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  1. Mar 2021
    1. It’s a visual novel, there’s a dialogue box with a nameplate on to indicate who is talking, why the hell do we need the constant ‘she ordered’, ‘he says’, ‘he exclaims’ etc? The box already identifies the speaker. The art is supposed to convey the emotion, the authority or surprise etc. What we have here is a novel where the various parts that make it a visual novel don’t work in tandem with each other, which is the ultimate sin for a visual novel in my opinion. That could be salvaged by storytelling, and indeed, there’s an interesting, if basic sci-fi story here, but the method of telling it is far too amateur, breaking every rule in the rulebook of storytelling, including telling rather than showing. One to avoid.