It seems like he has no concept of how unnecessarily dramatic their courtship was.

more frequent hyphen use

This romance is such a fast paced roller coaster of emotions. It's very hard to keep up with the characters and their motives.

Is this his name, or is that a phrase?

This is fascinating, as it implies that all human fears are derived from love.

This paragraph has a lot of hyphen use.

This girl needs to chill. I have no concept of what her motives are. She's clearly manipulating him, but why? He is having to work hard for his income. There are doubtless other suitors who could give her the lifestyle and attention she desires without having to choose one or the other. Her attitude makes it clear that she isn't interested in him for love either, no matter how much she says she is. She's playing multiple suitors, as evidenced with this Hoffer dude. Clearly she can get almost any man she wants, so why is she bothering the main character?

That statement is so vague, as if he is trying to convince himself that it is true.

Shelley uses hyphens/dashes frequently in this text

more alliteration

Here, Shelley uses alliteration to emphasize

Here, "Immortal" is capitalized and used as a noun, where as in the next line it is not capitalized and used as an adjective.