olunteer
Town relies on volunteer work
olunteer
Town relies on volunteer work
Noble Pioneer Museum
People have pride for their town
Empty: An abandoned building is a haunting reminder of the county's dire state
Description appeals to emotion
Abandoned
Very contrasting image compared to the light hearted, friendly photo above
Catching up on events
Notice the bad toys in the corner -> lots of kids in the town
carries food to be delivered from her thrift store to children as part of the center's Food Backpack Program on April 19
big focus on the children in all of our texts about poverty
Married students Starr Lewis, second right, Travis Lewis and daughter Ariel Lewis, three weeks, attend the Owsley County High School prom on April 21
married and kids while in high school -> big differences compared to the social norms in our area
Mr Noble's situation is not unfamiliar to those in the region
Sense of community built off struggling together
Pots and pans spill from the kitchen sink and litter the floor, sodden with dirt and worn through the years
Objective descriptions, still provokes emotion and reflection
t residents take pride in their community's history; and locals are driven to help one another through hard times
locals driven to help due to the closeness of the situation. i wonder how their donations compare to one of someone with more money who lives out of state
Kidding around: Mechanic Chucky Oliver, left, jokes with a client at his shop
Reoccuring depictions of a supporting, integrated community
Spirits high: Owsley County Outreach Center director Cleda Turner
First picture with someone smiling
On horseback: Riders
Interesting because horses are associated with wealth and the abandoned car contradicts that presumption
his dog
intriguing how they are still able to look after pets
Mose Noble
unsettling, personal image
nieighbours have offered to help when they can
connection to Singer's solution to poverty
Filth: Johnny Noble sits inside his uncle's trailer, sandwiched between a stack of logs and clutter from all sides
Tone: blunt, (maybe rudely) objective
Boonesville
town named after family -> shows the family has been in the town for a long time and their situation is generational
$45,000 a year for a family of four. In Owsley, the median household income is $19,351
short, direct sentences to add emphasis to the comparison
U.S. Census Bureau
Second reference to credible source
Job shortages hit the region hard due to declines in demand for coal, lumber and tobacco;
cause and effect: South's resistance to technologically advance pre Civil War carries the effects into the 21 century
According to the 2010 U.S. Census
citing credential sources builds authors own reliability and appeals to reason (ethos and logos)
It was a county formed 19 years before the Civil War.
short sentence structure -> grabs attention and focuses reader
Ask people what they'd grab if their house were on fire, the way our national house is on fire right now. No one ever says it's the tricked-up microwave they got at Wal-Mart.
Heavily pathos conclusion
don't spend six months of the year whining for the toy du jour
How does a child get out of the habit of wanting? Can that be expected of a child? Are the parents to blame?
with enough garage space to start a homeless shelter.
Sad, perspective giving analogy
But if it's so obvious, how come for so long people have not realized it?
Rhetorical question to inspire personal reflection and boost point by calling for a need for action
And in the process they began to realize that it's all trifles
I have noticed this as well
If the mall is our temple, then Marc Jacobs is God. There's a scary thought.
Writing style is very familiar, like a concerned friend. Very accessible
ee-standing storage facilities, where junk goes to linger in a persistent vegetative state
powerful description
so did the rest of us
Ethos or logos approach - on the idea that we are all losing
By 2010 Americans will be a trillion dollars in the hole on credit-card debt alone.
Has it increased since this?
The passbook was replaced by plastic
As was everything else
By contrast, my father will be happy to tell you about the excitement of getting an orange in his stocking during the Depression.
Uses pathos through comparison and personal anecdotes to build connection, give perspective, and pull on heart strings
The suffocation of a store employee by a stampede of shoppers was horrifying, but it wasn't entirely surprising
This comparison adds a shock value
an addiction to consumption so out of control that it qualifies as a sickness.
very intense claim and main idea for paragraph
hat passes for the holiday season began before dawn the day after Thanksgiving, when a worker at a Wal-Mart in Valley Stream, N.Y., was trampled to death by a mob of bargain hunters
Intro of tragic anecdote = pathos approach/attention grabber
belongs
S: George Orwell O: 1946 (year after end of ww2) A: writers and readers of political topics P: to discourage (Orwell identified) flaws in writing S: political writing, flaws in writing Tone: critical, passionate
Since you don’t know what Fascism is, how can youstruggle against Fascism
logos - asking a rhetorical question, arguably a common sense question, to provoke reflection and emphasize Orwell's purpose
Never use a metaphor, simile, or other figure of speech which you areused to seeing in print
disagree
What is above allneeded is to let the meaning choose the word, and not the other way around
this is actually good advice
colloquial
(of language) used in ordinary or familiar conversation; not formal or literary.
it is especiallyconcerned with the scrapping of every word or idiom which has outworn itsusefulness.
saying not to resist the change of language throughout time
he decadence of our language is probably curable
interesting word choice - "probably curable"
Look back through this essay, and for certainyou will find that I have again and again committed the very faults I amprotesting against.
admitting faults reveals sincerity, self awareness and credibility (and makes him more relatable to the audience)
Inour age there is no such thing as “keeping out of politics.” All issues arepolitical issues
seen especially in todays political climate
The great enemy of clear language is insincerity
seen in individual's lives and relationships as well
“I believe in killing off youropponents when you can get good results by doing so.”
Machiavelli did - the ends justify the means. what makes him able to say this and not anyone else?
Millions of peasants are robbed of their farms and sent trudging along theroads with no more than they can carry
vivid descriptions play on pathos and evoke an emotional response
Thus political language has to consist largely of euphemism, question-begging and sheer cloudy vagueness
to guard reality from general public? is it a flaw in the writing if its an intentional choice made by the writer?
If the speech he is making is one that he is accustomedto make over and over again, he may be almost unconscious of what he issaying, as one is when one utters the responses in churc
interesting how Orwell is criticizing the church which began it's decline in power in the 19th century (wonder how that effects the writing)
one often hasa curious feeling that one is not watching a live human being but some kindof dummy:
is very prevalent in todays politics and especially youth spouting their parents extreme takes without formal education on what they are
lifeless, imitative style
extreme conformity to their religious/social norms
In our time it is broadly true that political writing is bad writing
still remains true but has transformed from political writing to persuasive, biased writing that can spread false information and push extreme takes
5),
note the stylistic choice of adding lists that make the reader pause and focus on each point (disrupts the usual rhythm/flow of the text)
By using stale metaphors, similes,and idioms, you save much mental effort, at the cost of leaving your meaningvague, not only for your reader but for yourself.
most times it gives the semblance of educated, knowledgable, and credible so regardless of the message (or lack of), the (average, not fulled educated/scholarly) reader will be inclined to trust the writer either way
. The attraction of this way of writing isthat it is easy. It is easier —even quicker, once you have the habit
i have noticed this habit with my own writing
. Yet without a doubt it is thesecond kind of sentence that is gaining ground in modern English
i agree and have seen this issue in our readings, interesting how the problem is still pervasive today
Now analyze these two sentences a little more closely.
note that Orwell is giving commands/actions to the reader to have them interact and analyze text on their own before dishing out opinions/answers (keeping engagement and gives reader the semblance of self-thinking/independence)
Objective considerations of contemporary phenomena compel theconclusion that success or failure in competitive activities exhibitsno tendency to be commensurate with innate capacity, but that aconsiderable element of the unpredictable must invariably be takeninto account
no rhythm or flow to the sentence, the length and word choice jumbles the meaning together and makes it hard to understand
fear that they might have to stop using thatword if it were tied down to any one meaning
I agree
n the case of a word like democracy, not only is there noagreed definition, but the attempt to make one is resisted from all sides.
democracy in America is associated with freedom and power to the people - desirable/proper/necessary
If words like black and whitewere involved, instead of the jargon words dead and living, he wouldsee at once that language was being used in an improper way.
Orwell says the language is improper and casts aside the notion that there is a difference in opinions. He does not expand upon this point any further, what makes him right?
nglish words that will cover one’s mean-ing. The result, in general, is an increase in slovenliness and vagueness
contradictory sentences - if the word with -ize formation covers the meaning of English word, then the point is still getting understood just in a different format, that does not mean it is vague or not represented
there isno real need for any of the hundreds of foreign phrases now current in theEnglish language
interesting that he is upset about this stylistic choice, I have never encountered a real problem with this. maybe the audience is one with high education and specialization with foreign languages (why is he upset about that)
are used to dignifythe sordid process of international politics, while writing that aims atglorifying war usually takes on an archaic color
agree also shields the common public from political affairs by using language too complex for them to understand and add to (gives power to the educated to control the public?)
are used to dress upa simple statement and give an air of scientific impartiality to biasedjudgements
disagree: it is using specific language to get an accurate description and usually serves a legitimate purpose
the ends ofsentences are saved by anticlimax by such resounding commonplaces
critic: Orwell adds extra words to add complexity and depth except he doesnt achieve his goal and only loses the readers attention and understanding
he passive voice is wherever possible used in preferenceto the active,
grammarly always yells at me for this but i cant break out of the habit or know how to correct it
pad each sentence withextra syllables which give it an appearance of symmetry
i notice this flaw in my writing, overcomplicating my language to give the semblance of good writing and knowledge
a writer who stopped to think what he was sayingwould avoid perverting the original phrase
note the stylistic choice of ending a criticizing, negative paragraph full of analysis with a short, direct command/plan of action
a sure sign that the writeris not interested in what he is saying
Interesting critic because obviously Orwell can't be deeply passionate about the wrong use of metaphors in the English dialect so he is playing into the flaws he's exposing
Examples
interesting how phrases and vocabulary change over time because in today's time, no one uses these examples
which have lost all evocative power and are merely used because theysave people the trouble of inventing phrases for themselves
Critic: I believe Orwell's use of metaphors embodies this mentioned flaw
prose consistsless and less of words chosen for the sake of their meaning
what makes Orwell above and immune to these flaws? what gives him the credibility to criticize?
vagueness and sheer incompetence
critical language
The writer either has a meaning andcannot express it, or he inadvertently says something els
relates to individual life and communications, not just writers have this issue, it translates to every interaction
5.
note numbered list for emphasis on each section, convenience for reader, breaks text up, rhythm
Letter in Tribune
how do these excerpts connect besides over how confusing each are? what are the exact flaws of them?
acts of provocation, to foul incendiarism, to medieval legends of poisonedwells, to legalize their own destruction of proletarian organizations, androuse the agitated petty-bourgeoise
opinionated, critical, negative, intense language
ll the “best people” from the gentlemen’s clubs, and all the franticfascist captains
relates to Excellent Sheep and discussions surrounding "what is success" - interesting how this debate has continued throughout the decades and emphasizing the generational issue
al-ter their number and intensit
discrepancies between government and public knowledge? relates to Mr P course question "what is an American" (one quality being distrustful of the government)
institutional approval keepsin the forefront of consciousness
emphasizing power of education and institutional control, reference to government control?
Professor
interesting how Orwell is criticizing these essays yet the authors are professors (who have great influence on aspiring youth)
Milton
who?
but because they illus-trate various of the mental vices from which we now suffe
gives credibility by showing multiple perspective and thus lessens biases and proves knowledgeability(?)
to think clearly is a necessary first step toward politicalregeneration: so that the fight against bad English is not frivolous and is notthe exclusive concern of professional writer
rallying "average" people to join "academic" and educated debates and unifies Orwell with his readers
written English, is full of badhabits which spread by imitation and which can be avoided if one is willingto take the necessary trouble
a writer exposes the flaws/(negative) influences of writing shows self awareness and deep reflection, gives Orwell reliability and humility
A man may take to drink because he feels himself to be afailure, and then fail all the more completely because he drinks
self sabotage and destruction
But an effect can become a cause, reinforcing theoriginal cause and producing the same effect in an intensified form, and soon indefinitely
interesting how this same pattern is so prevalent in today's society and individual lives
it is clear that the decline of a language must ultimately have politicaland economic causes
main claim
like preferring candles to electric light or hansom cabs toaeroplane
simile to lighten text, ease tone, add imagery/perspective
It follows that any struggle against the abuse of language is a sen-timental archaism
connects to Virginia Woolf reading where having a voice gives you power (VW - rallying people to use/reclaim their voice/power) (GO - power can be abused)
decadent
characterized by or reflecting a state of moral or cultural decline
women
S - Virginia Woolf, English woman during WW2 O - WW2, specifically the English and German conflict A - English women and men P - to unify women, encourage disarm the people, and end violence S - the brutality and flaws of war Tone - intense, descriptive, almost pleading, strong, powerful
An apple thuds to theground. An owl hoots, winging its way from tree to tree
concluding with imagery
How glad I am that the fight is
only in death is there peace
he guns go pop pop pop.
repetition and Onomatopoeia
Each of those thoughts, even in memory,was far more positive, reviving, healing the creative than the dull dread made of fear and hate.
showing how people repress and excuse the bad under the semblance of "doing good" for the world
Augusts--in Bayreuth, listening to Wagner; in Rome, walking over the Campagna;in London.
uniting all of england
. But during those seconds of suspense all thinking stopped. Allfeeling, save one dull dread, ceased
intense pathos - plays into the fears and anticipation war is creating to every person once they are given time to reflect
One, two, three, four five, six . . .
Interesting stylistic tactic - adds to pathos - what rhetorical device would this be?
They point at a spot exactlyabove this roof. At any moment a bomb may fall on this very room.
Heavy heavy pathos
They would honour them for their refusal to bear children. They would give them otheropenings for their creative power.
"if roles were reversed"?
Suppose
comparison for perspective
he is driven by voicesin himself--ancient instincts, instincts fostered and cherished by education and tradition.
It is the fault of our history that we are at war but rallying people to stop the generational pattern
Othello's occupation will be gone; but he will remain Othello.
Saying how we will remain human without war
education
Encourages the question what is education
There are to be no more guns, no army, no navy, no air forcein the future. No more young men will be trained to fight with arms.
Notice switch from vivid imagery, longer sentences explaining background, current incidents, opinions, etc to direct commands
nd one of the terms of peace,the loudspeakers say, is to be disarmament
relates to current day gun control debate
we shall be told
alludes to how out of the peoples hands the war is
Up there on the hillunder a net tagged with strips of green and brown stuff to imitate the hues of autumn leaves guns areconcealed. Now they all fire at once
intense, vivid, emotion-provoking imagery
If we could free ourselves from slavery we should free men from tyranny
big, bold, intense claims (tone)
Hitlers are bred by slaves.
what is meant by this
We can see shop windows blazing; and women gazing
rhymes for rhythm, imagery, and emphasis
t is the desire for aggression; the desire to dominate and enslave
enslave is an important and powerful verb in this sentence - reflect on time period when slavery was recently abolished
But if he stops to think he maybe killed; and we too. So let us think for him.
rally together English women to be proactive in war and give power back to women in a subtle way
subconscious Hitlerism in the hearts of men.
gives perspective and exposes intensity discrimination
directly above the house
adds personal connection that by effecting everyone it effects you, showing importance and urgency that change is needed
The drone of the planes is now like the sawing of a branch overhead.
simile to emphasis and illustrate how normalized war has become
Destroy that, and you will be free
powerful - ending intense paragraph with action plan
We are both prisoners tonight--he boxed up inhis machine with a gun handy; we lying in the dark with a gas-mask handy.
vivid imagery shows the contrast, connection, and brutality of the war
It is not true that we are free
powerful short sentence surrounded by longer ones to emphasis importance
Every day they tell us that we are a free people, fighting to defend freedom.
alluding to exposing them for lying
wrods
words?
ast and furious.
alliteration
Mental fight means thinking against the current, not withit.
inspiring tone to rally women to fight for their right to think and go against traditional restricting ways
All the idea-makers who are in a position to make ideas effective are men.
mentions a counter point to add to and emphasis her stance
And thehornet in the sky rouses another hornet in the mind
direct connection between mind and physical violence through this metaphor
fire them off
intentional verb usage to connect the power of guns to the power of the mind
we can fight with themind.
note short claim separated by ; emphasizes idea
she must fight, so far as shecan, on the side of the English
audience - English people
How far can she fight for freedom without firearms?
rhetorical question - subtly persuades reader to reflect the morality of defenseless women
She must lie weaponless tonigh
weaponless = defenseless, hopeless, up to men to decide when her life ends
The defendersare men, the attackers me
war was caused by men and fought by men yet all are suffering
sometimes close at hand, sometimes far away
adds rhythm
searchlights finger the clouds
interesting verb, adds imagery
op pop pop
Onomatopoeia
not this one body in this one bed but millions of bodies yet to be bor
ethos - calling upon a joint future to unite groups together for the peace of the future generations
cool and consecutive
was the use of alliteration intentional - adds rhythm
zoom of a hornet, which may at any moment sting youto death
metaphor to illustrate spontaneity, uncertainty, and fear surrounding death by war
Virginia Woolf
speaker
Let
S: Leon Botstein O: published in 1999 (2 years after the author published a different book on education); also school shootings may have prompted this piece A: high school students, perhaps educators, opinion-based, easy language, strong arguments makes this piece accessible to a broad audience P: to get a reaction (very strong, controversial claims) and expose the flaws of the modern high school experience Tone: worked-up, borderline upset, emotionally-driven while still trying to be serious/professional, a charged piece
We need toface biological and cultural facts and notprolong the life of a flawed institution that is outof date
ends with the same format as the start - the shockingly strong ending claim right at the end makes one pause and think ab the opinion they consumed
at least the adults who dominate the world ofcolleges
adults are not gods and j bc they are in college does not mean they are good - this would make the young kids extremely vulnerable and easily taken advantage of or pressured into things by their adult peers
We shouldentirely abandon the concept of the middleschool and junior high school.
disagree, the best character development is in middle school (the bullying helps the process)
Informationand images, as well as the real and virtualfreedom of movement we associate withadulthood, are now accessible to every 15- and16-year-old.
agree, especially w internet, kids are influenced to grow up to fit in bc their role models are these media (full grown) influencers
they have used highschool to isolate the pubescent and hormonallyactive adolescent away from both the picture-book idealized innocence of childhood and themore accountable world of adulthood
don't think they use high school as a shield but they do use the high school years time frame as one
By the time those who graduate from highschool go on to college and realize what reallyis at stake in becoming an adult, too manyopportunities have been lost and too much timehas been wasted
"too much time has been wasted" - disagree, time living is never a waste or burden, that's a very sad/scary way to live. author is haunted by fear of failure and is afraid they can't live without one day regretting it and realizing their mistakes/flaws
masquerading
def:"pretend to be someone one is not."
individuals of the same age group define eachother’s world
don't see this in brewster (separated by upper and lower classmen (which is a natural seperation/divide of maturity levels))
the high school outsiderbecomes the more successful and admiredadult
extrovertism gets you farther in life (more opportunities bc more attention it on you)
The result is that theculture of the inside elite is not contestedby the adults in the school. Individuality anddissent are discouraged
disagree, sports help build communities, friends, confidence. there is a healthy limit but what author is commenting on is just the benefits of sports - sounds like the author was a dweeb and jealous of the athletes in highschool bc they are better
The team sports of high school dominate morethan student culture.
counter: team sports help cultivate a culture
artificial intensityof a world defined by insiders and outsiders
artificial intensity = the rat race or the effects of it -> artificial bc its man made?
the American high school isobsolete and should be abolished
formating with strong claim as first sentence for shock value to engage reader
You will then reach the goal of your noble ambition in safety
change from talking broadly to directly to the audience (powerful ending) + build relationship with reader
opulent
"luxurious"
Even
vivid imagery
It is aimed at the negro as a gentleman, as a successful man and a scholar
how is success/scholar/gentlemen measured
he light of education is shedding its beams more brightly and more effectively upon the colored people in the South, than it ever did in the cause of any other emancipated people in the world
powerful analogy
On the contrary, there are many encouraging signs in the moral skies.
ending on a positive/solution based is a smart stylistic format choice
Whoever is for equal rights, for equal education, for equal opportunities for all men, of whatever race or color,— I hail him as a “countryman, clansman, kinsman and brother beloved.”
preaching unity and that education is a necessary right for all races
I insist upon it that the lesson which colored people, not less than white people, ought now to learn, is, that there is no moral or intellectual quality in the color of a man’s cuticle; that color, in itself, is neither good nor bad; that to be black or white is neither a proper source of pride or of shame.
summary of essay (repetition of the claim to instill point)
while slavery lasted, we could seldom get ourselves recognized in any form of law or language, as men.
because education wasn't available
We are not recommended to love or hate any particular variety of the human family more than any other.
racism is taught, not innate; this must've been very controversial at the time (how did ppl react to this writing, who is this audience?)
I recognize and adopt no narrow basis for my thoughts, feelings, or modes of action.
obscure pathos? being open about sources/transparency making author relatable (therefore trustworthy) - establishes reliability
The Constitution makes no distinction on account of race or color, and they should make none.
was this before Black people were included in "all men" in the constitution? is this the occasion?
I have no hesitation in telling you that I think the colored people and their friends make a great mistake in saying so much of race and color.
bold claim, who is his audience for this?
Criminals, guilty of heinous crimes against the State and society, are let go free on more generous conditions than were our slaves.
very strong/impactful comparison
degradation
is this paragraph ethos?
He was driven from time to eternity in the darkest ignorance.
anecdotes to add imagery (peaking interest and tapping into a sense, also helps the visual/auditory learners)
They were, indeed, terrible enough; but deeper down and more terrible still were the mental and moral wrongs which enter into his claim for a slight measure of compensation.
is this logos, pathos, or ethos?
ascertain
"to find out definitely"
To deny education to any people is one of the greatest crimes against human nature. It is to deny them the means of freedom and the rightful pursuit of happiness, and to defeat the very end of their being.
logos ?
They suggest to him no idea of the wonderful world in which he lives
with great power (education) comes responsibility (being able to comprehend the world around)
Without education, he lives within the narrow, dark and grimy walls of ignorance
contradictory to what he said earlier where ignorance/oblivion was easy than knowing/being educated
But if man is without education, although with all his latent possibilities attaching to him, he is, but a pitiable object;
meaning without education (can be accessed through life experiences, not just institutions), people cannot access the talents, passions and meaning of their life
latent
"existing but not yet developed"
Some know the value of education, by having it. I know its value by not having it.
relates to hidden intellectualism
To properly teach it to enduce man’s potential and latent greatness, to discover and develop the noblest, highest and best that is in him
similar claim to WD in ES
In his natural condition
ethics ?
He is not so fleet as a horse or a hound
using rherotical devices (analogies) increased understanding/interest
“Were I designed yon lordling’s slave, By Nature’s law designed, Why was an independent thought E’er planted in my mind?”
format/design shows importance
There is in my opinion, no useful thing that a man can do, that cannot be better done by an educated man than by an uneducated one
main idea/claim
Things which can be done simply with the exertion of muscle, and with little or no exertion of the intellect, will develop the muscle, but dwarf the mind.
relates to Hidden Intellectualism
However much I may regret that it was my lot to have been a slave,
pathos
They must not be all masters, or all servants. They must command, as well as be commanded.
relates to WD leadership claims
compensation possible to mankind
school/education = gift back to world after damaging it with war
Pride and insolence will certainly be developed in the one class, and weakness and servility in the other
In ES, greed was big aspect (repeated throughout texts)
Exclusive service, or exclusive mastery, is not good for the moral or mental health of any class
what WD argues that education has become
remunerative
"financially rewarding"
decided
interesting word choice - we choose how to run/build the world, we have chosen cruelity
needful labor
is it more important to do needful labor or meaningful labor
While I have no sympathy whatever with those who affect to despise labor, even the humblest forms of it
modern people
nominally
existing in name only
a State so averse in the past to the education of colored people
how does this past influence it today?
people so greatly needing it
what people dont qualify for needed education? - seems like a jab at VA
better educated brothers.
is this humble-ness or envy
pecuniary
relating to money