• Title– Do they have one? Is it a catchy title? Does it make you want to read/look more? The title is "Duel of the Star-Crossed Fates" which is catchy. It plays with the original work's "Star Wars" • Content

1. Is the thesis/commentary identifiable through the images? The photos are a fantastic representation of the scenes at hand in my opinion. The chosen photos portray emotion and situation alike.
2. Is the thesis/commentary identifiable through the text? Yes, the text is a concise representation of what happens.
3. Does it offer a clear story/narrative? Yes it does, though the "Some time later" could be confusing. I think that Ben Solo was brainwashed during that time but I'm not sure.
4. Does it clearly describe or imply what the project sets out to do? It is obvious that this project is a fan-fiction on Star Wars.
5. What could this student do to improve this section (and “nothing, it’s fine” is not a very helpful answer). Maybe put who is talking? And what time period this story may take place in.

• Images/Media—Do they include media or do they have a plan for what media they are using? How does the media help the argument/commentary? Is there opportunity to incorporate additional media? I think they are planning on using this media in their final project. This media really helps portray emotion and give context to what is happening in ways that narration cannot. I think they are planning on incorporating more media in the form of a montage (as indicated). They could probably include media to show where things are taking place.

Finally, what suggestions do you have for the writer going forward? How can they improve? List your TOP THREE SUGGESTIONS. My suggestions are give more context to the story. Maybe actually introduce characters and give more background info. I would add more narration in parts where you have just photos.