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  1. Mar 2020
    1. My theory for what makes good writing is when people are completely raw with their thoughts.

      Could you use our key terms when stating your theory of writing--or at least one of them? Or perhaps you can state the relationship among two?

    2. Works Cited 1.) Billy Collins Commencement Address; https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm 2.) Dovovan Livingston’s Speech; https://youtu.be/9XGUpKITeJM 3.) Gloria Anzaldua “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”; https://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf

      not in MLA format I'd be glad to help

  2. Feb 2020
    1. emind the audience t

      who is his audience?

    2. e purposely makes his address short

      isn't it to inspire, to teach as well as to entertain?

    3. The last source that I analyzed was the Commencement Address by Billy Collins.

      again, I appreciate the transition but can you tweak it to include our terms?

    4. he writes a letter

      can you say more about this genre? why a letter? how is a letter different from other genres?

    5. to change their mind about the civil rights movement.

      yes: and to justify his non-violent movement?

    6. He brings up Jesus, a man the audience themselves worships in order to grab their attention.

      good

    7. Both Gloria Anzaldua and Martin Luther King Jr wrote pieces that were aimed to make their audiences think.

      I appreciate the attempt at transition but might you include our key terms as well in the sentence?

    8. may be ignorant to the injustice non-English speakers face or Spanish people who feel the same way she does.

      okay--good, but can you be more precise? White, English speakers and those Chicanas whose Spanish dialect is looked down upon?

    9. you feel

      why shift to "you"?

    10. like a Mexican.”

      cite page?

    11. The first source that I looked at was How to Tame a Wild Tongue by Gloria Anzaldua

      might you tweak this as a topic sentence to include our key terms?

    12. writing is a memoir,

      edit for punctuation: use period instead of comma between sentences?

    13. I would define genre as being a specific type of an artistic composition.

      good, clear definitions Might you insert transitions as you move from one term to another?

    14. The genre, audience, and purpose are all very important concepts to a piece of writing

      a helpful, opening paragraph

    15. Collins, Billy. Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm. Accessed 6 Feb. 2020   King, Martin Luther. Letter from Birmingham Jail, 1963, https://web.cn.edu/kwheeler/documents/Letter_Birmingham_Jail.pdf. Accessed 6 Feb. 2020   Anzaldua, Gloria. How to Tame a Wild Tongue, 1987, https://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf. Accessed 6 Feb. 202

      pretty good MLA form--just needing to be alphabetized

    16. Do I need better transitions? Is my theory of writing clear?

      good questions

    1. Gloria Anzaldua keeps her audience of the Chicano population and those who do not support bilingual communication connected with her writing. She provides facts and personal experiences to keep the atte

      good

    2. With the comparison of Apostle Paul to himself his connection to the religious intended audience.

      good--perhaps explain a bit more?

    3. Eight important people of the clergy.

      eight white clergymen (not fragment)

    4. Billy Collins does

      new paragraph?

    5. But when you have seen vicious mobs lynch your mothers and fathers at will and drown your sisters and brothers at whim; when you have seen hate-filled policemen curse, kick, brutalize, and even kill your black brothers and sisters with impunity; when you see the vast majority of your twenty million Negro brothers smothering in an airtight cage of poverty in the midst of an affluent society; when you suddenly find your tongue twisted and your speech stammering as you seek to explain to your six-year-old daughter why she cannot go to the public amusement park that has just been advertised on television and see tears welling up in her little eyes when she is told that Funtown is closed to colored children, and see the depressing clouds of inferiority begin to form in her little mental sky and see her begin to distort her little personality by unconsciously developing a bitterness toward white people; when you have to concoct an answer for a five-year-old son asking in agonizing pathos, “Daddy, why do white people treat colored people so mean?”; when you take a cross-country drive and find it necessary to sleep night after night in the uncomfortable corners of your automobile because no motel will accept you; when you are humiliated day in and day out by nagging signs reading “white” and “colored”; when your first name becomes “nigger” and your middle name becomes “boy” (however old you are) and your last name becomes “John,” and when your wife and mother are never given the respected title “Mrs.”; when you are harried by day and haunted by night by the fact that you are a Negro, living constantly at tiptoe stance, never knowing what to expect next, and plagued with inner fears and outer resentments; when you are forever fighting a degenerating sense of”nobodyness” — then you will understand why we find it difficult to wait. There comes a time when the cup of endurance runs over and men are no longer willing to be plunged into an abyss of injustice where they experience the bleakness of corroding(King 2

      why quote the passage at length? Doing so makes it hard for the reader to follow your own argumemt/analysis

    6. Kings writing

      King's

    7. His purpose was to teach, inspire and maybe even provoke.

      nicely stated

    8. wether

      whether

    9. ask yourself

      this reference to "your" seems too informal and abrupt?

    10. An autobiography is a piece of writing that is written about yourself and your own person. For example, Gloria is speaking on her own experience a

      good

    11. Perhaps a letter in response to one that he has received

      Yes:

    12. My first source Billy Collins Commencement address at Colorado College has quite an obvious genre.

      new paragraph?

    13. Genre can be defined simply as the category of writing. The textbook states “Genre is a type of writing- from an informative report to a bog posting-and each type of writing requires particular rhetorical moves(

      good--but what do the authors mean?

    14. you just

      why shift to "you"?

    15. Genre, purpose

      why capitalize?

    16. Billy Collins Commencement Address

      Collins' King's

    17. Questions such as Who is the writer targeting and trying to reach?

      good question but note the fragment

    18. Blau, Susan, and Kathryn Burak. Writing in the Works. Houghton Mifflin, 2007. Print.

      put in alphabetical order?

    19. Gloria Anzaldua’s How to Tame a Wild Tongue  https://www.everettsd

      not quite in MLA format

    20. King, Martin Luther, Jr. “Letter from Birmingham Jail.” 16 Apr. 1963. Web 06 Feb. 2020

      insert web address?

    1. your

      Why use "your"?

    2. Which is basically the purpose of his speech.

      fragment Please explain?

    3. She wrote this memoir because she wants to educate and show others how it’s not okay to put others down just for who they are, just like Martin Luther King Jr. did when he wrote his letter to the eight religious leaders of the south. Just like how Anzaldua understands the importance of knowing how to use genre,audience and purpose correctly so didn’t Collins.

      I'm confused: what is the main point of this paragraph? are you focusing on genre in the three sources?

    4. audience was anyone who made her feel like an outsider.

      you mean English-speakers? or speaker's of a certain Spanish dialect? Please be more precise?

    5. Gloria Anzaldua genre was a bunch of different things but it was mostly a memoir to me.

      you will need a transition

    6. ese men because they published an article in the newspaper stating that he should just wait and not proceed with the non-violent movement.

      yes: please show evidence of how King is mindful of his audience

    7. Dr. Martin Luther King Jr wrote a letter

      do you want to add a topic sentence just prior to this sentence--a sentence that predicts what the whole paragraph will say--for your reader's sake?

    8. te to eight white religious leaders of the South.

      note that this sentence is a fragment

    9. and meaningful, he

      edit for comma fault

    10. assembled spectators or listeners

      quotation?

    11. is a category of artistic composition,

      a quotation from our textbook? please use quotation marks and cite source/page

    12. you don’

      why the shift to "you"?

    13. When they wrote these all three of them executed all three components of a Rhetorical Situation perfectly.

      good--nicely put

    14. How do I transition, also how do I write conclusions I’m not good at those so I usually leave them out

      I will check them out.

    15. https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm https://web.cn.edu/kwheeler/documents/Letter_Birmingham_Jail.pdf https://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf

      not in MLA format

      I'd be glad to help.

    1. This is going for the same thing in King’s letter from Birmingham Jail he wants to change the unjust laws against the colored and have the ones that are breaking the laws to be put in jail instead of the ones who are doing nothing wrong at

      lost your focus: who is King's intended audience?

    2. The audience in Anzaldua’s piece are directed at two people the Americans, and the foreigner

      not really: Anzaldua is an American Chicana. She is addressing other Chicanas as well as White, English-speaking readers

    3. genre is a motivational speech

      commencement speech and spoken word poetry: slow down and be more precise, okay?

    4. In Anzaldua’s piece, her genre is her genre a persuasive essay to try and get the people to accept their accents and that they speak differently “

      you seem to be confusing genre and purpose here: slow down, okay? Talk about her choice of genre first (providing evidence) and then go to purpose and so forth

    5. what is it going to be used for, to tell a story, to motivate people, to change someone’s mind of something,

      good, clear, accurate

    6. too,

      to

    7. ne of the three concepts of writing that a writer has to perfect. Genre tells you where the story is taking place and how real or fake the piece is.

      you will need to be more precise and accurate in defining "genre." See our textbook.

    8. tells you

      why the shift to "you"?

    9. gonna b

      going

    10. too,

      to

    11. thing whos

      edit for typos

    12. In conclusion, writers have a lot to connect and think of when writing they have to have a genre but the two bigger points are the audience and purpose when you know both of those the genre falls into place

      I don't see a Works Cited list or Postwrite

    1. the bold purpose of chastising religious

      good point

    2. rhetorical purpose is the message

      not quite: tru to distinguish purpose from message

    3. dditional evidence of Kings primary audience is his religious references and arguments he makes like the someone with a PHD in theology would to fellow religious influences would.

      example?

    4. letter meant for a small audience w

      please be more precise

    5. Livingston chooses to write to larger audience of youth minorities

      and perhaps future educators?

    6. intended for the audience the moment he begins his speech by reference the time it will take him to deliver a meaningless statement to those reading his text years latter except for English papers

      okay--his audience would want the speech to be short

    7. there where

      typo

    8. readers awareness

      work on apostrophe use, okay?

    9. of genre, audience,

      a writer's awareness

    10. satires case

      in the case of satire

    11. authors intended

      author's

    12. your audience

      why the shift to "your"?

    13. they are writing too,

      writing to

    14. Post Write

      Thanks for the postwrite. But I don't see a Works Cited list.

    1. eight racist religious leaders

      try to more precise and generous: eight white clergymen whom King calls "moderate."

      Evidence that he understand his audience?

    2. speaking to multiple audiences at the same time.

      can you be more precise and accurate about his audience? future teachers?

    3. His genre of a graduation speech is a great and suiting platform

      can you add that he is also using the spoken word poetry genre?

    4. is to tell the audience her defining qualities, to stand out, to be her genuine self and to want the same for others.

      to educate and too encourage?

    5. tame a wild tongue

      capitalize title?

    6. Anzaldua’s choice of the genre as a memoir makes a personal connection to the audience.

      good

    7. I felt Anzaldua was trying to reach to certain people of her culture that can relate to speaking a particular dialectical language of Spanish.

      see my earlier comment about a topic sentence

    8. To start with Billy Collins, Collins delivered a  13-minute Commence Address speech to an audience of graduates at Colorado College and has made similar speeches, with slight variation, many times at different schools.

      might you tweak this topic sentence so that it predicts what the paragraph will say?--for your reader's sake?

    9. Collins acknowledges the cliches that are associated with graduation speeches that the students may have presumed of him at the beginning of the address. He shows self-awareness, making fun of these stereotypes with a purpose to be genuine in efforts to be heard

      good--please quote for evidence?

    10. The purpose of an author makes their choices on genre and audience come full circle

      please explain

    11. who the audiences are and what they perceive is not entirely in the control of the author as each member of the audience can have a potentially different interpretation

      Are you sure? Don't audiences expect certain qualities when a writer uses a particular genre, for example?

    12. categories

      "categories"

    13. -Gloria Anzaldua’s Memoir “How to Tame a Wild Tongue” https://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf -Billy Collins’ Commencement Address to Colorado College https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm -Dr. Martin Luther King Jr.’s Letter from Birmingham Jail https://web.cn.edu/kwheeler/documents/Letter_Birmingham_Jail.pdf -Donovan Livingston’s Harvard Graduation Speech https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9XGUpKITeJM&t=112s

      close but not quite MLA format

    1. A good piece of writing is able to use their audience to help shape their genre, as well as their method of delivering their purpose

      your Theory of Writing?

    2. he uses figurative language to keep their attention more than a long-winded speech would. His figurative language is present when he is speaking about his students, “I look each of my students in the eyes, and see the same light that aligned Orion’s Belt and the pyramids of Giza. I see the same twinkle that guided Harriet to freedom.”

      good

    3. his piece is a spoken word poem as well as a speech.

      yes, poetry and commencement speech

    4. “I was in the 7th grade, when Ms. Parker told me, “Donovan, we can put your excess energy to good use!” Towards the end of his speech, he switches to “you” when he says; “Injustice is telling them education is the key while you continue to change the locks.” This helps his main idea, as well as criticizes educators, by implying that the education system only gives opportunity to a limited amount of people instead of everyone.

      I appreciate your using these powerful passages

    5. he graduating class

      who happen to be future educators, right?

    6. writing this piece as a personal narrative

      yes--although there may be other genres at work here, including poetry and the essay

    7. with the purpose to educate her readers as

      yes: educate whom?

    8. Anzaldúa describes her experience with being discriminated against for her native language, something she takes personally offensive

      shouldn't you identify her target audience here?

    9. Just like Dr. King, Gloria Anzaldúa knows her audience exceptionally well.

      excellent transition

    10. A letter is something that is distinctive and personal, because it addressed to one person. In this case, its addressed to eight people which is still a small group of people. So, because this is a letter, he is able to voice his opinions and they will definitely be heard.

      nicely stated

    11. As the letter goes on, Dr. King then criticizes the church, which is almost like a personal blow to the religious leaders he is writing to. He shares his disappointment with how the leaders have preached to follow desegregation because it’s the law, but not because it is immoral. (5) “I have heard numerous religious leaders of the South call upon their worshipers to comply with a desegregation decision because it is the law, but I have longed to hear white ministers say, follow this decree because integration is morally right and the Negro is your brother.” (5

      summary rather than analysis?

    12. Another example of something very sacred to the religious leaders is Jesus Christ. Dr. King uses Jesus as an example and comparison of someone who’s peaceful actions warranted a violent consequence. “Isn’t this like condemning Jesus because His unique God-consciousness and never-ceasing devotion to His will precipitated the evil act of crucifixion?

      move to the audience section?

    13. goal was to educate the religious leaders,

      good

    14. In Dr. King’s letter, his purpose

      In the Letter, King's purpose . . .

    15. With his rather small audience in mind, he does not write his letter in a disrespectful tone nor does he initially criticize them. “But since I feel that you are men of genuine good will and your criticisms are sincerely set forth, I would like to answer your statement in what I hope will be patient and reasonable terms.” (1) If he was to criticize them from the start, then he would have lost their attention.

      exactly--nicely done

    16. In Dr. Martin Luther King’s Jr “Letter from Birmingham”, his knowingness o

      In his "Letter," King's knowledge of

    17. Who is going to be your audience? If a writer is able to answer this question, it allows them to shape their writing in a way that appeals to the specific audience, allowing it to be the most effective it can be.

      This paragraph is really helpful

    18. eaders expectations.

      readers' expectations

    19. your

      why the shift to "your"?

    20. piece of writing needs to follow specific rules and guidelines.

      good

    21. Blau and Burak, authors of “Writing in the Works”, define genre as a “…type of writing that requires particular rhetorical moves.” (3)

      good but can you explain what they mean?

    22. In this essay I will be analyzing the works of Dr. Martin Luther King Jr, Gloria Anzaldua, and Donovan Livingston.

      a helpful introduction

    23. Have my transitions improved? Please read my paragraph about purpose in regards to Anzaldua’s piece and tell me if it’s good or if I need improvements. How does my paragraph about genre in regards to Livingston’s piece sound? Do I need to make improvements on it? Does my closing paragraph need work is it fine the way it is?

      I like the specificity of these questions: I will keep them mind as I comment

    1. Gloria Anzaldua and Martin Luther King Jr. have similar pieces but they also have differences. The pieces of these two are similar because they deal with being bullied for being them and being punished for it on top of tha

      here, too: please analyze each in terms of genre, audience, and purpose before comparing, okay?

    2. Donovan Livingston and Billy Collins, both wrote commencement addresses to a graduating class, but they were both so different. I felt Donovan Livingston’s commencement address was more motivational and inspiring

      I appreciate the compassion but shouldn't you focus on genre, audience, and purpose for each piece before comparing them? Slow down, okay?

    3. who aren’t native to the american culture and language, to just be themselves

      actually, and more accurately, Anzaldua is speaking to other Americans, who happen to speak "border" languages

    4. Every rhetorical situation has a purpose

      more precisely: purpose is part of a rhetorical situation

    5. Genre can really help your audience with understanding how an essay will be composed and the flow of the rhetorical situation, if i

      not sure I follow note need to edit for comma fault

    6. Genre is a word we all know and use quite often as a community to describe categories of music, television, books, movies, etc.

      good

    7. I will start off my essay by defining these three key terms.

      helpful--thanks

    8. you t

      why shift to "you"?

    9. They also go over the future, but one motivates while the other tells us to capture every moment and keep it special.

      I don't see a Works Cited list or a Postwrite

    1. This is what the rhetorical situation shows us to understand its elements in order to have a successful writing piece with a genre, purpose and audience.

      not sure I follow

    2. In quote King explains how this nonviolent movement is filling everyone’s rage because they are sick of being treated like there worthless just because of their skin color, humans should be treated as equals no matter the culture or skin color. King uses the the theme of disappointment because this is how he truly feels since he’s stuck in jail but also feels that no one is standing up for their rights. I believe that King conveyed a message that explained that segregation and oppression needed to come to an end. 

      summary rather than analysis?

    3. had the time to write a letter because he knew that people would take it to heart.

      please explain the connection between the letter genre and "heart."

    4. there story

      their story Can you work some more on this transition? I do appreciate the attempt!

    5. how to connect with her audience

      evidence?

    6. ree licks on the knuckles with a sharp ruler”.

      cire page?

    7. Which is mainly towards her targeted audience who are people that are  just like her or can relate in some way.

      note fragment Yes--an audience just like her: can you be more precise? Chicanas?

    8. purpose for her writing is about her difficulties

      Can you be more precise? Her purpose is to educate or to encourage. . .

    9. ame a Wild Tongue”’, she know

      edit for comma fault?

    10. My suggestion is that  Billy Collins speech wasn’t really inspiring as the other speech I read, again that’s just my own opinion.

      do you want to include this?

    11. t how we should live in the moment and not live life at such a fast pace, as mentioned we should change our perspectives. As I quote “ He (or she) said that the past was behind us and the future lay ahead’. He talks about how we should value the moment meaning now,and enjoy the little things in life.

      summary rather than analysis?

    12. The genre of Collins piece is a graduation speech, he understands that it requires him to be clear and straight to the point when trying to spread the message. I’ve

      okay--check punctuation Also can you say more what the genre usually contains and how Collins makes fun of the genre?

    13. was to inspire graduates to motivate others

      yes: good

    14. In Billy Collins Commencement Address, he

      In his Commencement Address, Collins knows

    15. Especially because the audience is another important element that’s part of the rhetorical situation.

      note fragment

    16. that in every writing piece has a purpose

      that every writing has a purpose

    17. Lets not

      Let's)

    18. for your

      why shift to "your"?

    19. equires particular rhetorical moves

      please use quotation marks and cite page

    20. To be able to write successfully, we must understand our genre,purpose and most importantly the audience for every piece of writing

      good, clear, opening sentence and paragraph

    21. Anzaldua , Gloria. How To Tame A Wild Tongue . www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf. King Jr., Martin Luther. Martin Luther King Jr. Birmingham Jail Letter . web.cn.edu/kwheeler/documents/Letter_Birmingham_Jail.pdf.

      close to MLA but you will to include dates of publication and date last visited

    22. Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliand and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      not in MLA format

    23. “Is the piece clear and to the point” , “Does my writing have a voice?”, “ Is there any suggestions you want to make” , Did I well define the three key terms”. That’s all. 

      I will keep these in mind as I comment

    1. r her belief that a language and it’s people shouldn’t be oppressed and in doing so she actually helped make some new languages and helped evolve some, and even helped her fellow chicanos and chicanas realize that there really was nothing to hide from and to fight in their own way.

      you seem to lose your focus in this paragraph

    2. Marc Schiller, Pain and Gain – The Untold True Story.

      I appreciate the citation but please follow MLA format

    3. From kids and people my own age I picked up Pachuco. Pachuco (the language of the zoot suiters) is a language of rebellion, both against Standard Spanish and Standard English. It is a secret language. Adults of the culture and outsiders cannot understand it. It is made up of slang words from both English and Spanish.”

      no need to use italics--just quotation marks

    4. Audience she is trying to reach is her following generations to tell her story about how using her native tongue in public was a punishable offense and “wrong.”

      please be more precise when identifying her intended audience: for example, Chicanas, Whites who speak English only?

    5. Ms Gloria Anzaldua wrote a memoir.

      transition?

    6. inspire the graduates as

      okay--good

    7. Collins’ chose a different genre in that of a commencement speech to the graduating class of Dartmouth College 2008

      chose the commencement speech genre Note: he gave it at Colorado College

    8. pose of the letter was to try and tell

      can you be more precise? to justify non-violence? to educate the white moderates about the movement and the urgency?

    9. He chose a letter because he had received one from said clergymen asking him to withhold any form of protes

      yes--good. But how does the letter genre differ from other genres?

    10. was attending Birmingham Jail

      more precisely, after he had been order to spend time in jail

    11. used them in their writing and why their pieces are  extraordinary and how they influenced their later generations with their words and feelings.

      used them in their writing, why their pieces are extraordinary, and how they . . . .

    12. hese aren’t examples of good writing because of who these people are/were, they are examples because of how the authors chose to define the terms and shape them into something that would make them great writers and remembered.

      I don't see a Works Cited list and Postwrite

    1. And she uses monolog

      poetry?

    2. Martin Luther King’s Letter’s purpose was to communicate urgency and to justify the

      good

    3. wanted to inspire them and motivate them.

      who are "them"? But, yes, his purpose is to inspire

    4. ose to write a story

      try to be more precise, okay? Where does she tell a story? Isn't this also a memoir of sorts? an essay?

    5. Gloria

      Anzaldua

    6. meaning this writing matches the genre/ format of a letter.

      Yes--good. Can you say more about a letter is different from other genres?

    7. Martin

      King

    8. herefore, Collins must choose his words carefully to match the guidelines of a commencement address meaning it generally goes over experiences, values, and advice.

      good--can you say more about the typical commencement speech?

    9. across to everyone who may just speak English or multi-language speakers,

      can you be more precise: English-speakers and Chicanas?

    10. minorities identities

      accurate quotation?

    11. Gloria’s audience

      Please use full or last name

    12. bible quotes and talked about Jesus.

      please quote here to provide more evidence

    13. his attended audience was a group of 8 white religious leaders

      good

    14. communicate, unlike

      edit for punctuation?

    15. “President Celeste, Distinguished Faculty, Staff, Parents, Relatives, Friends and, most importantly, the 2008 graduating class of Colorado College.

      thanks for the quotation--but not italics, just quotation marks

    16. Audience

      Thanks for the subheading!

    17. There are 3 main elements that need to be met and are crucial in what makes or breaks a successful paper

      This first paragraph works pretty well, I believe

    18. type of writing– from an informative report to a blog posting- and each type of writing requires particular rhetorical moves// type or category”.

      Thanks for quoting but no italics, please. And please comment on what the writers are saying in this quotation.

    19. your audience.

      why this shift to "your"?

    20. What is the story

      What is the writing doing?

    21. This will also influence the way you speak, for instance, you don’t talk the way you talk to your boss the same way you talk to your sibling.

      I don't see a list of Works Cited and a Postwrite

    1. The audience for “How to Tame a Wild Tongue” would be people from different nationality, people reading the article because she wanted to target specific people that would catch there attention and see the different perspective Gloria Anzaldua had with the none Spanish speaker or vice versa.

      can you be more precise? Can you say "Chicanos," for example?

    2. The genre for “How to Tame a Wild Tongue” would be a memoir,

      yes: memoir--good--not sure about speech

    3. “I spoke English like a Mexican.” “Their purpose: to get rid of our accents.” “Wild tongues can’t be tamed, they can only be cut out.” ( Gloria Anzaldua) these are a few quotes that I chose that really go hand in hand with the racial oppression similarities because they don’t agree with the different Wild Tongues that people have in other words there language is not being  accepted.  

      focus on the purpose of the writing?

    4. he purpose of her memoir is

      Have you identified the genre s memoir? Is this paragraph about purpose? You might then bring that word earlier, no?

    5. Gloria Anzaldua in “How to Tame a Wild Tongue” goes hand in hand in the similarity

      transition might need tweaking, no?

    6. he genre of the Billy Collins Commencement Address would be satire a

      actually: the genre is a commencement speech; the tone or purpose may be satirical

    7. Which one of his touching purpose that was an “in” for me was when he stated “So much attention to time, very odd, especially for people freshly graduated from college who justifiably feel they have all the time in the world. Maybe today we should take another look at the subject. From my experience, there are two basic ways to regard time, or anything else: The Pragmatic and the Poetic.” (Billy Collins). I really liked how Collins was unique with using Pragmatic and Poetic as a way to describe the future and the past which I really thought was something different and never seen anyone describe it that way. I liked how he described Pragmatic as being the past and/reservoir of errors and something that people should learn and apply to the future as receiving different opportunity and not committing the same mistake over and over again. Poetic he described it as not regretting anything  you do in the present and tend to do in the future because life is based on trying new things and believing in yourself. 

      you seem to lose your thread in this paragraph

    8. I precisely use this quote because I felt that Billy Collins displays a great understanding of his audience during his speech.

      good--but shouldn't this be in the audience section?

    9. by him having a connection he was able to give the class a little of advice

      can you show how he establishes that connection?

    10. o encourage the graduating class and to change students

      good

    11. Collins purpose

      Collins' purpose

    12. In the Billy Collins Commencement Address the audience would be the graduating class because

      I sense the need for a transition, don't you?

    13. “Then came the opportunity last September to talk with some of the leaders of the economic community. In these negotiating sessions certain promises were made by the merchants, such as the promise to remove the humiliating racial signs from the stores. On the basis of these promises, Reverend Shuttlesworth and the leaders of the Alabama Christian Movement for Human Rights agreed to call a moratorium on any type of demonstration. A

      not sure how this shows King's purpose: focus?

    14. you say

      why the shift to "you"?

    15. he intended purpose for the Martin Luther King Jr. article is to educate/teach reflect

      good, clear and precise topic sentence

    16. Which the only voices that were being heard were the “white privilege’’ because the whites had more of a voice then the blacks, anything the whites would say whether it was good or bad that’s what they would all agreed it should happen and that’s one of the things King Jr. had a disagreement with and wanted to state that in his letter especially when him and the audience share something in common in that’s for black people to have rights. Where they don’t want to wait for time they want some action to get done because that’s all they get told “wait for time and something will get done” they felt that with time given they still weren’t doing anything.   

      Can you comment on how King connects with this particular audience--why, for example, does he use Biblical references?

    17. would be the white moderate clergymen,

      Yes--good--the eight white clergymen

    18. his is also considered a letter because while King Jr. was in Birmingham Jail he had more then enough time to write and express himself.

      actually, he was responding to a letter, right? But what is there about a letter that makes it a distinctive genre, say from a speech or an essay?

    19. In the article by Martin Luther King Jr. who was born in 1929, it had some really interesting things to read about and to also learn for instance the genre; of this article would be letter/speech.

      I see--so this paragraph will focus on genre, right? This is a letter rather than. a speech, right?

    20. there story. 

      their story