons on your about page rather than a duplicate of the home page icons?

I wonder whether you can add a visual here too and a bit more contect from your sales page.

This would be perfect to set the scene right underneath the header and icon bar.

If feel that a pop up box would be better for announcements like these so you don't have to constantly update your website, and people's attention is drawn to topical things.

I feel that this could be deleted.

I would move this project into a separate section because it gets lost here.

I feel like you've covered these elements in previous sections. I wonder whether you could give them ideas around what they can use the finished project for. Gift card, framed artwork, etc.

I would switch this for the course name

I would move this up above the 'who it's for' section

I would move this sectin underneath the course name graphic with your photo.

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Can you left-align all these sections? Some are centred, while others are left-aligned.

are there 2 spaces after this word?

I thing this section needs to move up above the testimonial section so it flows on form your about section where you mention the 4 pillars. And, I'd make the first sentence BOLD

Not sure this button clicks to where you want it to click?

Bold

Bold this

Move the Order bump down so the pricing options are shown first

This needs to move down so it sits right above the screenshot testimonials

I think 30€ is missing from the second row of button copy

This section looks AWESOME!!!

I would add a visual here to draw attention

To access these EXTRA bonuses...

Click here to grab the Power Pack for an extra 50EUR instead!

Can you include this emoji here to draw attention to this section? 🙅

I would move the order bump down so it sits underneath the pricing options

This needs to move down to sit right above the screenshot testimonials

Any way to reduce this statement so it sits on one line? On my screen, now is sitting by itself on the second row.

Any chance you could move the button up closer to this line so it shows above the fold?

A little picky, but is it possibly to align this box with the one next to it?

I'd delete this second robot emoji

This one looks GREAT!!! The only thing I'd possibly do to add a visual, is add the membership logo in the header section.

Oh, and check that only the first month is free...

I would also move the pricing options further up so they come before the order bump

This needs to sit right above the testimonials further down in the cart

Same for these boxes. They don't quite align at the bottom. Sorry, being 100% picky now ;-)

and this one is slightly bigger than the other 2

Is it possible to make this box align with the others in this row? It comes in slightly shorter than the others.

Could you center this section also? It looks a little off as the only left-aligned part.

I can't mark up buttons so have added the comment here. I it possible to format the button so the words all sit on one line?

Is it possible to reduce the width here so the text appears narrower and is easier to read? It can be hard for the reader to digest when they're reading all across a big desktop screen.

I would move this section up much higher on the page right underneath the kind words section.

I would also revamp this section entirely because the lessons are already released (I assume) and ready to watch as soon as they join. So I would say something like: Access additional short sessons from each of the guest artists as well as the othe amazing benefits waiting for you inside the membership.

And then I'd list the sessions as well as the other top-line inclusions of your membership in bullet point format.

Keep growing with your FREE month inside the Roben's Nest

and receive ONE MONTH FREE inside the Roben's Nest, the membership .... (valued at $24).

This exlusive launch offer and pricetag disappear when the timer strikes zero

and ongoing

I would make this the heading

virtual summit

I'd change the CTA here too... DOWNLOAD THE DIGITAL VERSION

I'm curious... are you not able to link to the print version or do you ask them to sign up so you capture their email addresses? If it's a conscious decision to make them sign up, I'd reword the button CTA slightly. GET YOUR EXCLUSIVE LINK TO ORDER... and then the CTA in the pop-up box would be SEND ME THE EXCLUSIVE LINK TO ORDER

I wonder whether you can include a photo of yourself with the print version in the header so there's a warm smile as soon as they land on the page.

Can you add a little more detail around how many hours it includes and the outcome of the day?

I would move this up so it's in line with the inclusions in the column on the left. And bold the VIP day inclusion on the left...

I would centre this

This font seems different to the headings above?

Can you centre this section on the page and bold the first sentence?

Can you move this text next to the photo of your with your medal at all?

Could you structure this section as 4 columns at all? I think it would make it look cleaner.

I feel like there's something missing over the header image?

I think this is too much in the header section. I would remove this section entirely.

As for the button copy, I'd remove Register Here!

I would beef these up in a separate 'this is what you can expect' section underneath your about section.

Some of these ideas would be great to the 'right now' section further up on the page

I'd try to condense your about section to one visual section on the page. So possibly see how you can move this bit into your 'main' about section

BB ARt Journal Masterclass will help you...

I'd then follow it with a paragraph that addresses the right now and how they're currently approaching their art. The frustration of doubting themselves, not knowing where to start, lacking feedback so they know how they can improve, etc...

And then I would introduce your BB Art Journals Masterclass as the solution in the next section.

I would lead with what's possibe here... the dream future!

What if you activated your full creative potential and said goodbye to overwhelm?

Imagine what it would feel like to eliminate the sheer impossible obsticles that have been holidng you back from creating? And you not only started creating consistently, but you could watch your skills grow week by week?

And you could trust your artistic intuition?

Someting like this...

This also perfectly lends itself to a clumn-style approach

I would definitely turn this into a 3-colum section with a matching icon/graphic for each

I would move this section right underneath the header

Find confidence through creativity in this 12-week art adventure, and FINALLY embrace your unique style

Next up, I would explore your courses. A headling like 'This is how you can create with me'. And then a short blurb that sets the scene for your classes and courses. Possibly mention accessible, mix of free and paid, fun, colourful and easy-to-follow here. Maybe a mockup of some of your creations next to the blurb. And then a button that reads something like [START CREATING]

When it comes to your freebie sign-up... I would leave it as as separate section at the bottom of the page, but also have a banner at the top of your page that links to a pop up where people can sign up so it's always visible.

Love the blog section! Could you possibly rename it into something like 'The latest tips & tutorials'.

I know you're 'big' on YouTube, so why not have a section that inviges people to subscribe to your YouTube channel linking to your 3 most popular videos and a main button underneath that reads [SUBSCRIBE NOW]

I would start with a big, bold banner above the fold that leads with a simple statement around what you do. Something like: Fun courses, classes & inspiration for newbie & seasoned artists. Also add a bright, bold button that links through to your courses page [JOIN A CLASS]

...

Right underneath, I would have an 'as featured by & seen in banner' where you hightlight any amazing features you've had since starting out.

....

Next up, I'd slot in a short and sharp intro paragraph that sets the scene for your unique approach to art, and what makes it so appealing for your community.

I would keep your about section on the Home page short and intriguing so people click through to your about page to find out more. I would focus on this part of your story here, and then invite them to click through to your about page where you go into more detail. The button can read something like: EXPLORE MY ARTISTIC JOURNEY

who

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What about changing this to Hi, I'm Jacqueline Sinfield?

Could you turn this into a 3-column section with a matching icon so it pops more?

I would bold this sentence

Could you add a button here that links up to the options section on your sales page for those who are ready to buy?

Underneath the video, I'd include a snapshot of the projects you've committed to without linking to other places on your website (because you want to keep readers here). Maybe one image with a mention of the project name and year?

Digital or print? The choice is yours!

And then I'd display 2 columns with mockups underneath giving people the ability to choose.

For digital it could read something like: Get instant FREE access to a digital download for you to print at home.

For the print version it could read something like: Get your luxurious hard copy delivered right to your doorstep in a matter of days.

I would create a brand new video to embed right above the inclusion section where you talk through your experience with the challenge, and talk through the free digital or paid print options. Why not showcase a printed journal in the video so people can see what it looks like? I'd also take the opportunity to introduce yourself here for context. Unerneath the video, I'd also include logos of where you've been featured in relation to this concept.

Underneath the thumbnail section, I would include an FAQ section addressing the differences between the digital delivery and the phyiscal delivery to make it crystal clear. And then finish with a repetition of the 2-column section giving people the option to choose digital or paid printed.

If you show a hard copy of the tracker in your video, then I'd skip this section and simply leave the thumbnail section you currently have.

Move this one right underneath the header section for people who come to you vie a Google Search.

I wonder whether displaying the sections in 5 colums with a number icon above makes it easier to digest and understand?

Planning, Tracking and Reflecting made easy

Elevate your 100 Day Project Experience with the 65+-page Workbook and Tracker | Available in Digital & Print

Could you add the cover shot for your 3 most popular YouTube videos here for people to click on?

could you add starting from $xx here?

Could you use trigger links here to introduce the 3 most popular ones and allow them to get them straight to their inbox with one click?

delete

Do you have a snap of you as a child creating that you could include here?

Great subject line!

Could you link up a few of your most popular videos/blog posts here to showcase the quality of what they can expect?

This is where I introduce you to

Love this!

Expect something new

I'd keep this all in one sentence

I usully jump between personal snippets and artsy gems.

I'd stay away from the term newsletter and change it to 'emails from me'. I reckon newletter sounds outdated because, let's face it, hardly anyone wants constant sales pitches in their inbox... and that's what comes to mind when I hear newsletter ;-)

LOL :)

Funnily enough, on the other side of that bridge was one of

delete

just over half the

I'd keep it short and sharp and delete this intro

Love the format of the image section

Make sure the CTA button mentiones the price because it's such a no-brainer

I'd totally remove this and get straight into it

Doors are wide open for my...

Why don't you position this section as a collection of your AND your community's favourites, and include a subtle mention of your membership and our best-selling low-ticket course?

I'd reword the intro to "Let's start with a few of my community's (and my) favourites"

Can you add a sentence here around the idea of how many people roughly you have 'connected with' over the years? That could look like this: Since {year}, that's seen xxxx+ art curious humans experience my courses and community.

Can you possibly encourage a reply here with the promise to send them access to an exclusive class they can't get anywhere else? I reckon it will skyrocket your responses and help you build connections

Can you link up the Roben's Nest here?

So do I haha

That's a solid foundation, but let me share a little more about me so we can take this email relationship from stranger to online friend.

Can you move this into a separate line?

Love the new look and feel of this section

bold

bold

bold

bold

Can you highlight some key words here?

Loooove!!!

Start this section with this verb

I'd start this section with a verb too

Wondering... is it possible at all to make the colourful border around the white box slightly bigger?

Can you potentially reduce the column width here so it doesn't sprawl as far across the screen?

Delete this :)

Six months from now

In a month you will have

As soon as you join you can

I'd put all these in quotation marks

Can you make this all capitals?

,

Looove the little blurbs!

I'd drop this down into the next line also

Can you drop this into the line below and make it bold so it really stands out?

I'd center this section

Can you add some before/after shots or user-generated content?

I would move the reviews panel further up on the page

I would turn these AMAZING benefits into an emotive introduction blurb. They are what's going to sell your product!

I'd make this section easier to read and less wordy. Also, can you add the price of NOT joining in here to give them a gentle nudge? I'd also add an inclusion table again at the bottom of the sales page

Is this bit meant to be a repeat of further up on the page?

Can you scatter individual reviews/testimonials throughout the sales page rather than bunching them up in one section? It means people don't accidentally scroll past.

Again, try to format it in a way that makes it easier to digest this information. I'd steer towards a brief paragraph for each inclusion outlining it in more detail

I would make this section easier to digest by turning it into columns with matching icons/mockups as well as adding the 'so what' to each inclusin

Love how you're introducing the origin of this concept. I would add a section about you here. Who you are, why you're perfectly positioned to support them, and touch on accountability being the one thing that got you to where you are today

I'd turn these bullet points into a paragraph that touches on why this concept works. And I would remove the individual buttons

This is a great third section. It's the solution to their current approach. Introduce the membership here with a big, bold promise while touching on the structure/format.

This is a great second section of this sales page. It's addressing what they're currently trying to do unsuccessfully.

I would start with a section here that speaks to what's possible. .. the ultimate dream rather than the struggles. That way you're starting on a positive note and what's possible.

I would link these buttons up to the inclusins section on this page rather than to the checkout because people haven't had a chance to learn more about the program yet

Start with the big, bild promise here. What are members going to achieve by joining?

Move this right underneath the main header for instant trust and credibility

Make sure you move this one up right underneath your about blurb