Title– Do they have one? Is it a catchy title? Does it make you want to read/look more? -There is no title here. The most catchy thing here was the ATLA screencaps; I just finished watching the series and this seems like a cute bit of canon-divergence so that's what made me want to review this draft. Maybe something about the Jasmine Dragon or Iroh & Zuko to signal that this story is based on ATLA.

Content Is the thesis/commentary identifiable through the images? -I think the series of six images tells a clear story. It definitely helps that I am familiar with the characters and their stories as they exist in canon. I think the fifth image (Iroh fighting Azula) seems a little confusing because it isn't really clear that they are fighting. If you're keeping bending in this story maybe use an image of that instead?

Is the thesis/commentary identifiable through the text? -I think the captions do well to explore what each image is meant to convey. They clarify the important aspects of each image, like when the tea shop is transferred to a more central/royal location within Ba Sing Se. The captions also definitely situation Uncle Iroh as the main character; judging from just the images it could be either him or Zuko. The captions mostly focus on him and then the story resolves with him retiring and giving Zuko the shop so that was a nice ending.

Does it offer a clear story/narrative? -Yes. There is a clear structure with a beginning, middle, and end - Zuko and Iroh moving to Ba Sing Se, them being moved by the King and experiencing challenges, and then Iroh retiring. This was a fun and light story.

Does it clearly describe or imply what the project sets out to do? -I'd read this fic! Who doesn't love Zuko and Uncle Iroh having a good time with the tea shop. I am a little confused as to how this fits in in-universe. Are they actually refugees rather than firebenders passing themselves off as refugees? In the screencap with Azula you write that "he has some enemies for ditching the refugees" so I am wondering if she is included in that or if the royalty of the fire nation still exists.

What could this student do to improve this section (and “nothing, it’s fine” is not a very helpful answer). -Clarify whether this is a no-bending AU or not. A lot of their struggles in canon with the tea shop deal with them having to hide the fact that they're firebenders and royalty at that (AKA Jet), and it changes the set up of your story here whether or not that is still the case.

Images/Media Do they include media or do they have a plan for what media they are using? -The images are ATLA screencaps. This works well because it clearly shows the characters and settings and is recognizable to those familiar with the show.

How does the media help the argument/commentary? -These images helped me remember what happens with the storyline in canon and it made me more intrigued to know about the story that will be presented here. I think the only confusing thing is that Zuko isn't named in the first two panels and an unfamiliar reader could be wondering which one of them is Iroh.

Is there opportunity to incorporate additional media? -I'm not very sure what additional media would entail. If you're making this into a vid I would merely suggest using caps that take up the full screen and don't have the Nick logo on them, but that's about it. Audio like music from the show might work well if you think that would fit with the story.

Finally, what suggestions do you have for the writer going forward? How can they improve? List your TOP THREE SUGGESTIONS.

1. Establish Zuko and Iroh as seperate individuals and clarify whether or not they are benders.
2. Explain why Iroh "has some enemies for ditching the refugees." What was the situation, is Azula actually Azula or is she just a random OC, etc.?
3. Maybe hint at Iroh wanting to retire early in the story? It's not difficult to assume because of his age, but it seems that the main point of the first five slides is how innovative he is and how much he loves working at tea shops, so it was a little surprising that the conclusion was him retiring.