Most likely referring to Markus Gerke's “Want to Help Marginalized Students in Schools? Stop “Stop and Frisk” and Other Punitive Practices, Too.”

We see body cameras emerging more now

This speaks to a much deeper issue as well relating to gun violence and who should and should not obtain these kinds of military equipment / people do not have the proper training or mental capacity in making impromptu decisions in the face of danger

address the roots of the problems in order to move forward, this is the first step

Written by 1800+ sociologists who identify the roots of the problems and suggests eight appropriate responses to Mike Brown's death

Think also of Google, Amazon, and Facebook - how they track your searches and purchases in order to advertise to your liking

This is a better argument, and the only thing I can say from experience to challenge this is that I've gained exposure to different genres and programs from "suggestions" or "most popular shows" that apps like Netflix display. These are results from a collaboration of people customizing and personalizing their programs.

I understand that this entire article focuses on television and its many platforms, I feel like this is where it starts to become very limiting and results in a weak argument because, although this is true, it does not address other factors that dwindle this argument about nationhood. For instance, social media now takes most of the responsibility for dispersing essential issues and information.

LetsPlay channels are actualisations of new links, also known as elements in the virtual

Shifts in generation

How does this change the 'acceptable' uses of television?

As I annotated earlier, we give definitions to the things we use simply by the ways that we use them.

Communal viewing is only lost because of mobility, but Go's PDR records shows which, I think, actually encourages communal viewing since members of a household can view it at a time most convenient for all of them.

binge-watching shows emerges from this as well; in particularly, shows that have narration where we are required to watch he show from the first episode in order to understand the rest of the series (House of Cards, Narcos, Game of Thrones, etc.)

mobility is a huge factor that resulted from different digital platforms

I like how the author covers their bases by clarifying and acknowledging this. Anticipating counterarguments is something that is aesthetically appealing in a text.

This is striking to think about because most of us would think of the tree bending and falling in terms of a linear cause-and-effect logic rather than thinking about the factors or 'tendencies' individually that form expressions.

associated with rhizomatic assemblage because of its ability to destabilize structure and keep an open system

associated with stratified assemblage because of its homogeneous and fixed characteristics

Fixed structures are considered stratified assemblages, aren't they? The shift in word usage makes this a little confusing. Rhizomatic assemblages introduce new possibilities.

Because social theory itself does not recognize transformations or change

a relationship between rhetoric and humanism

I watched a Wordpress tutorial about child themes, and the instructor explained this type of concept by using a car made of legos. He said that we can deconstruct it and reconstruct it using the same set of legos in order to build something with new functionalities and qualities. This is how I view the concept of assemblages.

'media' doesn't exist; we only have data that we view on different digital platforms

Instead of the terms defining our actions, today’s actions are defining the terms.

everything is digital, and digital is everything

a branch of metaphysics concerned with the nature and relations of being

Treating things that are considered unnatural (site, forces, functions) and treating as natural.

This is more along the lines of how I regard changes in television. They are innate features, rather than characteristics of a phase.

30 years will most certainly be a blip as television evolves, so I do not think it is valid to say that this period of time illustrates tv as a stable medium.

How have the standards for acceptable uses of television changed/evolved since we are now able to view things from essentially anywhere?

I would give more detail about your plans on transferring rhet/comp skills to your future career. What career are you aiming for? And how will your skills help you in this field?

Lauren,

You have a great foundation for the CRE and a certain writing style that makes it yours. But I think that you can elaborate on some things a lot more. I have noted some areas where you could do this. I would focus less on summarizing what the classes taught and more on the details of how you applied the skills you learned from those assignments and eventually how you evolved as a writer. This will also allow you to incorporate some of the things from your portfolio into the conversation.

suggestion: and not to let

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Why did it grab your attention initially? This will give us insight of what you thought multimodal meant to begin with. In addition, it's a good opportunity to compare and contrast before-and-after meanings to illustrate how you have grown as a rhet/comp student.

What I am understanding here is that not all rhetoric is persuasive writing, which refutes the common definition introduced at the beginning as well as Aristotle's interpretation. This is interesting and should be elaborated because it would give us an idea on how you define rhetoric since there is no concrete definition given. What makes a piece of writing not persuasive, but still considered rhetoric?

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Elaborate on why you still felt apprehensive about rhetoric after this course. To ask your questions in reverse: why weren't you ready to study for persuasive writing? what were your remaining doubts that hindered your confidence in writing persuasively? Providing answers to these questions would help the audience see how you have grown as a rhet/comp student.

from what to what? negative connotations to positive ones? I would address this just to be more clear.

Plato, Aristotle, and Socrates.

Alex,

Overall, your CRE is logical and answers a lot of the questions on the rubric. I have made some suggestions that I think would help your words flow better. In reviewing for the final CRE, I would also check for the phrase "Not only [...] but," as I encountered this a lot. In addition, I wrote a few questions that I think would help fill in gaps about your initial thoughts on rhetoric (before declaring it a concentration). You did a nice job making connections between critical thinking and critical writing. I also like the tone that you set throughout this piece. It felt very honest and personal while keeping it professional. Good work!

suggestion: In addition, I brought video games, something that I rarely considered worthy of scholarly review, into a conversation about digital texts and education..

Is this the name of your paper? If so, introduce us to the title earlier in the paragraph

there's a font change here

Here, you've connected critical thinking to writing - good work

Did you include this in your portfolio? If so, provide us with the name of the title

suggestion: the audiences, the perceptions of the authors, and the forms

parallelism for better flow

suggestion: omit

why did you feel this way? explaining this would give you the opportunity to show how you later grew into your own understanding of rhetoric

suggestion: or well-argued piece of work included in my portfolio

a bit choppy, making it difficult to follow

suggestion: because regardless of audiences' opinions, they may find trust and credibility through the rhetor's logic.

unclear - explain/elaborate or reconsider word 'pathetic'

their influences

Grecian

'manipulation' has negative connotations; I'm sure our audience will know that you don't mean anything negative by it, but just wanted to point it out in case.

Elaborate - what subject? English or the particular study of rhetoric?

conscious

Prior to these studies, though, what was your initial definition of rhetoric? or what was the first thing you would think of when you heard the word 'rhetoric'? For instance, I thought of politics and the stigma attached to the word before declaring my concentration in Rhet and Comp.

suggestion: later would have

I just treat verb tenses like these as infinitives and always suggest not splitting them

how? what sparked your interest in this particular activity other than the fact that it was possible to view a tv show as a type of rhetoric?

By addressing this, you can bridge a gap between this sentence and the following one because it would answer the question as to the 'sort of English' you refer to as your initial interest in Rhet and Comp.

guidance

suggestion: and asked whether this sort of study was something that I could pursue further in the English department.

him

idea of what

Brings up a great point that if we are not white in America, then we are Hyphen-Americans. As a result, we get treated differently and are under a different set of rules than white Americans.

Digital rhetoric, such as Twitter and its hashtag #FergusonSyllabus, has created discourse communities that must work together in order to discover ways to reach out to and interact with the community as a whole.

Multimodal

News reporters/journalists set the stage for the ways in which Michael Brown, protestors, and police are represented rhetorically in society

A powerful message that uses English grammar/language to explain the differences between White Americans and non-white Americans

Writerscorps on Instagram posted a quote by W.E.B Du Bois, "A system cannot fail those it was never meant to protect," with the hashtag #FergusonSyllabus

No good deed goes unpunished.

This is one way to challenge attacks using social media

E.g. "Abortion Barbie"

Why is this? Based on the content of their comments?

unknown term that I had to look up: “Cultural scripts" are representations of cultural norms which are widely held in a given society and which are reflected in language"

http://faculty.washington.edu/vaz2/Documents/AW_Russian_Cultural_Scripts_Wierzbicka.pdf

Is it the popularity of hashtags that can help sustain feminist rhetoric? Or its accessibility/convenience? Both?

Men can identify as feminists as well

If she were a male, this would not have gotten as much attention

women are discouraged and silenced from leadership positions along with their positions in the rhetorical atmosphere

How hopeful and promising is it really, though? I feel that although it is easier and faster for news to relay through social media, women still have the disadvantage because their social media profiles contain profile pictures and will be judged.

This is her thesis

Using appearances to create harmful rhetoric

The article does not say how to do these things. However, it suggests that we need to steer our focus away from the helper and onto the recipient instead. I think an issue of this article is that it does not take into consideration that better policy, changing norms, and conducting real convos about key issues requires baby steps. Stuart's story is a baby step and should not be immediately labeled as "fat shaming".

We are discriminating people who are disabled by not allowing them to have equal accessibility in our society; this also means that their voices and stories are unheard unless reporters do so otherwise, but even then, reporters are not great accessibility for the disability community.

Yes, but part of her goals was to lose weight. It is, in fact, what she wanted. Her intentions were not to make her peers feel bad. Her before and after photos are being used as equally as anyone's before and after photos as a result of hard work and discipline, not being used to fat shame anyone but to better themselves to be physically healthier.

I find this part of the article a little problematic.

How does the way these stories are told affect the author in the rhetorical sphere? Is it advantageous or disadvantageous?

Since Stella has passed, her work continues. Does this mean that her thoughts and words become disembodied? Or are they still embodied because they are shared on social media?

He has discrepancies, not with the content or reasons (commonplaces) that Lysias included in his speech, but with the style, arrangement, and execution of his writing overall

In what ways does he prove this?

This is where Lysias' speech begins as Phaedrus is repeating it

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