- Apr 2017
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atlspaceplacerhets17.robinwharton.net atlspaceplacerhets17.robinwharton.net
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Among Americans, for example, people for whom private space is a highly valued commodity, any number of devices— from having your own plate from which to eat, your own drawers for your clothes, your own special chair on which to sit, to even having your own bathroom can help achieve the goal of privacy.
I like this particular sentence due to the fact that, I believe that you need a space a private space where you can put words on paper. A space that makes you feel like your out of this world. It's your space, no one else's. Since we are talking about the vernacular I find it cool how the author incorporated this sentence into his piece. ATLSPRs17
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victoriaann.gsucreate.org victoriaann.gsucreate.org
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The Civil War and Atlanta shaped the city because the city was burned to the ground and bankrupt. This situation forced Atlanta to rebuild from its pre antebellum state into an even better version. Atlanta, before the war and reconstruction was as major post for the trading and selling of agricultural goods to all over the country and the world. However, when reconstruction came, the city had to adjust. Reconstruction forced many out of their rural towns into the city to start new jobs and new lives much different from the farm and plantation lifestyles.
I believe that this is an introductory paragraph to the next paragraph because it basically give the claim for the next paragraph try combining the two paragraphs and who will have a nice flow and that way the claim is known
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The majority of the people that moved into the city were share croppers and freed slaves. This created a population shift and growth. This also created a more industrialized economy with more production and businesses rather than agricultural and trade
Im not really sure what the claim is between these two. Try making the claim a little more noticable so the reader knows exaclty what he or she is getting into when they start to read this and again you could add this to the paragraph where it starts talking about african americans because it would help elaborate.
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Another positive ramification of the Civil War and Reconstruction was the addition of the “Atlanta Spirit “during the New South movement. The idea of the addition of art, education, and culture into the city allowed Atlanta to take on a life of its own. Today we know Atlanta as a major hub for art, music, and diversity and without the New South movement, then the city may not have had an opportunity to implement schools and emphasis on enterprises other than big business. Atlanta is a unique and influential city, but without the Civil War, Atlanta would not have become as beautiful and dominant as it is today.
This paragraph has the claim of spirit also helping aid the south and you could possibly add this to the other paragph where you spoke about the movement instead of making it another paragraph because the addition information at the end of the paper makes it choppy
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Since so many African Americans, once freed, were pushed out of the rural areas into the urban areas, the city became a safe haven and a place for growth.
This seems to be your claim but you only talk about your claim brefly when it could be elaborated more.
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Henry Grady used reconstruction as an opportunity to start the New South movement. This movement was an effort to industrialize the city even further. The industrialization was pushed forward by Hannibal Kimble (Ambrose). During this movement, the idea of adding the “Atlanta Spirit” to the city pushed Atlanta to heights never even imagined. This movement put in place more schools and a great emphasis on art and culture (Ambrose). Atlanta is now home to headquarters of world renowned companies such as Coca- Cola, Cable News Network (CNN) and United Parcel Service (UPS), and many other companies. Atlanta is also the Hip Hop capital of the world and the home to many famous musicians and artists (Ambrose). The city also houses colleges such as Georgia Tech and Georigia State University. In addition to these movements, the high African American Population allowed for the city to nurture the African American population.
There doesnt seem to be a claim here but maybe make your claim broader in this paragraph since your talking about multiple things here and about fortune 500 companies that were housed in the city.
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However, what ultimately lead to the city’s destruction lead to its rebuilding – the railroads.
At first when reading this, this sentence seems to be the claim but as i kept reading the rest of the paragraph did not seem to match the claim. just elaborate some more with your claim and about the reconstruction era in atlanta.
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it is today
dont forget to add a works cited to the end of your essay
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Reconstruction.
change it to "the reconstruction era"
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tlanta is a city that is world renowned for being a giant on multiple fronts.
try re-wording this sentence. the part about "being a giant" could be changed to sound a little more scholarly.
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but they were relocated in order for the railroad lines to flourish (Ambrose).
playing the devils advocate someone could say that this is incorrect and the native americans were not relocated but thrown out or pushed out by the white man. have that in mind when you edit this. also check up on the citation becuase the citation seems to be biased.
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marking its first period of growth
whos period of growth?
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By 1860, Atlanta was the fourth largest city in Georgia with a population just under 10,000 (Ambrose)
instead of just adding ambrose into this try directly quoting where the author says this in your source. it could make your paper a little more diverse in what kind of sentences you have
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One fifth of that population was slaves.
try added other minorites into this statictic not only african americans.
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Then As the city expanded other well know landmarks had other purposes.
reword this because it sounds weird when you say it.
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used to be
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circle
change this world to group. circle sounds a little weird when you put it into this sentence.
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he Confederate government
i've never heard of confederate government. try useing another world for the group. Try saying something liek "confederate leaders" because the confederates never actually had a government.
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Soon, the Confederate government turned Atlanta into an industrial center for the production of goods needed for the Confederate Army.
This seems to be the claim in this paragraph. It is a little confusing when you start reading the paragraph becuase I didnt know if you were going to talk about the amry or politics in this but it ended up being about the army and stength of it. Your evidence in this paragraph seems to back up your claim. You could try and eleborate more with your claim. Instead of having one citation that backs up your claim try adding some more to elaborate it. Your second citaion in this paragraph does not have much to do with the claim since it is about industrialization of atlanta and production of goods.
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As we think about how the city of Atlanta grew, we have to think about how it began. Originally, the city of Atlanta was a major hub for railroad and trade of agricultural goods. Before the railroads were built, the area was inhabited by the Creek and Cherokee Indians, but they were relocated in order for the railroad lines to flourish (Ambrose). Mr. Wilson Lumpkin, can be credited for the installation of the railroad in Atlanta, marking its first period of growth. By 1860, Atlanta was the fourth largest city in Georgia with a population just under 10,000 (Ambrose). One fifth of that population was slaves. Then As the city expanded other well know landmarks had other purposes. For example, the infamous 5 Points Marta station used to be a slave auction and trade post (Davis, Stephen). Once the Civil War began, Atlanta gained a new purpose.
I dont see a direct claim here. You moslty talk about the begging history of atlanta. You talk about a couple of different things in this paragraph and it does not seem to flow that well due to the fact that none of the things you talked about were eleborated as well as they could have been.
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Atlanta is a city that is world renowned for being a giant on multiple fronts. The city is so influential, yet many people do not stop to think about how the city became the giant that it is today. A simple answer to this question is that the city has endured momentous history in order to achieve its success. A few of the events that stand out as the most influential times are the Civil War and Reconstruction. These time periods can also be attributed as the reason why Atlanta outgrew many other southern cities and became its unique blend of enterprise, travel, and diversity.
SO in this paragraph im thinking that the claim is that Atlanta ia a very popular and thats because of its history. I feel like you could adress your claim in a better way but over all i get the main point of this paragraph. Since this is a "introduction" I wouldn't expect you to have many evidence but you do mention the recontruction period and the civil war. One thing that you did not do in this paragraph is cite a source.
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- Feb 2017
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A municipality that lacks sufficient connections between different parts of the community is often exclusionary because residents are deterred from traveling. For example, sidewalks make walking easier and safer, in large part by reducing the risk of pedestrian and vehicle collisions.
This connects my point about the handicap parking spots and the wheel chair accesible ramps. Many of these people cannot access these places because of these obsticles they have to cross in order to enter a simple store. Not only are homeless people,poor and african americans in this day and age still segregated but its all the speacial needs or the handicap. Unfortunetely there are establishments who do not create access in order for these poeple go enter their enviornment.
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The architecture of the built environment directs both physical movement through and access to places. This Part details a number of ways that states and municipalities—through actions by their residents, police force, planning staff, engineers, or local elected officials—have created infrastructure and designed their built environs to restrict passage through and access to other areas of the community
This is closely connected to the picture in my secondary article. It shows how far a apartment complex has gone to seperate themselves from homeless people with spikes. The actions oof there residents creates these detterants designed to keep the homeless out of sight. Right? Out of sight, Out of mind. The police did nothing about the spikes either. People had to get a pettiton signed in order to have the spikes removed. They restricted the access of that space from the homeless people.
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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Despite this recognition from scholars, Boddie points out that “law overlooks the racial identifiability of spaces,” and Clowney notes that “landscape is one of the most overlooked instruments of modern race-making.”67
This is very true. Just like the law allows for officers to arrest homeless people for loitering or just being somewhere for no apparent reason. The law does not protect the homeless poeple from the segregation that goes on with benches or seating or even the spikes. There is no law that focuses on them. The author was right we overlook things that do not concern us but play such a big role in our built enviornment and with segregation.
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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For example, Lior Jacob Strahilevitz examines “exclusionary amenities,” which are features of residential developments that are generally expensive and that only appeal to certain demographic groups.
This is a good example of another way that people are seperated but its interesting how they segregate using pricing of houses. They know who has money and who is willing to spend that much. For some reason the misconception that white poeple are rich and african americans are poor runs the way in which realators and builders try and control neighborhoods. Thats a very interesting point the author brings up. Its not only the archetecture like the benches in the secondary article that were made to segregate but its the pricing of things also.
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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these features of the built environment control and constrain our behavior.
I find this interesting how they say that the build enviornment controls our behavior. In a way I do see what the author is talking about. Even in downtown Atlanta I see how detatched Geogia State University students are from the other people that live within the city and share our enviornment. Especially towards the homeless people. They are looked as "below" some of us and thats primarily because we see what kind of conditions they are dealt with in the enviornment.
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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For example, one might think it a simple aesthetic design decision to create a park bench that is divided into three individual seats with armrests separating those seats. Yet the bench may have been created this way to prevent people—often homeless people—from lying down and taking naps.
This is another way that the two articles connect. Both speak about the dispicable ways in which the homeless are detered and further labled as the "Untouchables".
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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Wealthy, mostly white residents of the northern Atlanta suburbs have vocally opposed efforts to expand MARTA into their neighborhoods for the reason that doing so would give people of color easy access to suburban communities.7 The lack of public-transit connections to areas north of the city makes it difficult for those who rely on transit—primarily the poor and people of color—to access job opportunities located in those suburbs.8
Like how Rober Moses built the Low brigde the people of Buckhead, GA are also intentionally trying to derail these poeple from persuing jobs and careers in that area. This is preventing them to even have a chance to edge out of being poor.
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According to his biographer, Moses directed that these overpasses be built intentionally low so that buses could not pass under them.4 This design decision meant that many people of color and poor people, who most often relied on public transportation, lacked access to the lauded public park at Jones Beach.5
As you can see this is a crucial way in which builders and the government will deter people and segregate them purposely. This is the same thing that the government is doing with homeless people by not making the benches a good place to sleep and how this apartment building in the picture about put spikes so homeless people could not sleep over night there.
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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Although the law has addressed the exclusionary impacts of racially restrictive covenants and zoning ordinances, most legal scholars, courts, and legislatures have given little attention to the use of these less obvious exclusionary urban design tactic
This brings us back to the point in the other article where it says that people are oblivious to the detterants which are set in place for the homeless people. Most detterants in the world are not even seen unless you actully analyze the architecture or you see someone compaining. Just like how some places do not have handicap parking or how they do not have a wheelchair excessible entrance. You would never notive these small things unless they were preventing you from doing something on a day to day basis.
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"How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away" can be easily connected to this piece by showing how far some people go to segregate others that are not built to their standards. This article starts off with a picture showing an apartment building that has put spikes on the floor in one corner of the building in london. This picture was a picture someone tweeted with the caption "Anti Homeless floor studes. So much for sommunity spirit :( ". This act was used to discourage homeless people to sleep there at night. The author of this article goes on to speak about many other circumstances where the government or city has in one way or another made these people the "untouchables" of the community in which they reside. The author goes on to say how both mayors in London and Montreal both called the spikes "unacceptable" and "stupid". He talks about how concrete was poored over the spikes by protesters and how they manages to get 130,000 peopple to sign a petition to remove the spikes in London, Tesco, and Montreal. The spikes are the most obvious way in which people have tried to deter the homeless people away but there are other ways in which the government does it where people do not realize until payed close attention to. Skate boarders found ways to go around this deterrents with popping of the studs but then vendors found a way to respond to that action. It's like a ping pong game one goes around the detterant the other finds another one to stop the skateboarder. The same thing is happening with the homeless people. With homeless people the deternt is createing benches in which they could not sleep on. Many people ,like me, do not realize what these arm rests between each seat really do. Some people think its just making sure each person has their own space when sitting so they do not end up squished but in reality they're dettering the homeless people from sleep on them. The author goes on to talk about what kind of homeless detterants for benches there are and how some benches are made to be uncomfortable on purpose. These detterants present the homeless with obsticles they must surpass in order to find a safe place to sleep at night.
Rosenberger, Robert. "How Cities Use Design to Drive Homeless People Away." The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 19 June 2014. Web. 24 Feb. 2017.
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At this point, studying buildings is starting to sound like a lot of trouble
I find this sentence very funny. Mostly because they say "studying buildings is starting to sound like a lot of trouble'. It is very funny because this sewer problem dekalb is having has a lot to do with actually constructing the buildings. So when they say studying buildings is a lot of trouble then they have another thing coming when they see how much trouble it is when you actually have to build one and make sure the sewer system has enough capacity for your building. I just find it a bit ironic.
"Sewer Problems Threaten DeKalb's Growth." From the Atlanta Journal Constitution, 2016-08-26. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2017.
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Learning to read architecture— an ability that centers on a kind of visual and spatially oriented analysis— is not easy. So it comes as no surprise that researchers fall back on the customary written sources when confronting buildings as evidence. They find bits and pieces of information— some mention of an important event that took place here or the names of important people who once occupied the building— that lend significance to the object rather than confronting the physical evidence.
Just like what they are saying in this paragraph to reading architecture , you have to be specially oriented. The way i connect this piece of writing to my supplemental analysis is through this picture. The developers looks at what the community of dekalb county they were looking at and see where people spent the most money. They saw they would need apartments for the growing population but also shopping centers because you need somewhere to buy groceries and clothing. What they did not think about though were the underground problems. Where they could build this complex. Where it was needed. By the sewer system, this would not be the place unless someone made room for them."Sewer Problems Threaten DeKalb's Growth." From the Atlanta Journal Constitution, 2016-08-26. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2017.
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As an academic exercise, the study of material culture is grounded in the physical and material presence of objects -in the case of vernacular architecture, buildings— and relies on the analysis of particular sets of forms and the patterns they make to tell us about human behavior both past and present.
Dekalb county is not known for night life unless you are in the west side of dekalb which takes up midtown. Other than that Dekalb count is mostly residential. It is basically the suburbs. The fact that this area is mostly residential shows you the particular set of culture that is going on there in terms of inhabitants. Maybe the fact that the culture is set mostly as residential means there there is going to be more residential communities built. Which leads to the sewer problem that needs to be fixed.
"Sewer Problems Threaten DeKalb's Growth." From the Atlanta Journal Constitution, 2016-08-26. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2017.
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The preference For detached houses in America is visible in these rows o f houses from St. Louis, Missouri. While in densely developed cities the older British practice o f building continuous rows or terraces of houses was often followed, in less densely developed urban areas and suburbs American builders left gaps between the indi vidual houses, clearly articulating the bound aries of each household's space. Photo by Thomas Carter
This leads back to my supplemental article about the sewer problems that are threatening Dekalb county. This paragraph could possibly explain why Dekalb is having this problem. Just like the way the British were following the continuous rows of houses as a city plan Dekalb county probably Just kept following their same plan. Maybe they never actually believed that the county would grow so much like it has up till now.
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material culture
In a way this material culture could be the aging sewer system. It has been here for so long its also a part of the culture. Just like the houses in that community somehow they all end up being a part of that culture there.
"Sewer Problems Threaten DeKalb's Growth." From the Atlanta Journal Constitution, 2016-08-26. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2017.
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things, not randomly or by chance, but systematically and intentionally through our culture.
Here again my supplemental text comes in with the not planning randomly. In my supplemental text it speaks a lot about how now they are starting to develop more and more in the community. There is no way to plan systematically in the environment because as humans we are changing and adapting every single day just like dekalb county is.
"Sewer Problems Threaten DeKalb's Growth." From the Atlanta Journal Constitution, 2016-08-26. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2017.
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“that segment of [the human] physical environment which is purposely shaped . . . according to culturally dictated plans.”
This specific sentence reminds me of an article I read that talked about to Dekalb sewer problems. Dekalb county is a county in downtown Atlanta, GA. The article basically speaks about how since that area is growing rapidly and new projects are coming up. Unfortunately, the aging sewer system isn't enough to handle the huge projects they have coming. They have projects ranging from residential and commercial buildings to restaurants. They currently have 5 locations that are lacking sewer capacity. Dekalb is a dense county already and they are just gonna get big and bigger with the influx of people moving to Georgia both on business and households. Unfortunately for many of these places they have to hold on development. Even with the federal judge getting involved it does not speed up the process. Currently, development is being held up in these 5 classes throughout the county. Not only will this halt on development hurt the construction companies but also the economic growth and job creations in the area. Every developer says that the lines should have been updated a long time ago but unfortunately they have not. Some developers have also decided that they might just install septic tanks to get their project back on track. If this plan is approved then it would help the developer and the county sewer system as well with not overcrowding. This sentence reminds me of this article because you have to dictate your environment for future plans. This was something that the people of DeKalb county should have done. Better safe than sorry.
"Sewer Problems Threaten DeKalb's Growth." From the Atlanta Journal Constitution, 2016-08-26. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2017.
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- Jan 2017
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atlspaceplacerhets17.robinwharton.net atlspaceplacerhets17.robinwharton.net
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As teachers, we wanted an introductory text for students that would both open their eyes to the world of ordinary buildings and outline a basic method for studying them.
I find it interesting how ini the begging we understand that Vernacular Architecture is the was writing is supposed to be set up. It's interesting how he uses words like buildings and model. Both words are something that could be used in a conversation or text about actual architecture involving buildings. ATLSPRs17
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