Maiguru said a lot of things then. ‘Yes, she is your brother’s child,’ she said. ‘But when it comes to taking my money so that you can feed her and her father and your whole family and waste it on ridiculous weddings, that’s when they are my relatives too. Let me tell you, Babawa Chido, I am tired of my house being a hotel for your family. I am tired of being a housekeeper for them. 1am tired of being nothing in a home I am working myself sick to support. And now even that Lucia can walk in here and tell me that the things she discusses with you, here in my home, are none of my business. I am sick of it Babawa Chido. Let me tell you, I have had enough!”
WHAT I REWRITE:
Maiguru said a lor of things, then things she had swallowed for so many years that her throat must have been sore with them, "Yes, she is your brother's child". She said, and first her voice was small, then it grew. "But when it comes to taking my money so that you can feed her and her father and your whole family and waste it on ridiculous wedding, that's when they are my relatives too. Let me tell you Baba wa Chido, I am educated, I have my degree, I have worked for it. And yet, in this house , you make me feel worthless. I am tired of my house being hotel for your family. I am tired of being a housekeeper for them. I am tired of being nothing in home i am working myself sick to support. And now even that Lucia can walk in here and tell me that the things she discusses with you here in my home, are none of my business. I am sick of it Babawa Chido, let me tell you , i have had enough!.
WHAT I ADD: "Things she had swallowed for so many years that her throat must have been sore with them" this because she was quite for years. Now she speaks that why her throat is sore.
"At first her voice was small, then it grow" This because it shows courage. Small voice to big voice is her change from fear to courage.
"I am educated. I have my degree. And yet in this house you make me feel worthless" This because original paragraph hides this, Maiguru is educated, but she is treated like housekeeper. Her pain is not just work; her pain is education without respect. That why i added it.
And i keep all her real word "I am tired of my house being a hotel, I am tired of being housekeeper, I am tired of being nothing, I have had enough!" Because those are her voice, If i change them it is not Maiguru anymore that why i keep them