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  1. May 2024
    1. I wish you way more than luck

      S: David Foster Wallace O: 2005 Kenyon Commencement Address A: Keyon graduates P: to emphasize the freedom we have in our way of life, thinking and perspectives S: various advice and reflection on life Tone: reflective, critical, inspiring

    2. I know that this stuff probably doesn't sound fun and breezy or grandlyinspirational the way a commencement speech is supposed to sound

      Close to addressing rebuttals/criticism, shows critical thinking

    3. Worship power, you will end up feeling weak and afraid, and you willneed ever more power over others to numb you to your own fear

      Shows the dark side/negatives of each trait -> no life track is the "right" one

    4. there is actually no such thing as atheism. There isno such thing as not worshipping. Everybody worships. The only choicewe get is what to worship

      partly ethos appeal by bringing up higher powers who, in this argument, all people worship and respect, thus unifies him and his audience

    5. The only thing that'scapital-T True is that you get to decide how you're gonna try to see it

      Uses very simple language towards a younger but still educated audience - depicts his "rejection" of traditional education and life, gives his audience a break from the complicated information/assignments they're used to, and makes him more relatable and the info easier to digest

    6. likelihood that everyoneelse in the supermarket's checkout line is just as bored and frustrated as Iam, and that some of these people probably have harder, more tediousand painful lives than I do

      Interesting hearing all this because I quite like the supermarket and doing errands, even on my busiest of days

    7. In this traffic, all these vehicles stopped andidling in my way, it's not impossible that some of these people in SUV'shave been in horrible auto accidents in the past

      These are both sides of very extreme examples -> adds to logos so audience is able to reason with middle ground (his argument) more

    8. t's goingto seem for all the world like everybody else is just in my way. And whoare all these people in my way?

      In my experience, I feel like guys have a harder time with this than girls. With societal pressures to stay "lady-like" with staying passive, permanently content, or more nurturing, compassion/empathy are learned younger and more easily

    9. if I don't make a conscious decision abouthow to think and what to pay attention to, I'm gonna be pissed andmiserable every time I have to shop

      Connection to psych class unit on happiness and negativity bias where it is the human nature (from an evolutionary standpoint) to focus and learn more from the negative experiences rather than positives

    10. of course it's the time of day whenall the other people with jobs also try to squeeze in some groceryshopping

      Uses imagery, descriptions and flow to create logos

    11. at the end of the day you'retired and somewhat stressed and all you want is to go home

      Sad cycle, you work to afford a house and other necessities and after work are left so drained, the only thing you can do is go home

    12. learning how to think really meanslearning how to exercise some control over how and what you think

      Disagree while in theory and in an idealized world, yes, but as the system stands as is, no

    13. get lost inabstract argument inside my head, instead of simply paying attention towhat is going on right in front of me

      Missing the present moment for the over complication/overthinking of whats around, takes you out of the experience

    14. Theworld as you experience it is there in front of YOU or behind YOU, tothe left or right of YOU, on YOUR TV or YOUR monitor.

      Interesting how because of the digital age, we have to specify monitors and tvs as part of our lives because of our ingrained they are into our current systems/society

    15. Because ahuge percentage of the stuff that I tend to be automatically certain of is, itturns out, totally wrong and deluded.

      Undermining the education these graduates worked so hard for. Begs the question of would he/they be able to come to these realizations of being wrong without their prior education?

    16. nowhere in our liberal arts analysisdo we want to claim that one guy's interpretation is true and the otherguy's is false or bad

      Disagree - I believe that as our education system evolves, while we still have the illusion of "diversity of belief" but we do not value it. People are so used to conformity that it now the automatic response

    17. experimented

      Interesting word choice, most people are born into and raised with religion (have almost innate belief) and don't just "experiment"

    18. One of the guys isreligious, the other is an atheist

      Good didactic story given the time period and audience -> religion is such a big issue in America today and will relate to a lot of the audience members

    19. I'd ask you to think about fish andwater

      Directly asking the audience to reflect emphasizes the deeper meaning and metaphor for life in general

    20. isn't really aboutthe capacity to think, but rather about the choice of what to think about

      As learned in ES, unfortunately, most people take that choice of what to think about and choose to follow the influence of the majority - take advantage of the choice to not think for themselves

    21. whythe degree you are about to receive has actual human value instead of justa material payoff

      Relates to Excellent Sheep and the critiques of higher, elite education and the lack of actual human value in today's age

    22. two young fish swimming along and they happen to meetan older fish swimming the other way, who nods at them and says"Morning, boys. How's the water?" And the two young fish swim on for abit, and then eventually one of them looks over at the other and goes"What the hell is water?"

      Personification of the fish makes the metaphor easier to understand as it translates to real, human life We struggle to comprehend what we are going through in the moment but once we are older, have more experiences to compare it to, and more time to reflect, we see the importance of our past and have more gratitude/respect for it

  2. Apr 2024
    1. The man, however, was gazing in idle reverie at the city’s skyline growing ever more beautiful, and he failed tonotice

      S: Shinichi Hoshi O: the unseen consequences surrounding disposal of wartime objects A: appeals to individuals interested in science fiction and the consequences of advancements P: to warn the public and call attention to the everyday actions we take now that will affect future generations S: what to do with a former shrine turned hole Tone: whimsical, direct

    2. The hole gave peace of mind to the dwellers of the city.

      Temporary peace that duture generations will have to pay the consequences for - similar to the burning of fossil fuels in our lives. While it is the easiest and simplest option, the future consequences will have critical impacts

    3. The lesser functionaries, asthey threw in the papers, chatted about pinball.

      Connection to Born on the 4th of July where the doctors talked about football and other unimportant matters while on the job. It illustrates a disconnect between the action and the person, implying a lack of care

    4. Government authorities granted permission

      Illustrates the fluctuating power dynamic that gives reader intell on the functioning of the town. With the switch to focus on the higher powered organizations, the reader and mayor alike forget about the wants of the villagers

    5. Safer to get rid of something one didn’t understand

      Ending paragraph with this emphasizes the message without needing explanation. It follows a line of reasoning to help reader understand

    6. policeman

      Interesting how there's uneducated villagers in the same area as policeman, scientists, reporters, etc.. Showcases a big divide between the different members of their community

    7. warned an old man, but the younger one

      Specification of ages compares childish nativity versus superstitious traditions that foreshadows an upcoming conflict surrounding the hole

    8. The typhoon had passed and the sky was a gorgeous blue

      Gives brief context for storm and illustrates the calm after storm. However, typhoon alludes to a disaster that even after the passing of the storm, there will still be emotional and physical repercussions.

    1. eagles

      S: Annie Dillard O: an interaction she had seeing a weasel in her backyard A: this could interest environmental enthusiasts or philosopher's, however it is broad/accessible enough to encompass a general reading audience <br /> P: to encourage living a life of freedom that embraces being wild S: wild weasels and using them as examples for how we should live Tone: reflective, thoughtful, fantastical

    2. let your musky flesh fall off in shreds, and let your very bones unhinge and scatter

      Her rational writing was short lived, now as she goes back to extremes, she loses the main message of her writing

    3. We can live any way we want

      Uses the abstract, absurd ideas of living like a weasel to connect it to the realistic idea of living how you want. She uses weasels as an example, showing one side of living in extremes, to make her point more rational

    4. I should have gone for the throat.

      Interesting how she describes this action without intent of killing. The word choice is confusing as she connects two entirely separate ideas of killing and living with the weasel

    5. I would like to learn, or remember, how to live.

      Connection to Emerson where he believes fostering a connection with nature is the only way to properly live. While Emerson uses his own long term experience in the woods to inspire others, Dillard uses her brief experience to illustrate her longing for deeper connection.

    6. What goes on in his brain the rest of the time?

      Rhetorical questions that can never be answered provides time for reader to reflect on the experience and spark curiosity

    7. I tell you I've been in that weasel's brain for sixty seconds, and he was in mine

      Interesting how she takes a direct, blatant approach to illustrate something so far-fetched. It is easier to understand this text if it is not taken literally; however, she rejects that approach, consequently hurting her message

    8. This was only last week, and already I don't remember what shattered the enchantment

      Connection to Thoreau, due to the current pace of life, we cannot consistently keep simplicity, such as looking at weasels. With the rush of life, moments of simplicity are often forgotten, as they were here.

    9. Our look was as if two lovers, or deadly enemies

      Weird that she compared looking at a weasel to looking at a "lover". That feels way too intimate for the circumstances. I understand she wanted to show a comparison between lover and enemy but I think it takes away from main idea as readers will get hung up on this

    10. He had two black eyes I didn't see, any more than you see a window.

      Connection to Axolotl story read in Spanish class. Just as Axolotl's are a reflection of yourself, Weasels are too.

    11. I was looking down at a weasel, who was looking up at me.

      Repetition of sentence style, adds emphasis and flow. Illustrates a mutual relationship and displays cognitive thinking/intention within the weasel

    12. Then I cut down through the woods to the mossy fallen tree where I sit.

      Interesting word choice of "cut down through" - alludes to the casual destruction humans tend to create. The utilization of the fallen tree also symbolizes this

    13. This is, mind you, suburbia

      Addresses the reader to emphasize the juxtaposition between nature and suburbia and somehow between this comparison, a weasel lives (adds a shock value)

    14. I startled a weasel who startled me, and we exchanged a long glance.

      Shows a passive relationship where both can coexist. Shows traits of narrators character as some humans may have killed the weasel for simply existing too close to proximity.

    15. bit as instinct taught him,

      Repetitive mentioning of instinct - connection to To Build A Fire where we saw a complete lack of instinct. This illustrates a comparison between animals versus humans, where because of human conformity/advancements, we have lost most instincts (connection to Thoreau/Emerson)

    16. A weasel is wild. Who knows what he thinks?

      Very direct, abrupt start. Rhetorical question engages reader and builds foundation to begin argument

    1. rejoicing

      S: John Mur O: his personal experiences when exploring Alaska A: as one of the classic dog books, this story is geared towards people who care for dogs P: to immerse the reader in this story from his personal travels S: traveling along a glacier in Alaska Tone: anticipating, descriptive, suspenseful

    2. Both of us springing up in the night again and again, fancied we were still on that dreadful ice bridge in the shadow of death

      Shows a comparison of them sleeping that night versus earlier that day when life was not as guaranteed to emphasize the danger of their actions

    3. I was kneeling on the brink ready to assist him in case he should be unable to reach the top.

      Shows a sign of caring for the dog but if he sincerely cared, why didn't he carry the dog over on his back rather than forcing this dangerous decision

    4. All this dreadful time poor little Stickeen was crying as if his heart was broken, and when I called to him in as reassuring a voice as I could muster, he only cried the louder, as if trying to say that he never, never could get down there -- the only time that the brave little fellow appeared to know what danger was.

      Introduces a moral dilemma of whether he will leave the dog or not and transitions to the climax of the story

    5. only way of escape from this island was by turning back and jumping again that crevasse which I dreaded, or venturing ahead across the giant crevasse by the very worst of the sliver bridges I had ever seen.

      Shift in style for this sentence from long flowing sentences describing imagery to blatantly stating the issues at hand to make it clearly put forth for the reader

    6. All this time the little dog followed me bravely

      Spent half the piece describing its surroundings yet failed to mention he had company on this trip, was this a purposeful stylistic choice to bring more of a shock value when reintroducing the dog?

    7. I had to make haste to recross the glacier before dark

      Previously described as a wild and seemingly dangerous location, foreshadows an upcoming problem for the narrator

    8. a crystal cataract incomparably greater and wilder than a score of Niagaras.

      Comparison to famous location to emphasize the appeal and beauty of this area and allows for a broad audience

    9. though making haste, I halted for a moment to gaze down into the beautiful pure blue crevasses

      Connection to Emerson/Thoreau ideas that by slowing down/simplifying life, one can take the time to enjoy/appreciate/reflect about it

    10. until I could find a bridge connecting their sides, oftentimes making the direct distance ten times over

      Implies character traits such as inefficient and unadaptable

    11. I feared that when I got out of sight of land and perhaps into a maze of crevasses I might find difficulty in winning a way back.

      Foreshadows an issue with him and the dog's ability to go back

    12. mountain shoes, tightened my belt, shouldered my ice-axe, and, thus free

      Relating back to mister's little dog, even with the absence of physical presence, given the obvious power dynamic, are they ever really free?

    13. Here the glacier, descending over an abrupt rock, falls forward in grand cascades, while a stream swollen by the rain was now a torrent, -- wind, rain, ice-torrent, and water-torrent in one grand symphony.

      Vivid imagery balanced with a combination of show vs tell to create mental pictures to immerse the reader in the story

    14. its present bare, raw condition was not the condition of fifty or a hundred years ago

      Glaciers represents a connection to ancestors and historic time periods

  3. Jan 2024
    1. BATES: Thank you for having me

      S: Laura Bates O: The gaining popularity of a Shakespeare course taught in prisons A: those with some prejustice against inmates P: to spread awareness about her program to educate people about prison programs S: Shakespeare course in prisons Tone: inspiring, determined, familiar/informal

    2. I feel that I've been able to turn their own lives around

      One person turning life around -> gives hope and possibility to others that it is possible

    3. so bleak for so many years that he was literally at the point of suicide. And so in that sense by Shakespeare coming along, presenting something positive in his life for maybe the first time, giving him a new direction, it did literally keep him from taking his own life

      Shows how important sense of community/passion is for a person, especially an inmate (relate sto how cruel the lack of all enrichment is (ie solitary confinement))

    4. he's a good young man, and yet by looking at the kind of society that he grows up in

      are people helplessly at the hands of their environment or do innate traits counteract the external forces?

    5. I'm using his workbooks even with college students on campus and with area high school students.

      Important -> brings topic to the public and makes it general interest to learn about prisons

    6. more insight you get into Shakespeare's characters, the more insight you get into your own character

      Interesting how most people would likely would scoff at therapy, yet are doing the same process with this course

    7. But these prisoners were able to make sense of some passages that professional Shakespeare scholars have struggled with for 400 years.

      This feels like an exaggeration

    8. some of their insights were beyond those of students who you'd been teaching for years.

      I know this is to boost her point about prisoners being smart but it just makes her look like a bad teacher

    9. demonstrate to both the prisoner population and the administration itself that this is successful, then it's going to grow

      Interesting how this compares to solitary, where it has proven over and over again that it is ineffective and destructive and yet it continues

    10. so here comes somebody from the street knocking on their cell door and saying, hi, would you like to read some Shakespeare?

      Contradictory to usual deprecating interactions - outside teachers provide a safer space (instead of trying to control/restrict inmates (like guards, lieutenants, etc), they allow creativity freedom/independent thinking)

    11. And my prisoner-students told me about this unit, this highly restricted unit, super max, and that's where my student, Don, had been sent.

      Note addition of 'my student' -> makes the event more personal and gains more empathy

    12. It was a shock and a learning experience to me when I discovered this unit even existed

      Allows Bates to relate to listener, who is processing the shock of her work and mostly likely extremely separated/uniformed about the prison system

    13. not just to people who are in prison, but people who are considered the worst of the worst

      Brings up interesting question -> are prisoners necessarily bad people? Relates to Hellhole that humanizes and somewhat rationalizes their actions

    14. Maybe you think about well-trained actors performing in beautifully appointed theaters, but what probably does not come to mind are convicted murderers in some of the most restrictive circumstances in the country

      Vastly contrasting visuals -> juxtaposition -> grabs attention and emphasises the dangers and unique-ness of Shakespeare in prison

    1. Studies

      S: Jessica Moye O: A final assignment for a class and the increasing negative effects of solitary in prisons A: professors, researchers P: to purpose new alternatives to solitary confinement S: the data surrounding solitary confinement Tone: critical, statistical

    2. likely to result in a significant amount of pushback from prison administrators

      Interesting how push back from administration tops the benefits for the inmates

    3. completely removing the option of solitary confinement could also be detrimental because there would be limited options for those that are particularly violent

      and the new study showing solitary can benefit inmates

    4. For this reason, the first alternative is not a viable option.

      Taking into account the limitations and practically -> adds reason and credibility/reliability

    5. require significant changes to current prison practices

      Meaning realistically, it could not happen - in today's society change is usually bad/not going to happen

    6. no longer uses solitary confinement as discipline for behavior issues that arise from an inmate’s mental illness and have created an intervention unit

      Addresses root problem (mental illness) instead of continuing cycle

    7. Continued use under the current methods, however, is likely to result in continued mental and physical health concerns

      Do people in charge care enough about inmates well being enough to raise the standard? - do they see inmates as human or merely as a threat

    8. access to exercise, proper hygiene, and using an inmate’s threat to safety and the nature of the offense to determine an inmate’s length of stay

      Counter: if the standards raise and the punishments are not as extreme, inmates would lose the fear of being sent to solitary and therefore act out more

    9. received solitary confinement as a punishment were also likely to receive solitary confinement a second or third time

      Creating a cycle of behavioral issues and doesn't solve root problem to positively change inmate

    10. psychological distress were more likely to spend time in restrictive housing

      Adds to the psychological issues -> creating new disordered behaviors

    11. inmates in solitary confinement often experience a host of psychological issues

      Could reveal how psychological issues are seen with children (neglected kids with less attention and more time alone linked to an increase with behavioral issues)

    1. prison

      S: Philip Bulman, Marie Garcia, Jolene Hernon O: the surprising conclusion of the study that contradicted other previous findings A: researchers P: to showcase the effect of a study on solitude S: the inmates under the effect of AS Tone: objective, apathetic, direct

    2. The researchers noted that theirfindings might not apply to otherprison systems

      I agree with this statement, especially when other, bigger studies have proven the opposite

    3. people in isolation mightbe more inclined to participate ina study simply because it wouldinvolve receiving attention from aninterviewer

      Very important factor when testing inmates

    4. They decidedthat the productivity increasedbecause the workers saw them-selves as special participants in anexperiment.

      Do studies really find any universal behavioral findings or do they find these patterns just because the test groups are in studies

    5. Privileges could beexpanded if prisoners successfullycompleted behavior modificationand cognitive programs

      What determines success in this case?

    6. Prisoners wereplaced in full restraints before beingescorted

      Did the guard escorting the prisoners talk/interact with them? another inconsistency

    7. he results showed initialimprovements in psychological well-being in all three groups of inmates

      If there are in prison, they probably aren't surrounded by the best people -> solitary might be a relief

    8. no clinical psycholo-gist interviewed the inmates

      Behaviors and conversation tell a lot about a person, how could the study be fully complete without this assessment?

    9. mentally ill inmates woulddecline more rapidly and havemore serious illnesses

      Another flaw in study - are the mentally ill test subjects properly medicated (how would this be measured?)

    10. mental illness and those with nomental illness

      Debatably, inmates aren't the best test subjects (only 5.1% of US population goes to prison) - isn't going to prison an indicator of an abnormality

    11. inmates in ASat Colorado State Penitentiary, a“supermax” facility

      Interesting how the test subjects are inmates - alludes to how society views inmates as lower/inferior -> wouldn't want someone cared about being tested upon (especially the effects of solitude)

    1. Mountains

      S: Jon Krakauer O: the life and death of McCandless A: any one P: to take the reader through this story of McCandless while revealing character traits and layers of complexity to a situation many would overlook S: McCandless Tone: objective

    2. Chris would never intentionally burn down a forest,not even to save his life," answers Carine McCandless. "Anybody who would suggest otherwisedoesn't understand the first thing about my brother

      Reveals a lot about McCandless' compassion and view of himself

    3. In all likelihoodMcCandless mistakenly ate some seeds from the wild sweet pea and became gravely ill

      Consequence of his own actions and lack of information (result of his overconfidence)

    4. hunting was an unavoidable componentof living off the land, he had always been ambivalent about killing animals

      Shows McCandless character, perhaps more compassion for animals than himself

    5. Ultimate freedom. Anextremist

      Signals that true freedom is acquired through seperation from society, debatably the most extreme thing one can do

      Shift in sentence structure -> adds engagement and separates McCandless writing from the narrator

    6. Reading of the these monks, one is struck by their courage, their reckless innocence, and theintensity of their desire. And one can't help thinking of Chris McCandless

      Distinctly separates McCandless from these negative traits and the connotation of "cant stop thinking" signals his importance and complexity

    7. unlike McCunn, he didn't go into the bush assuming that someone would magicallyappear to bring him out again before he came to grief

      Exemplifies distinction that McCandless' relief on himself (partly to his overconfidence) + divide between him and societal expectations

    8. When news of McCandless's fate came to light, most Alaskans were quick to dismiss him as a nutcase

      Most people are unable to understand the complexity of perceived outlandish actions -> leads to lack of compassion

    9. "I just don't understand why he had to take those kinds of chances

      Repeating theme that exemplifies the divide between McCandless and the social norms, causing tension on his relationships due to a lack of consistent care

    10. He was good at almost everything he ever tried," says Walt, "which made him supremelyoverconfident. If you attempted to talk him out of something, he wouldn't argue. He'd just nod politelyand then do exactly what he wanted

      Dialogue breaks the text into chucks and highlights important hints at McCandless character

    11. He tookpride in his ability to go without food for extended periods, and he had complete confidence that hecould get himself out of any jam

      overconfidence -> superiority -> false safety

    12. punctuated by a single F, the result of butting heads with a particularly rigid physics teacher

      Shows an innate clashing of structure and societal norms of routine

    13. I really liked hiscompany, even though he frustrated us so often

      Frustration driven by a care that other people had for him but he didn't have for himself

    14. That's a very different thing from wanting to die

      Change of sentence structure adds clear emphasis and literally separates it from the rest of the text, showing a clear distinction/importance

    15. similar intensity, a similarheedlessness, a similar agitation of the soul

      repetition of similar with description to add increasing awareness and depth while emphasizing the analysis

    16. he wanted to work in the grain elevatorfor a while, just long enough to put together a little grubstake

      Shows more lack of permanence -> given the opportunity of stability and rejects it for the most out there journey

    17. To avoid being rolled and robbed bythe unsavory characters who ruled the streets and freeway overpasses where he slept

      Shows a distinction and divide between sketchy people and McCandless but all living a similar lifestyle

    18. Chris McCandless intended to invent a new life for himself, one in which he wouldbe free to wallow in unfiltered experience

      More contrasting of negative and positive descriptors

    19. , money his parents thought he intended to use for law school. Instead, he donated theentire sum to the Oxford Famine Relief Fund.

      Begins to show a contrast between him and his surroundings

    20. He set pretty high standards for himself.

      Big contrast from what's been previously described -> shows a big shift in standard of living and self respect

    21. "Heused to sit right there at the end of the bar and tell us these amazing stories of his travels. He couldtalk for hours."

      Interesting quotation given that the dialogue from Alex was quite short and not revealing much

    22. It wasn't until I walked around to the other side and saw a head sticking out that I knewfor certain what it was." Chris McCandless had been dead for some two and a half weeks

      Long sentences of vivid imagery contrasted by the short, morbid fact to end the paragraph -> separates and emphasises McCandless' death

    23. Many winters ago the bus was fitted withbedding and a crude barrel stove, then skidded into the bush by enterprising hunters to serve as abackcountry shelter. These days it isn't unusual for nine or ten months to pass without the busseeing a human visitor

      Juxtaposition? for emphasis and show pass in time

    24. I won't run into anything I can't deal with on my own

      Integration of limited, simple dialogue give the text a story-telling feeling instead of an vivid, experience

    25. He even offered to drive Alex all the way to Anchorage so he could at least buy thekid some decent gear.

      Another more direct sign of James' care for the man changing and developing

    26. Gallien was concerned

      Note connotation of concern -> shows a change in perspective from the beginning seeing the hitchhiker as a crack addict and by this point caring for him

    27. The bush, however, is a harsh place and cares nothing for hope or longing. More thana few such dreamers have met predictably unpleasant ends

      Short, direct sentences add an apathetic tone

    28. a hitchhiker with a Remington semiautomaticisn't the sort of thing that gives motorists pause in the 49th state

      Shows the oddity of the situation and the leap of faith James took

    1. teenage

      S: Daily Mail Reporter O: the increasingly desperate living conditions for these families A: people who can spread the message and donate P: to educate people and 'expose' the lives of people in low income areas S: specific families Tone: objective yet unsettling

    2. Last year, 48.6 per cent of the population in Owsley below 18-years-old fell below the poverty line - a seven per cent increase from their parents' generation

      Short, strategical and unsettling sentence to end the article leaves the reader uncomfortable and called for action