Overall, you clearly met all the requirements of the assigment. It's evident you have thought carefully and read deeply on this issue, and I think you're off to a really good start. In the next step of the process, we'll find sources to narrow down our research question and framework - you will have a LOT to choose from, as this is a widely researched issue. As you said, though, education is complex, and you will definitely be able to find a useful niche/new angle. In any case, great work here! 10/10

For future assignments, try to adhere to the page limits - if nothing else, as practice for restrictive journal guidelines.

Capitalize all words in jounral title

You don't spell out why here, but this also makes sense to me.

Great.

This is a good qualifier in case you can't find citations!

For a final paper or dissertation, these are both empirical claims which you might want to support with a citation.

Really excellent sumamry with great use of sources.

A little more would be useful here - what about teacher well-being? How to conceptualize it? Improve it? What its causes are, or what it impacts? You go on to answer this, of course, but a few words here to specify the topic might help the reader keep up.

Good "signposting" here

Great!

All five questions were answerd, though the answer of "positivism" isn't thoughtfully laid out with sufficient detail, and doesn't seem to make sense (-.5).

More class materials and citations were needed to connect your thinking to the course content (-.5)

Otherwise, good start overall. It will be important for you to think carefully through your theoretical framework and its connection to the literature, which we will talk about in Class 2.

I don't think this is right - what do you mean by positivist? Generally positivism does not use mixed methods.

Good

This feels more closely related to your work.

This long quotation does not directly support your point - or at least, it's not clear in your writing how it supports it.

Soft skills were not directly identified, so I'm not sure what you mean.

Your next assignment will involve finding sources to corroborate this. Ideally, though, you would have the sources before you fully formed the argument - i.e., the arguments would be derived from the sources.

In other words, your research purpose is to better understand the causes of student unpreparedness - this is a good focus!

This is a good starting statement. That said, you will want to substantiate this with citations - what research indicates this? This comment applies throughout the paper.

It may be worth taking a more local focus in your introduction - are you interested in strategies that can be applied in various contexts, or getting really deep in the South Florida context?

It is not immediately clear what "Resistance" means in this context.

You may want to narrow this, unless you can make the clear case that you are addressing challenges that impact all these groups. Even still, pragmatically it may make sense to focus on one group.

Overall, you are off to a good start. The resarch problem is clear, and you have started connecting it with theory in a plausible, interesting way. However, you will likely need to focus more as you move forward.

I did not see any technical discussion of why this is a good research problem (-.5)

Good use of key terms from class and strong writing overall.

Please keep to word limits specifieid in the assignment description. One of the most challenging aspects of writing academic texts is meeting journal word limits - best to begin practicing it now.

In this case, there was more focus on the discursive history of the issue and less on the core questions in the assignment. Please try to focus more closely on these in future assignments.

Overall, great start: 9.5/10

Really good list of references - you have a strong head start on the next assignment. You will want to focus on the finer details of formatting - I have some suggestions below but did not do a thorough review.

In the references section, list all authors. Et al is for in-text citations.

Should be italicized.

Quotations not needed.

This would be another empirical thing to cite - it also seems like a really good research topic in itself. You will want to look carefully at the finer details of formatting.

When we talk about theoretical frameworks, you'll have an opportuntiy to formalize and introduce the critical/frierian perspective, define terms, and tie it succinctly to your topic. This will be a very important step for this project (which is not required for assignment 1)

You should be able to find some citations for this in a final paper. This would need one, since it's an empirical claim. Those sources should use the same understanding of white dominant culture and systems of power (i.e. have a compatible ontology) as your broader argument.

You need to define what this means with a bit of specificity.

I wouldn't assume a US-only audience in academic writing - so for a dissertation or paper, say "The US"

The focus on trump and "many states" abvoe doesn't align clearly with the focus on Florida here, so the reader wonders -- why Florida? You address this in the next paragraph, so it's not a major concern - but maybe more could be done to improve the alignment/consolidate the paragraphs in a formal paper

An important philosophical objection would be that removing positive effects does not necessarily imply introducing negative effects. I think the latter argument is possible, but it's not the one you're making here.

This level of detail may not be necessary at this stage. It depends - consider whether these particular examples can be expressed via citations, and/or whether these examples are central to the argument.

Good broad/general introduction!