Michael Jackson's "Black Or White"
You did an excellent job on this project!
Here are some of the strengths of your project. Your analysis presents a compelling and well-reasoned argument, reflecting your deep understanding of Michael Jackson's evolution as both an artist and a social figure. The logic behind your argument is clear, as you effectively trace Jackson's shift from entertainment-focused pop music to music with a powerful social message. This transition is explained in a way that not only highlights the significance of Jackson’s music but also frames it within the broader cultural and political context of the early 1990s. The examples you choose are highly relevant and illustrative of the points you’re making. They enrich your argument by providing specific, concrete instances that reinforce the evolution of his message. Moreover, your citation is correctly formatted, with a clear and precise reference list that strengthens the academic rigor of your work.
One area for improvement is that I think it would be helpful for readers if you incorporate more personal context or stories surrounding the creation of "Black or White" or Jackson's journey toward activism would deepen the reader's connection to the artist’s motivations. Personal anecdotes or insights into his creative process would humanize his shift from pop idol to social advocate. Additionally, separating the analysis of your sources into the first body paragraph rather than including it in the introduction could make your structure more reader-friendly, allowing for a more distinct division between your introduction, source analysis, and the main argument. Lastly, adding a table of contents would enhance the overall organization of the paper, helping readers easily navigate between sections and strengthening the overall presentation.
Overall I think your project is really well done.I’m really looking forward to seeing the completed version and how you continue to refine and expand on these ideas.