every such phrase anaesthetizes a portion of one’s brain
I really like the imagery used by this author, they do a really good job with it.
12 Matching Annotations
- Apr 2023
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www.orwellfoundation.com www.orwellfoundation.com
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In (5)
I wish the author would have put this analysis right after those 5 passages because I'm not going to scroll back up to them to look at them again, but I would have if it were closer.
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catalogue of swindles and perversions
I understand what the author was trying to do with all the lists of words and phrases, but for me this made the writing really dense and difficult to read.
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The result, in general, is an increase in slovenliness and vagueness.
It's interesting to me that earlier (in the very first paragraph) the author said that people believe language is a natural growth rather than an instrument that we shape for our own purposes, but now they are saying they are not in favor of making up words that suit our own purposes.
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- Feb 2023
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www.americanscientist.org www.americanscientist.org
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the document cannot "exist" without the interpretation of each reader
"art does not exist in a vacuum" or something like that
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isis...isare presumed to beare transcribedhasis...can be alleviateddestabilizes
Lots of these are passive verbs which, like the article stated before, are not bad in and of themselves. But reading a bunch of passive verbs over and over again makes the passage a lot more confusing.
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attending more to their own need for unburdening themselves of their information than to the reader's need for receiving the material
I feel like this is a natural thing to do, because it's not easy to see how the reader will interpret the words from the perspective of the writer. That's why it's good we're learning how this happens and how to not do it.
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The revised version is not noticeably shorter than the original; nevertheless, it is significantly easier to interpret.
I liked how they revised this paragraph. It's not really any more simple than the original paragraph, things have just been rearranged in a way that make it easier to understand.
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I don't think this was the correct place for a semicolon, actually...
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- Jan 2023
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speeches.byu.edu speeches.byu.edu
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The writing process is information about writing that writers can use to help themselves as writers to improve the quality of their written product
I feel like this sentence could have used the writing process... haha
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I told him it isn’t easy to see everything at once. When we change one thing, we are able to see what we couldn’t before
This is a principle of life that I'm grateful for, otherwise things would be much more overwhelming.
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I had cared too much about my secondary audience—the theorists themselves—and not enough about my primary audience: teachers
I've done this with papers I know will be peer-revised, I focus too much on my peers rather than my primary audience.
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