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Evidently, the credits had said “This picture is based upon . . . ‘Ruidoso’ by John McPhee” while I was on the floor groping under the seat for nickels, dimes, and pennies. ♦
Ending the piece with a humorous anecdote was a satisfying end for the reader.
even failed to meet his payment for the option
Small quips like this keep McPhee's writing interesting to read.
Quickly, we gravitated to Bill H. Smith, of Pea Ridge, Arkansas, who was there to take on the super-rich “Texas-buckled sons of bitches” from Oklahoma, California, and the aforementioned state.
McPhee uses indirect characterization excellently here. Without providing any direct details about him, I still got a good idea of what kind of guy Bill H Smith is.
he said it again, and—in campsites as on the river—again.
McPhee again subtly compares himself to Poe by using repetition.
It was Hartzog who took a set of plans that had been lying dormant for fifteen years and built the great arch of St. Louis. Those who know the story of the arch say that had it not been for Hartzog there would be no arch. Hartzog the ranger is a hero in St. Louis, but at this moment he is not a hero to Tony Buford. “God damn it, George, this river is a mess. There is no point fishing this God-damned river, George. The fishing is no good.”Hartzog looks at Buford for a long moment, and the expression on his face indicates affectionate pity. He says, “Tony, fishing is always good.” The essential difference between these friends is that Buford is an aggressive fisherman and Hartzog is a passive fisherman. Spread before Buford on the bow deck of his johnboat is an open, three-tiered tackle box that resembles the keyboard of a large theatre organ.
Short stories are used continuously throughout McPhee's writing.
, though, surprised myself (because I am shy to the point of dread)
Although this detail is far from essential to the message of this piece, things like this keep readers interested.
Richard Nixon had much to say, much of which was lost on Lyndon Johnson, seated nodding on the platform and before long so sound asleep that his mouth fell open wider than a golf ball.
This is another good example of McPhee integrating light humor into his writing.
Now and again, a slow black limousine overtook and passed us. Secret Service men in black suits walked beside the limos. At regular intervals along the way, red telephones stood up surreally above the ferns—landline desk telephones of the three-pound push-button vintage, unsheltered, each resting on a square redwood board supported by a redwood stake.
Descriptive language is used to describe the scene quite vividly.
A sailor named Andy Chase wrote to me from the deck of a tanker, describing the grave decline of the U.S. Merchant Marine and detailing its present and historical importance. Yawn. Then he said he felt sure that I couldn’t give a rat’s ass for the fate of the Merchant Marine, but if I were to come out on the ocean with merchant mariners I would meet outspoken characters I would love to sketch. When he was ashore, I visited him at his home, in Maine, and found myself scribbling notes all day. Before long, he and I were visiting union halls in New York, Charleston, and Savannah, looking for a ship. After “Looking for a Ship” was published, a letter came from a truck driver, another complete stranger, who owned his own chemical tanker. He said, “If you can go out on the ocean with those people, you should come out on the road with us.” I wrote back, “Tell me what you do.” On a legal pad, while his tank was getting an interior wash, he wrote seven pages saying where he went with what. I corresponded with him for five years but didn’t actually meet him until a day came when I got into his truck in Bankhead, Georgia. He said, right off, “Now, this may not work out. If it doesn’t, I completely understand. Just tell me, and I’ll drop you off at an airport anywhere on my route.” I got out of his truck in Tacoma.
Anecdotes again play a role in conveying messages to the reader. McPhee inserts these strategically in a way that entertains yet still get the point across.
“Hell, yes,” he said. “Hell, yes.”
Provocative language is included to maintain interest of the reader.
I can’t talk to Brower, because he’s so God-damned ridiculous. I can’t even reason with the man. I once debated with him in Chicago, and he was shaking with fear. Once, after a hearing on the Hill, I accused him of garbling facts, and he said, “Anything is fair in love and war.” For Christ’s sake. After another hearing one time, I told him he didn’t know what he was talking about, and said I wished I could show him. I wished he would come with me to the Grand Canyon someday, and he said, “Well, save some of it, and maybe I will.” I had a steer out on my farm in the Shenandoah reminded me of Dave Brower. Two years running, we couldn’t get him into the truck to go to market. He was an independent bastard that nobody could corral. That son of a bitch got into that truck, busted that chute, and away he went. So I just fattened him up and butchered him right there on the farm. I shot him right in the head and butchered him myself. That’s the only way I could get rid of the bastard.
McPhee included this excerpt because it is perfectly reflective of the description given of the character a few sentences earlier. It provides even greater indirect characterization.
He built very big Western dams, and he was a very tough Western guy.
Although not as much descriptive language is used here as elsewhere in this piece, this sentence still provides imagery into the character because of the way he was described.
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Classifying subjects of a story as something as symbolic as a letter allowed McPhee to take his story in any direction he could possibly have wanted.
My father was a medical doctor who dealt with the injuries of Princeton University athletes. He also travelled the world as the chief physician of several United States Olympic teams. When I was very young, he spent summers as the physician at a boys’ camp in Vermont. It was called Keewaydin and was a classroom of the woods. It specialized in canoe trips and taught ecology in our modern sense when the word was still connoting the root-and-shoot relations of communal plants. Aged six to twenty, I grew up there, ending as a leader of those trips. I played basketball and tennis there, and on my high-school teams at home, with absolutely no idea that I was building the shells of future pieces of writing. I dreamed all year of the trips in the wild, not imagining, of course, that they would eventually lead to the Brooks Range, to the Yukon-Tanana suspect terrain, to the shiplike ridges of Nevada and the Laramide mountains of Wyoming, or that they would lead to the rapids of the Grand Canyon in the company of C over D.
McPhee relies heavily on the usage of anecdotes to emphasize his points and convey messages.
Quoth the raven, “Nevermore.”
This is a reference to an earlier point in McPhee's essay. This repetition is perhaps his way of comparing himself to Poe, because in the excerpt, Poe mentions that he wanted repetition as well.
A guy there
Sometimes McPhee uses extremely academic language, but other times, like here, he uses extremely simple language.
Two Americans—one of them twenty-five years old, the other twenty-four—were playing each other. One was white, the other black. One had grown up beside a playground in inner-city Richmond, the other on Wimbledon Road in Cleveland’s wealthiest suburb.
Putting the two tennis players' descriptions adjacent to each other stresses their differences and adds to the effect of the anecdote.
Maybe I would twice meet myself coming the other way. Or four times. Who could tell what might happen? In any case, one plus one should add up to more than two.
This almost feels like McPhee is talking to himself. He writes rhetorically, without much regard to the reader, which made me more interested. I felt like I was seeing into his mind.
Richard Burton, Sophia Loren, Barbra Streisand, et cetera
McPhee could be establishing expertise to the reader by listing prominent figures.
producibly doleful and lugubrious
McPhee flexes an impressive vocabulary that is almost intimidating to read.
In 1846, in Graham’s Magazine, Edgar Allan Poe published an essay called “The Philosophy of Composition,” in which he described the stages of thought through which he had conceived of and eventually written his poem “The Raven.”
McPhee emphasizes the unorthodoxy of his strategy again by giving an example of a Edgar Allen Poe, a widely known unorthodox and abstract writer, using the same strategy.
That is no way to start a writing project, let me tell you.
Recognizing and emphasizing the unorthodoxy of his own strategy intrigues the reader.
To a bulletin board I had long since pinned a sheet of paper on which I had written, in large block letters, “ABC/D.” The letters represented the structure of a piece of writing, and when I put them on the wall I had no idea what the theme would be or who might be A or B or C, let alone the denominator D. They would be real people, certainly, and they would meet in real places, but everything else was initially abstract.
This is not reflective of any of the writing invention strategies that were discussed in "Finding Your Way In".
When they knocked on mine and I opened it, their faces fell dramatically as the busty Swede they expected turned into a short and bearded man.
This is an effective way to integrate light humor into writing. It provides a sort of comic relief to what was already an interesting introduction.
looking down from my window on the passing scene
I now recognize the importance of including the seemingly random details at the beginning. I can now visualize what McPhee saw as he gazed out of his window.
They massaged everything from college football players to arthritic ancients, and they didn’t give sex.
Starting off brashly with cut-and-dry language like this gave me a sort of shock from how blunt the message was conveyed.
I was working in rented space on Nassau Street up a flight of stairs and over Nathan Kasrel, Optometrist. Across the street was the main library of Princeton University. Across the hall was the Swedish Massage.
At first glance, my thoughts are that these details are frivolous and unnecessary. However, after reading the paragraph again, I began to visualize the setting being described. The details work well to help readers visualize his writing.