advertises
was this supposed to be advertisements? :)
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He finally arrived to a welcome from his mother outside her front door.
If you need more words, you could expand upon his journey to his mother's house more. More details would be interesting and a way to up the word count!
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since in the department, since it was a celebration
I think this could be reworded.
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 Unlike her younger Son and Daughter, she still gives Eric a birthday cake when he visits.
Ok wait so it's Eric's birthday and his mom makes him a cake, but when his younger siblings have birthdays, she doesn't make them a cake? That's funny.
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that
that's :)
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The Government ended up buying controlling shares and nationally the health care industry from production to distribution.
I might just be dumb but I don't know what a controlling share is oops. I don't know if most people will know what that means. Also, how would the health care industry go from production to distribution? If you expanded upon these things, it would probably make it easier for people who don't fully understand those terms to understand.
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Society was at its healthiest with high levels of activity from walking and bicycling the average lifespan on an individual was at least 90 to 100 years old.
I think this may sound clearer as two separate sentences instead of one.
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Eric as with every other person in the country
This sentence is a little bit confusing. I think that maybe "Eric, as with every other person in the country, ..." might help.
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